Stroke of Destiny!!! An OS on JV and Cancer Track - Page 5

Originally posted by: nikhilageet

Hey Ayesh🤗 was wondering where you disappeared off to again😉( hope you are well now) Now to get to your OS. i am speechless. You have a way with words that just amaze me. You put into words what we would have loved to see on the screen. Guess the cvs are definately not as talented as you are. The second part choked me up literally. I really felt like I was watching it happen before my eyes. 👏 you were fantastic

Now I know the show seems to be going around in circles and honestly te cvs are not sure themselves what they want to do. They have completely mishandled the whole cancer track and I know a lot of people are totally disappointed with it. I too used to feel this way and used to take it very personally when a show I loved seemed to be getting ruined. But now I remind myself that this is just a show and that the cvs in order to try and compete with all the saas bahu serials forget what the essence of the show is( the sister s love) . Anyway I try not to think too much about it. and just try to enjoy whats salvagable of the show. Get quite irritated that even jeevika and viren dont get any screen time nowadays😕

Anyway before I go on and on about my grouses😆. let me say waiting to read the next part eagerly 😃

Originally posted by: AR_fan1

Wow...👏 What a superb story...

I wish they handle the cancer situation a similar way whenever that may be...I am actually a very emotional person when I watch films and shows and stuff but today I had like a bunch of tears flowing down my eyes throughout the entire thing!!!😭

You have done full justice to the characters and the storyline...I absolutely love it...Probably my fav story so far 😊

I would really like to request you to continue this...Show how they fight the battle of cancer and how Jeevika and everyone else is a pillar of strength for Mannu...Would also love to see the Vadhera's reaction after they find out😊 Especially Swamini bua😈

But thank you so much for this story once again...Excellent job 👍🏼

Originally posted by: jenna_p

You r an awesome writer...👏

Loved the way u portrayed Jeevika's emotion and viren being her strength...

We will never get 2 see such emotions on the show...Thanks for writing...brilliant😊

Originally posted by: fairyland13

awesome update... heartbreaking.. i literally had tears in my eyes... i could just picture d scene happening...this is one of d best i have read on d cancer track.. just brilliant...would b so hppy if d track goes this way.. bt i guess d cvs r nt realising d seriousness of d track n d disease...bt once again xcellent...u write so well ayesha..(thats ur name i guess)...

Originally posted by: kappa08

It was great!!!! very emotional and i could actually visualize it, that's how powerful your work is!!!! 😊 Thank you for this OS!!!! 😊

Originally posted by: tara_211

It just cant get better...AND I MEAN IT!!!!

From where do I begin, Tara? Its always a pleasure getting feedback from you...and this time too...i'm really touched by ur kind words n appreciation 😃

The first part with Viren...cmng to know...so amazing...Tacker with...Nia, Anju Mahendroo...wow...the scene would have been the best in the show...!!!

I KNOOO!! I sooo want a scene with these three...an EMOTIONAL one. Tacker with the 2 strong ladies...now this would be some scene. LOL..dekha, i'm back in my Tacker fangirly mode! 😉
😆😆😆😆

the second part...with Jeevika cmng to know...REALLY wish this is how she gets to know...!

Well...there was a time, when i used to think that the CVs would've planned this Jeevika getting to know track. But i dunno...lately, how the show n characters are ruined...i've no hopes left. 😕

Some points...which i loved...loved...loved in ur OS...

1. Jeevika addressing...Manu..as My manu...in the entire 2nd part...bang on...so Jeevika...its been really long having heard it frm her...!!

This is how I perceive Jeevika...and the sister's bond. She scolds her sis, gets angry on her, n according to "some" ppl, ignores her also 😉...but when there is even a hint of slightest worry...she gets over possessive n protective. And in this case...i felt that it HAD to be MY Mannu n nothing else. 😳

2. Viren convincing Beeji and chachu to tell Jeevika abt cancer...so want this...i mean for me his character happens to be the most mature...and thinking left rght center even in the worst situations...his standing firm...on Jeevika should know...was very with his character...!

Bingo! Most of you know that I LOVE Viren's character...(minus this love guru thing). Like you said, his character was the most mature, sensible...and i loved his objectivity...a man of few words, n speaking only the right thing at the right time...standing up for the right...Gosh, it was such a wonderful CS. And for this OS...or for that matter..for my FF n w/e i'll write...THESE are the traits of Viren. Hence, i had to show him like this. Glad that you liked it 😃

3. Viren going and telling this to Virat...well now if this happens...theres a beautiful direction where the virman love story cn go...especially now viren knowing...tht Virat loves manvi...him telling it to virat is gonna be difficult...!!

Very true. And also, Tara...its not just abt Virman story...the thing is..that the truth has really shattered Viren also. And he needed someone with whom he could share his grief...before he went on to talk to Jeevika. He's very much attached to Manvi...she's like his sister...and knowing the severity ogf the situation, he had to take it out of his system too. Who better than Virat could be there for him...like always. The bro's rapport was shown like this..and this is how i see them. Supporting each other in every good n bad times.

4. The background Virman scene also was nice...If now...we see...the scene i guess will be one of the best...of Virmans..with Virat devastated...coz Manvi..his luv is sufferring...and Manvi unaware..of exact feelings...still urging him to stop viren...WOW..!!

EXACTLY. Although there are no chances, but IF i continue this OS...i have a similar track for MV in mind. Virat's realization of love, coming with this harsh truth...the underlying notion is sooo heartwrenching. I'm glad that you could see this in the OS. Many ppl didn't...n i was like, maybe i couldn't narrate it properly. But you n Sabeeha, both have pointed this out...and i'm really happy 😃

5. Lastly the end...with bros giving the sisters privacy...well the scene after tht will EPIC...for the show...!!!

I personally believe in giving space to other's...even if its ur siblings, ur friends, ur partner...everyone needs space. I thought that it was necessary for the girls to talk in private...take out their grief..talk abt their parents..laugh, cry, share their fears n hopes...and for that Viren n Virat standing there would've been very CV-ish 😉😆...so, i kicked them out of the room 😆

It will be great to see all four of them unite to fight the Cancer with Manvi...this will be much better than seeing the lame hide nd seek being played regarding her cancer.

Ahh...don't get me started on the hide n seek game. It is getting more n more lame by the day.

Thnks a lot for sharing this wonderful OS...with us...!!!

Awww!! I should be thanking you, Tara. You took time out to read it...and commented...i really appreciate it. As always, LOVED your comments n replying to them 🤗

Originally posted by: kanishkakaran

awesummm!!!! i seriousllyy dnt hv wrds to tel!!! 👏

Originally posted by: Amii90

I honestly don't understand how to gather both courage and words to commend your work after reading such a powerful piece of work!! Everything I say would seem as showing lamp to the sun!! I was going through the forum earlier at work on my phone when I came across your post as the I was hooked on just by the title; I started reading it and could not stop myself till I finished reading the entire OS. Very FEW writers have the caliber of engaging their readers into their work to such an extent where readers like myself automatically shed tears after completion and YOU have done that with your work, Ayesha! While viewing emotional scenes on TV, it becomes more easier to connect and feel the emotions but it is very difficult to shake readers emotionally through mere words; however, with your OS, I felt as if I watching the actual episode (How I wish the actual cancer revelation track is similar to this or atleast should have been from the scene you commenced your OS from)!!

I took a lot of time, thinking how and what to reply to your comments, Amii. I was n still am spellbound. Whenever i read ur comments...and try to reply back...my vocabulary ditches me. I really don't know what i'm gonna write...so, plz bear with my rambling.

When i thought of writing this OS...i was very clear in my mind, what i had to write..how i wanted the scene to proceed. But being in this writing business for years, i know that ppl generally like reading light hearted, feel-good stuff. Emotional n serious stories have a very limited readership...still, i wanted to share this here...coz i know a few ppl, who want an emotional handling of this track. I wrote...was apprehensive to post...but still posted. I wasn't expecting much comments on this one...but the response made me feel on top of the world.

And then i saw your comments...i was speechless! I really don't think that I deserve this much appreciation...and i dunno how to express my gratitude for such kind words. I'm overwhelmed, am truly humbled and deeply touched!

It is my absolute pleasure to have a reader like you...who not only read my OS...but also connected with it. Nothing could be more satisfying for me.

When you guys say that you had tears in your eyes...i feel that I could achieve what i wanted to. I mean...i don't want ppl to cry 😆...what I mean is...that cancer being such a critical disease...and a sister n bro-in-law getting to know of it...it is a damn serious thing. If i could maintain even 1% of this seriousness..and could keep the emotions intact...i feel like a winner all the way. So, thanks a lot for instilling this confidence in me...that i was able to do an average job here..and didn't disappoint my readers. 😃

I agree with you, Amii..in fact, recently had a discussion on the same thing with a very dear friend n a great writer...visual medium is much more easier n effective in showing emotions. While writing emotional stuff, one always feels that he/she couldn't do proper justice with words...or may have fallen short in expressing and narrating the scene in words. I know that I also could've done muchhh better...but u're being very kind n generous...i'm glad that you could visualize the scene. 😃

Each and every word of your OS was etched beautifully, maintaining the essence of the characters and the show!!! Your depiction of Viren in this work- FABULOUS! With Jeevika, it is a given that her reaction to all of this would be something similar to what you have depicted and it needs to be extreme reaction considering that sisters relationship in this show is slated to be EXTRA-ORDINARY! But, my eyes could not hold tears anymore after reading the part where Viren talks to Beeji and Chachu after finding out the truth and also where he talks to Jeevika- his disappointment with them not considering him as part of their family- his concern and love for Manvi- his promises for taking care of Manvi- etc!!! His explicit thoughts of him being a BROTHER to Manvi were well put- moved me to the core! I wish CVs maintain Viren's character similar to what you have done- he would be the biggest support to Jeevika- afterall she also needs a SUPPORT while being a support to Manvi herself!!!

Aww!! SOOO glad that you liked my portrayal of Viren. He happens to be my FAV character of the show...a very sensible, mature and objective person, who has a certain amount of depth. In short..he's my kinda character...but sadly, the CVs are hell bent on ruining it..by making him turn into a love guru...n a jobless lawyer 😡

I really wanted and want him to be the bridge b/w the sisters...esp. in this cancer track. That Viren-Beeji-Dr. Mannan scene, from where I got the idea of this OS...How i wish the CVs explore it. Viren has a right to be hurt and disappointed for being kept in dark...and that is what I tried to highlight here. I wanted to show his sensitive side also...and not just Jeevika's. That's why, in the JV part..when Jeevika says abt the monetary issue...he gets upset n angry again. At least, this is how I perceive his character..and want it to be.

Also...agree with you again...he is n will be Jeevika's biggest support n strength and vice-versa. And for Manvi...nothing in the world is more imp than these two. So, its all a tied string...where everyone supports the other. Glad that you liked this in my OS 😊

I don't know how hard it is for CVs to calculate these relationship equations that revelation of Manvi's disease would actually make everything much BETTER and smooth to be dealt with!!! Both sisters can cry out their worries and fears and explicitly express their thoughts throughout this treatment process and be there for each other!!!!! As you mentioned, Manvi is bearing all this on her own; yes Beeji and others know, but she needs that ONE person whom she can share her worries with, someone whom she can hug and cry with, someone to support her and promise that everything would work out- all of this love, care, support, maternal concern lies within JEEVIKA!!!!

Absolutely. You've said it all. Nothing left for me to add. I really hope that the CVs plan this track well. Till now, it has been nothing, but extremely disappointing. Still...they can cover up for some damage at least, when Jeevika comes to know, and how she handles the entire thing. Yes...Manvi is a strong and brave girl...but she needs Jeevika the MOST at this time. I'm no way saying that Jeevika leaves her in-laws and starts living in Hrishikesh...what I mean is...tell the sister already. This hide n seek is damn annoying n unrealistic.

I loved how you projected Viren also seeking support from Virat as he himself cannot deal with all this on his own- he has to take care of Jeevika along with Manvi therefore he needs an outlet for his emotions too- all 4 of them combined can be there for each other and be a bigger support group for Manvi!!!!

Very true. Like i said...i wanted to show Viren's weak side also. The news has shattered him completely...and he had to take it out of the system..and that too, before talking to Jeevika. So, who better than Virat could be there? That;s the kind of bond these brothers share...and i just highlighted it in my story 😊

Anyhoo, I am going way too far with my comment which is turning into more of a rant but honestly it baffles me to see CVs butchering this cancer track and damaging the image of sisters relationship!!! But your work has definitely compensated all of that and with this I have gotten some hope that maybe we will get to see your version of OS or something similar on the big screen!!! Again, I fall short of words/adjectives to commend your work but I will just say this- I cry very rarely BUT your words and your narration stirred up my emotions and welled up my eyes!!! A heartfelt thank you for taking out time to write such an amazing piece of work and sharing it with us- I have shared the link of your OS in the Jeevika/Manvi Appreciation thread as I felt that this OS needs to by read by others esp Jeeman fans!!!!

There i go again. Dunno what to say..i'm really bad at handling appreciation 😆 So, will just say a heartfelt thank you for the generous comments...for praising my work...and for all the encouragement. Hope to interact with u on the forum.

Aww!! Thanks a lot for sharing the link in the AT. I really appreciate the gesture. You thought it worth sharing with others...its really an honor for me.