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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#691

Originally posted by: sptrno
Awww so heart-touching beautiful amazing as always dear so love it...please write as many chapters possible...please don't stop yaar...Reading & Re-reading your stories gives so much peace happiness & positivity so please keep writing dear...Thank you so much

Take care dear

Lots of love hugs,
Spandana

Awww thank you so much Spandana... Love you for this...

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#692

Originally posted by: maddy_edkv
You want to wrap up the story. Like seriously, do you even know how much I like this. I have been waiting for your update like anything. So just load this into your mind Sanjh di that you are not going to discontinue this. Please... please.. Please.
Coming to the update, Shraman's relationship is so tangled.
Awe I'm so sad for Shravan. I'm gonna kill those salesgirls and Alisha, how dare she to talk like that.😡. inke relationship mein kitne problems hai yaar. And Sumo kanaan gayi??? Shravan has to go and find her now and he has to apologise too. Sumo ki to koi galti nahi hai. And what is that one thing he didn't share with her.
Please is baar jaldi update karo. Thanks for the pm.
Love
Madhu

Areee baapre dhamkiii...

You will get to know soon what he didn't share... Will be updating in next 2 hours.

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#693

Originally posted by: Naamika
HEY SAANJH! Thank you so so much for continuing the story. God plz saanjh ko writing ka kida zorse kaate.
Poor shravan! God why this alisha have to poke her nose everytime. I'm sure if sumo had heard whatever alisha said usne toh pakka alisha ki naak tod deni thi but unfortunately use kuch nahi pata here she is again heartbroken. But I know you'll make everything alright.😃

Hey Naamika, just loved your comment... Love ya for this...

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#694

Originally posted by: adityasingh.246
An amazing update ..The way you bring both of their thoughts out is lovely.. His predicament,sumo's fear even in sleep that shravan would leave her,his inner turmoil,she laying down her head on his shoulder and not leaving him .. such beautiful moments..👍🏼Shravan's outburst really gave goosebumps,he did cross the line .. 👏
Shravan's insecurity is very well understood but he needs to be strong enough ..shravan shouldn't hide things from her and talk out to her about his fears and not destroy such a beautiful relationship in doubts .. Sumo being a girl faced her family and society and put love above physical aspects , time and again she reassured that she won't let him down and she loves him and wanna see him recover completely ..But man Shravan is insane , he is breaking her again and again,hurting her when she already told him that he is her life,love and means everything as she is an orphan .. how can he not see her love and doubt it at words of malice by a person who left him at 1st chance .. How can he question her love for him in jealousy with aditya by insulting her character and her true love .. this is really hurting , for true love and such girls are rare to find .. I hope he doesn't push her away forever and lose her coz there's a limit to which even elasticity remains and then breaks .. I wish he finds her before its too late ..😭
Sorry for such a long comment .. couldn't hold back ..and I'm in love with this story ❤️ and ya don't end it so soon plzzz..

Such a lovely comment, thank you so much... And don't mind the long comment, I loved it. Thank you so much for liking this story...

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#695

Originally posted by: sibghat
Like all ways awsome and amazing😊 . I cannot wait for the next update😉😉. Please update soon😛

Thank you so much...

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#696

Originally posted by: Sunain
JUJU!!!🤗
Shorry for being this late😕

Read last three chaps in one go...so unressing thm😳

CHAPTER 14
Juju...😲
That was hell emotional😭
The part when he asked her to leave him...a sharp pain erupted in my heart and i literally cudnt stop my tears.
He did tht just bcoz he thinks hez not apt for her and wont be able to give her Happiness and love she desrves but in actual he really dosent knw how much she wants him and leaving him wud be like killing herself and her life with him wud be joyless all she wud become is a zombie.
The porch Kiss held so much fervency.It clearly showed how much he wants her and loves her.
Tht part was Beautifully Penned!❤️
He himself dosent want to leave her but his physical state dosent allow him to be selfish..thts wht he thinks.
But i believe Sumo itni asani say peecha chornay wali nhi as she Knws her Shravan insideout!😛
This one was a heart aching one🥺
But u penned it Brilliantly!👏

CHAPTER 15
M so speechless...😭
Love can be ur strength and can also be ur weakness if ur Love becomes ur weakness then know u'll lose every battle of ur life.And if it becomes ur strength thn nothing can make u budge from doing whts rite and helps fight every demon heading you.
Shravan just cant stop thinking about is incapibilities and thus decided to lose her..how foolish of him as he himself cant even breath a single sec.
Suman's outburst bout getting married and loving someone else was 👏 Shravan needed a lil taste of his own medicine.
Thn the "Fark nhi parta" part...⭐️
Sumo close to nervous breakdown...not even surprised i mean wht else can u expect from her the girl who only lost her loved ones in her life was now going to lose her reason of esistance her love.Again...first her parents now her soul partner.so debastating for her.
Suman just cant affford to get hurt like tht once again or else she'll broke down into gaziilion unmendable pieces.
Thank God he realised on time tht he cudnt survive without her and won her back.
The kiss was engaging😳
Loved it!
U did a Tremendous Job!...no dout!😉

CHAPTER 16
Now this part made me hell curious😃
Shravan has something to tell sumo😲...i hope he didnt got too intimate with Alisha😕i hope u got wht i meant🤢
Shravan just needs ro knw n umderstand tht love or mairrage is not just being physical its lot more thn tht and there nothimg like hez never gonna be fine he will be and by Sumo's presence and his willpower.All he has to do is have faith in himself and his love.
Alisha...tht Bit**😡...did it all intentionally just to make him more concious...and sadly won
When he said her
"I am sure main jo kuch bhi nhi kar paon ga...Adi hoga tumhare liye..."
I felt so digusted n the slap was well deserved😳mein kheti hon ek meri taraf say bhi laga deni chahiyay thi😡
Sumo missing...ohh thts intuging😃
Cant wait to knw wht happens ahead how he'll face her and finds her. n wht hez hiding from her...so curious to knw😳😆
Plz update soonish😉

Tadaa!!🥳
Woah...Juju..tht was comendble...hell Stupendously Penned!
The way u narrated Shravan's dellima and Sumo's agony...it was Mindblowing!
U killed it indeed!👏
Or ya kya mein sun rahi hoon...u were planning to wrap up the story😲...like srsly...have you gone insane...humaray baray mein tu soocho humara kya hoga...how u even dare to bring such a thought in ur dumb head😡(which is actually not tht dumb as itni Fantablous updates jo deti ho😳)mein phelay hi keh rahi hon mjhy kun se kum das pendra aur chaps tu chahiyay hi chahiyay...Is tht clear...if not thn make it!
Wel the truth is m so into ur story tht i was having the fear of it getting end from a very long time and i really dont want such an amzing story to end so soon so plz kuch time kay leay apnay dimag say wrapup a plan demolish kardo tabtak i'll mentlly prepare myself.
I knw i sound insane n m so sorry for tht.
Plz do update soon and once again for being this late!
Love ya🤗

Take Care!
Lalchi❤️

Oyeee my Lalchi is back... Loved your comment. You know, I was really missing your comments, on my posts... But now you are compensating all...by commenting on all posts. Love ya... N yes, idea of wrapping the story has postponed! And will updating in an hour.

Love

Bunny...

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#697

Originally posted by: Nik03
Hey buddy...
Awesome update ya...!!
The emotional turmoil Shravan is going through is written beautifully dear...!! 👏
Shravan in his insecurity is hurting Sumo badly... 😕
Now Sumo is missing... 😲
Exited to see Shravan's reaction n the truth he was talking about...!!
Thanks for the pm n plz update soonish buddy...!! 😊
Loads of Love n 🤗
Nik

thank you so much... was waiting for your comment... will update in an hour... loads of love to you too..

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Sanjh Bhattacharya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#698

Holla peeps... What's up! Chalo time for a new chapter. Let's see what Shravan will do now, after ruining everything!

This chapter is for Reshmanair365...Hey Reshma.. This one is for you.

And special thanks to Lubna, for the song, Kaabil, which I have used, in this chapter. It's her version of the song, 'main tere kaabil' So a big hug for her.

So was writing this story, either from Shravan's POV or Suman's. But today it will be from Pushkar's.

Chapter 17

"Bhaiya... Bhaiya... " he was sill sleeping soundlessly.

I had to call him for couple of time more. Finally he opened his eyes, and his expression changed from being stunned to fear, might be looking at my face..

"Kya hua..."

"Bhaiya woh.. ."

"Kya Pushkar.. "

"Sumo ka subah se kuch pata nahin chal raha hai, maine kal usse ghar drop kya tha, Preety ne phone kar ke bataya ki, Sumo subah se...Bhaiya aap sun rahe ho na... Bhaiya.. ."

Bahiya Didn't respond, as if he had forgot how to breath! After few seconds, he sighed heavily, pulling his already disheveled hair he said.. "Sab meri ghalati, sab kuch...maine..." suddenly he looked at me..."Sumo thik to hogina...haan Pushkar...woh thik to hogina.. ." he got up from the bed, and ran towards the door. Again suddenly stopped holding the door's handle, and looked at me..."Woh aise kaise jaa sakti hai mujhe chod kar...woh to mujhse...woh thik hogi na.. .Pushkar.. Main... "

I didn't know what to say, "Bhaiya... Aap kahan jaa rahe ho aise.. "

"Main...woh... Sumo ko... ." I just pulled him in my arms, and then I realised, he was shivering!

"Bhaiya...Sumo thik hogi.. .woh Sumo hai.. .koi ordinary ladki nahin! Aap jante ho na...Apna Sumo wrestler, sabki band bajane wali.. ." I tried to pacify!

He jerked away from my hold, "Tu nahin janta Pushkar, Dr Arora ne kya kaha tha.. .woh nervous breakdown uska... Sab kuch meri wajah se.. .sab kuch...maine usse kal... Kaise kya maine.. .kaise kaha maine aisa.. Tu nahin janta maine usse kal.. "

"Mujhe pata hai bhaiya... "

He just looked at me... I sighed.. "Aapne kal nashe ki halat mein mujhe sabkuch bataya tha... Aap mujhse hi maafi maang rahe the... "

He closed his eyes and went to sit on the couch! He covered his face, with his hands, and nodded... " kaise kar diya maine woh sab... Woh ladki mere liye sab kuch chodne ke liye taiyar thi aur main... "

"Bhaiya... Abhi yeh sab sochne ki time nahin hain...humein Tiwari killa bhi jana hai... Aap change karlo...pata nahin wahan kya ho raha hoga! "

Bhaiya got ready in no time, Maa tried to feed him...but he refused, and got out of the house and I was on his heel...but one thing eeveryone of us noticed, that bhaiya was walking more steadily, with firm feet, that too not holding the crutch; as if he was not feeling the pain, which normally arose in his back, whenever he walked without the crutch..

"Pata nahin yeh ladki kahan chali gayi.. ." Preety's mother said with more irritation than worry. "Ekto jawan ladki...uparse bina bataye aise... Sab kuch babuji k wajah se! Kuch zyada hi choot de rakhe hain... "

"Manju please... ." Preety's father seemed genuinely worried.

"Par aise kahan jaa sakti hai woh.. ." I asked to Dadaji..

"Pata nahin beta... Mujhe to kuch samajh nahin aa raha..." he whispered! So much happening for this poor old man! He had lost his daughter and son-in-law. Now his grand daughter! Oh god! How much more he need to witness!

"Hum. Chalte hain... " Bhaiya suddenly said, this was the first time he spoke after coming to Tiwari Killa...

"Pushkar... " Preety called when we were about to get into the car.

"Haan... "

"Yeh mujhe di k kamre se mila... Maine kisiko nahin bataya.. ." she handed the letter and looked at Bhaiya.. "hum sab jante hai di kyun gayi right... It's your to find my sister...aapki stupidity k wajah se...agar meri di ko kuch hua to dekhna.. ." I sighed looking at Bhaiya, who looked more of a defeated man after reading the letter, but I somehow couldn't ask, what was written in it! I was thinking about Preety. Preety always seemed very soft hearted..and that's why I loved her.. .she was not a girl who could be angry or temperamental, at least not like Sumo, but today she really surprised me... She truly loved her sister..

"Pushkar... " he looked at me, he was looking outside till now, from car's window.

"haan.. "

"Ek cheeze tune notice ki... Nanaji kaafi calm dikh rahe the... "

"Calm to honge hi na... Itna bada shock jo laga hai... "

"Nahin... Kuch gadbad hai..."

"Gadbad.. .matlab... "

"Nanaji ko pata hai Sumo kahan hai.. .."

"Aap aise kaise keh sakte ho.. ."

"Pata nahin... Itna calm nahin hona chahiye tha.. ...tu ek kaam kar... Papa ko phone kar ke... Police commissioner ko phone karwa.. .aur nanaji ka phone tap karne ke liye bol..."

"Par bhaiya woh ghalat hoga na bhaiya.. ."

"Fark nahin padta... Mujhe Sumo chahiye har haal mein..aur haan Sumo ka mobile no bhi track karwa... "

"Okay bhaiya... "

"Preety achchi ladki hai... Pasand achchi hai teri... " he patted on my shoulder..

"Bhaiya... Woh... " I fumbled.

"Papa ko phone laga.. ."

It had been three days...and no news of Sumo. She didn't call Dadaji, and as per the police, she had switched off her phone at 11 am that day. We went to airport, railway station, but nothing came out of it.

"Bhaiya.. .." he was standing beside the window, looking at the tree...

He looked at me.. .and I didn't know what to say...his expression, I had seen him angry, and I had seen him arrogant, and once I had seen him in pain. But this...this was beyond agony. His eyes were half-crazed...he didn't glare at me, his eyes said nothing.. He looked at me.. with an expression like someone had lit him on fire. His hands were rigid claws at his side..

"Bhaiya everything will be fine, please don't worry... Aap aise..."

" Sumo thik ho...basss..."

"Bhaiya... Aap... "

"Nahin chote, main kabhi uske kaabil hi nahi tha... I was just... " he turned his face... A song came floating from somewhere near...

Ek baar yakeen mujhpe to kar tujhe chod ke na jaaoonga

Teri kasam tujhse kiya har vaada main nibhaoonga

Par tere bin ek pal bhi jee na paaoonga

Tujhse hi to meri saason me hai zindegi

Main tere Kaabil hoon ya tere Kaabil nahi...

He laughed... "See Pushkar... " and he kept laughing "Sumooo... " and his voice kept echoing,..

November

December

January

In these three months, only one thing happened that was good, bhaiya was now perfectly fine. Neurologist and the physiotherapist both were beyond happy, as if there were going to get Nobel prize for this. And of course maa and papa, but seeing bhaiya's condition ,we all refrained ourselves to show any kind of happiness.

"Bhaiya... Police commissioner ka phone aya tha... " he looked at me... For once his eyes showed some life.

"Unhone kaha ki Sumo called dadaji... Aap bilkul sahi the... Unko pata tha... Bhaiya Sumo Bangalore mein hai... Aur woh kahan job kar rahi hai pata hai...Mr Berry k office mein... Product Management team mein hai woh..."

"Sumooo here I come.. .iss bar mein tumhe nahin khounga..."

"To fir Bangalore chalein? "

"Pushkar... Waise bahut dinon se haumari company ne koi company take over nahin kya na... " he looked at me!

"Nahin...matlab... Bhaiya... Mr Berry humare bahut purane pehchan wale hai.. ."

"Doesn't matter...waise bhi woh company loss mein chal rahi hai...achcha hi hoga unke liye. ..tu tayiari kar... Main papa se baat kar lunga...aur haan tu Tiwari killa mein kisise kuch nahin kahega. Preety se bhi nahin... Main nahin chahta, Sumo ko pata chale ki humein pata chal gaya hai... Woh kahan hai... Okay.. "

"Ladies and gentlemen, this might come as a shock for you all.. .. But M&R company has took over our company... And the best part of this is they still want the same employees... You all know, since last two years, our company has been going through financial crisis. So I am obliged here to call Mr Shravan Malhotra and Mr Pushkar Malhotra.. ."Mr Berry introduced us to more than 1500 standing infront of us, but we couldn't find Sumo amongst them.

"I would like to meet the production management team.. " Shravan bhaiya said in his booming voice..."Meet me at the conference room now. "

"But Shravan aren't you going to give any speech ..."Mr Berry objected.

"Zarrorat nahin hai... "

In between soft murmurs we left the dias. I smiled at the stunned faces around us, and looked at bhaiya.. This was something of bhaiya I missed for a long time.. . The confident, dashing, stylish, brooding, badass businessman The Shravan Malhotra...

The production management team enterd the conference room, but Suman... Bhaiya looked at me, then to Mr Berry, "Everyone is here? "

"Where is Suman... " he looked around..

"Sorry Sir.. Here I am... Woh maine woh project file... " Suman entered...and stopped... She looked at Bhaiya and then at me... And so many emotions went through on her face... From happiness, to sorrow, to love, to anger...

"Suman... Please come in... Please meet Mr Shravan Malhotra and Pushkar Malhotra...new boss of this company... " Mr Berry announced.

Suman looked at bhaiya... And nodded, being a clever girl she understood, it was only because of her, bhaiya took over the company...

"So Miss Suman... Aap andar ayengi ya mujhe dekhte hi rahengi... " Bhaiya smirked, getting up from the chair... And walked around the table, towards Sumo.. .

"Hello... It's nice to meet you... " Bhaiya held her hand..

She looked at bhaiya's legs murmured "Tum aise... "

"Tumne kya socha... Itni jaldi picha chudwa logi iss pagal se... Nahin Sumo..." He whispered too.

I was standing too close to them, I could hear them, but I didn't want other people to know more about them..

"Bhaiya.. Meeting shuru karein... "

After the meeting, everyone went out of the room, but Sumo stayed. "Abhi fatega bomb! " I chuckled.

"Kya... do you want to say something... " Bhaiya looked at her.

"Yeh kya natak hai.. Shravan... " Sumo fumed.

"Natak.. Kaunsa natak..."

"Please Shravan...tum jaante ho maim kis bare mein baat kar rahi hoon! "

"Sumooo... "

"It's Suman for you... "

"Okay Miss Suman Tiwari... Main janta hoon, maine ghalati ki hai... " he got up from the chair and went straight to her... "Par...iska matlab yeh nahin ki tum mujhe chod ke chali jaogi..."

"Shravan... Listen.. I have mooved on... Main sab kuch bhul chooki hoon..aur tum bhi mujhe bhool jao.. .. Please.. So let me live in peace... " she turned to get out of the room.

"Sumooo... " bhaiya grabbed her hand and pulled her ..and I didn't know what to say... I stood there like an idiot...

"Shravan chodo mujhe... " she wiggled.

"Sumo...main tumhe bhool jaun yeh ho nahin sakta.. Aur.. ..tum mujhe bhool jao.. Yeh main kabhi hone nahin doonga..."

So that's it for today... Next chapter will be the blasted one. This one is the base of next chapter.

And yes was watching Dhadkan.. So last mein jo line mara Shravan ne... Usise hai...

So let me know whether you people liked it or not..waiting eagerly for your comments or PMs. And yes... You will get to see this new badass Shravan... Hope you will enjoy.

P. S. As always excuse the typos.

Edited by Itssanjh - 8 years ago

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Wiccamaya

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Posted: 8 years ago

#699

👏 so much pain ... so much love ... but finally they are in front of each other... mind blowing. please update soon... 😊😳 i am greedy for your FF.😳

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Sunain

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Posted: 8 years ago

#700

Res😳

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Juju!!!🤗

Oye hoye...wht a Mindblasting update!

The dialogues were Outstanding!👏

M all blowen away...literally this was aamazing...emotional one too!

Sumo left him...😲...wel she obviously wanted to teach him a lesson but i wonder how she managed to stay away from him for God damn three months...Shravan was all devastated and ashamed of his deed!

Shravan n his smarty brain yaa calculation ecurate ki par Sumo aur apni love life ki calculation mein error...have to work hard on love life equation😆

Ohh his plan...Terific😉...so eager to rectify his mistake i hope he succed in "manaofy Sumo" mission😆...but i also knw tht Sumo teari kheer hai asani say tu manay gi nhi😆😉

M so glad to knw hez all well😃

Whn pushkar said "ab fatega bomb"...this got me into fits🤣

n whn Shravan said..."Sumo..mein tumhein bhool jaon yeh ho nhi sakta...Aur...tum mjhy bhool jao...Yeh mein kabhi honay nhi doonga..."...Stole my heart❤️

This new Bindas Shravan is hell fun...cant wait to knw wht uth patang harkatein he dose to coax her😆

Plz do update soon😉

Love you🤗

Take Care!

Chunna❤️

Edited by Sunain - 8 years ago