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priety.priti

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Posted: 8 years ago

#131

Beautiful and adorable...waiting for shravans surprise

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: deltadawn

Thanks dear.

I am at a decision fork here..she has realised almost entirely.. just one big push. But the positioning of diya is such that she cant decide whether to take a plunge. She is a good girl afterall. So my dilemma here is how to not get her totally out of character... 😕

Still working on it.

Okay... But Deepti, why don't u make Shravan j.! Like some guy on this trip attracted to Suman n of course she being naive couldn't understand that! Shravan reacts on that and hv a verbal spat with Suman, and he reveals that diya is not his gf! Though it's very predictable but... Don't mind me giving u suggestions as I am already too connected with your story! (crazy me)

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deltadawn

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Posted: 8 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: Itssanjh

Okay... But Deepti, why don't u make Shravan j.! Like some guy on this trip attracted to Suman n of course she being naive couldn't understand that! Shravan reacts on that and hv a verbal spat with Suman, and he reveals that diya is not his gf! Though it's very predictable but... Don't mind me giving u suggestions as I am already too connected with your story! (crazy me)

Thank you so much dear. know what.. that was on my plan till today morning 😃.

But then I read Orions TS and now if I wrote a Shravan J track... it would be look like copy paste... so idea me badlaav !! coming up soonish. hopefully today itself.

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pinky.padda

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Posted: 8 years ago

#134

awesome update

absolutely brilliant

totally loved it

continue soon

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Lubna

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Posted: 8 years ago

#135

Hey Dips,
Loved this part too. Goa trip is awesome along with the jealously part. So loving it. She can't see Shravan with Diya and also feeling bad for feeling jealous, you portrayed her feelings aptly. Shravan trying hard to control himself, and Sumo trying hard to stay away from him, good contrast. C'mmon make her realize her love for Shravan. We are getting impatient
Overall very well written. Great going 👏

Lubna.

Edited by LubSha - 8 years ago

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: deltadawn

Thank you so much dear. know what.. that was on my plan till today morning 😃.
But then I read Orions TS and now if I wrote a Shravan J track... it would be look like copy paste... so idea me badlaav !! coming up soonish. hopefully today itself.

I read that too! But your track on faking diya as his gf came earlier! And there Suman deliberately danced with Aditya. Here she is naive! But I am sure you will come up with something unique! So I am more eager to know now. Update soon.

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Crazypiya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#137

Yeee
I am tge 1st
Ohhh god it s just too good ... Especially tge way she proposed
Thanx to pushkar.. Talli banane ke liye...
I was scared jab sumo drowned
But finally our hero save her heroine
Not lets wait sumo ko subhe yeh sab kitna yaad rehta tai...
Lovely update...

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reshmanair356

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Posted: 8 years ago

#138

Good heavens. ..can I just take my hat off to you Delta👏

Babe. ..seriously. ..how did you manage this beauty. ..when Sumo had tears in her eyes after the CPR. ..I had a lump in my throat. ..and when she confessed her love to Shravan. ...I had this knot in my chest. ..I could feel the way Shravan hugged her after that. ..I would have hugged similarly as well had it been me..

This is beautiful. ..no other word can do justice to this piece...

And now that you have started writing. ..write and write more!!