Stroke of Destiny!!! An OS on JV and Cancer Track

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Jennifer

@jenna_p

Voyager

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#21

You r an awesome writer...👏

Loved the way u portrayed Jeevika's emotion and viren being her strength...

We will never get 2 see such emotions on the show...Thanks for writing...brilliant😊

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Aqibaa_19

@Aqibaa_19

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#22

awesome update... heartbreaking.. i literally had tears in my eyes... i could just picture d scene happening...this is one of d best i have read on d cancer track.. just brilliant...would b so hppy if d track goes this way.. bt i guess d cvs r nt realising d seriousness of d track n d disease...bt once again xcellent...u write so well ayesha..(thats ur name i guess)...

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karpagam rajendran

@Kryanian08

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#23

It was great!!!! very emotional and i could actually visualize it, that's how powerful your work is!!!! 😊 Thank you for this OS!!!! 😊

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Hawa Hawaii

@Hawa-Hawaii

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#24

It just cant get better...AND I MEAN IT!!!!

The first part with Viren...cmng to know...so amazing...Tacker with...Nia, Anju Mahendroo...wow...the scene would have been the best in the show...!!!

the second part...with Jeevika cmng to know...REALLY wish this is how she gets to know...!

Some points...which i loved...loved...loved in ur OS...

1. Jeevika addressing...Manu..as My manu...in the entire 2nd part...bang on...so Jeevika...its been really long having heard it frm her...!!

2. Viren convincing Beeji and chachu to tell Jeevika abt cancer...so want this...i mean for me his character happens to be the most mature...and thinking left rght center even in the worst situations...his standing firm...on Jeevika should know...was very with his character...!

3. Viren going and telling this to Virat...well now if this happens...theres a beautiful direction where the virman love story cn go...especially now viren knowing...tht Virat loves manvi...him telling it to virat is gonna be difficult...!!

4. The background Virman scene also was nice...If now...we see...the scene i guess will be one of the best...of Virmans..with Virat devastated...coz Manvi..his luv is sufferring...and Manvi unaware..of exact feelings...still urging him to stop viren...WOW..!!

5. Lastly the end...with bros giving the sisters privacy...well the scene after tht will EPIC...for the show...!!!

It will be great to see all four of them unite to fight the Cancer with Manvi...this will be much better than seeing the lame hide nd seek being played regarding her cancer.

Thnks a lot for sharing this wonderful OS...with us...!!!

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Kanishka

@LoveforRaya

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#25

awesummm!!!! i seriousllyy dnt hv wrds to tel!!! 👏

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Amii

@Amii90

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#26

I honestly don't understand how to gather both courage and words to commend your work after reading such a powerful piece of work!! Everything I say would seem as showing lamp to the sun!! I was going through the forum earlier at work on my phone when I came across your post as the I was hooked on just by the title; I started reading it and could not stop myself till I finished reading the entire OS. Very FEW writers have the caliber of engaging their readers into their work to such an extent where readers like myself automatically shed tears after completion and YOU have done that with your work, Ayesha! While viewing emotional scenes on TV, it becomes more easier to connect and feel the emotions but it is very difficult to shake readers emotionally through mere words; however, with your OS, I felt as if I watching the actual episode (How I wish the actual cancer revelation track is similar to this or atleast should have been from the scene you commenced your OS from)!!

Each and every word of your OS was etched beautifully, maintaining the essence of the characters and the show!!! Your depiction of Viren in this work- FABULOUS! With Jeevika, it is a given that her reaction to all of this would be something similar to what you have depicted and it needs to be extreme reaction considering that sisters relationship in this show is slated to be EXTRA-ORDINARY! But, my eyes could not hold tears anymore after reading the part where Viren talks to Beeji and Chachu after finding out the truth and also where he talks to Jeevika- his disappointment with them not considering him as part of their family- his concern and love for Manvi- his promises for taking care of Manvi- etc!!! His explicit thoughts of him being a BROTHER to Manvi were well put- moved me to the core! I wish CVs maintain Viren's character similar to what you have done- he would be the biggest support to Jeevika- afterall she also needs a SUPPORT while being a support to Manvi herself!!!

I don't know how hard it is for CVs to calculate these relationship equations that revelation of Manvi's disease would actually make everything much BETTER and smooth to be dealt with!!! Both sisters can cry out their worries and fears and explicitly express their thoughts throughout this treatment process and be there for each other!!!!! As you mentioned, Manvi is bearing all this on her own; yes Beeji and others know, but she needs that ONE person whom she can share her worries with, someone whom she can hug and cry with, someone to support her and promise that everything would work out- all of this love, care, support, maternal concern lies within JEEVIKA!!!!!

I loved how you projected Viren also seeking support from Virat as he himself cannot deal with all this on his own- he has to take care of Jeevika along with Manvi therefore he needs an outlet for his emotions too- all 4 of them combined can be there for each other and be a bigger support group for Manvi!!!! Anyhoo, I am going way too far with my comment which is turning into more of a rant but honestly it baffles me to see CVs butchering this cancer track and damaging the image of sisters relationship!!! But your work has definitely compensated all of that and with this I have gotten some hope that maybe we will get to see your version of OS or something similar on the big screen!!! Again, I fall short of words/adjectives to commend your work but I will just say this- I cry very rarely BUT your words and your narration stirred up my emotions and welled up my eyes!!! A heartfelt thank you for taking out time to write such an amazing piece of work and sharing it with us- I have shared the link of your OS in the Jeevika/Manvi Appreciation thread as I felt that this OS needs to by read by others esp Jeeman fans!!!!

Edited by Amii90 - 13 years ago

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Preethi

@preethis

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#27

hey Ayesha it was superb.. loved it...

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Manal Ali

@.YixingsManal.

Achiever

+ 8

Posted: 13 years ago

#28

Reserved !

well Im sure many have seen ! im disappointed ! n its high time i want Jeevika to know the truth :/ !! so i guess this OS will help me to calm down 😆 !!

so will sure read it :) ! n will edit this spot soon :)