PAL PAL DIL KE PAAS TUM REHTHI HO - A Shraman One Shot

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arshuaar

@arshuaar

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

awesome...
beautifully written...
loved it...
... song amazing...

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dhanyata

@dhanyata

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Its so excellent...I now feel this could have been a beautiful ending to the story...so intense, pure bliss...😳

all shades of our shravan are seen. Pouting like kid seeing a suitcase...so cuteee😆 how defensive he is becoming when sumo teases him about his love.

But sumo was also tooo adorable here..always wished sumo to be like this. With all the love, concern and care. How she talked on behalf of chota shraman, as if fighting for their innocent love, as if they were some third person. that was really touching. But it is true, because of older people who were egoistic they should not suffer...right ??

"You all dress like it's Lakme fashion week everyday in the house"...😆 dialogue so sumo likeee...

and without self respect jaap, she is ready to steal shravan's credit card...👏

Their couch arrangements and reason for it is so real, after all 2 bestesttt friends need to get to the next level of hubby wifey relation.

Now starts shravan's trouble 😉 how is he going to steal his darling wife from everyone around her and manage her antics. 😃

Lovely new beginning...indeed...getting a divine feeling of love...which is truly shraman. Hats off.

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Safire

@Safire

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Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Marvelous!!! No more words to describe!!!! I thoroughly enjoyed this!!!! And the song from the movie Blackmail is one of my favorites and was so apt for the story!! How I wish we have songs like this now a days😉 BTW , you being a great writer,can i expect some more stories from you?

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Lifez_Beautiful

@Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Safire
Marvelous!!! No more words to describe!!!! I thoroughly enjoyed this!!!! And the song from the movie Blackmail is one of my favorites and was so apt for the story!! How I wish we have songs like this now a days😉 BTW , you being a great writer,can i expect some more stories from you?

Hi! thank u so much! I'm really glad u enjoyed it!😃

And yep the song is one of my fav oldies! 😃 And yeah very true, these days stress is given too much on music and picturization (which isn't very watchable either🤢) that the lyrics hv gone for a toss! 🥱 But in these old songs we have all three! Beautiful music, lyrics, voice n scenes! 😳

And hehe thanks once again for the compliment😆 Will surely try to write more on Shraman. But till then U can maybe chk out my 2 other Shraman stories from my signature or at the end of the story in pg 1. Hopefully u will like them too. 😳

Bye tc.

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phoenix_edkv

@phoenix_edkv

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Posted: 9 years ago

#15

aww its sooo nice. i loved it. finally shraman are together. thanks for writing a happywala shraman story. please write more. will be waiting to read your next shravan work;)

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Madhu

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Lifez_Beautiful

@Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: sptrno
lovely

Thank u!😃

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Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: maddy_edkv
aww its sooo nice. i loved it. finally shraman are together. thanks for writing a happywala shraman story. please write more. will be waiting to read your next shravan work;)
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Madhu

Hi Madhu,

Thank u! Glad u liked the happy ending.😃 Will surely try to write more... In the meanwhile I hope u hv chkd my other Shraman works esp Pride and Prejudice, I hope u will like that too, do give it a try. 😳

- Luv Niki

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Swarnima

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Posted: 9 years ago

#18

Amazing work!

Loved the way you've connected the story with the song😊

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Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: MysticRiver
very well written..👏

Hi MysticRiver,

Thank u so much !😳

By the way, I keep meeting u in most of the forums I visit and u always give me and everyone else such encouraging feedback for their works, so once again thanks for that! 😃

But I guess its high time I ask u how can I address u! 😛 I always recognize u through ur RK's profile pic! He is my all time fav!😆

-Niki

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Lifez_Beautiful

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Posted: 9 years ago

#20

Originally posted by: Crazypiya
Ufff What am amazing post yaar
U nailed it..
And the way u used the song .. The lyric it's awesome
One my fav kishore da's song...
Loved it

Thank u so much! 😳 It is one of my fav songs too! Lyrics are just soulful, right? 😃

Edited by Lifez_Beautiful - 9 years ago