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Posted: 8 years ago
#71

Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

Note- This was to be updated today but last night I fell ill and had to be rushed to the hospital,I am better now.Will probably be discharged today or tomorrow morning.Since I have my laptop at home,I cannot update it as half of it has still to be written.

It will be updated within this week for sure.
Sorry for the delay.

Thank You.

-Mitali


Feeling sorry for u. Hope, u r better now. Our prayers are wth u.. Don't worry Dear.. Health comes always first.. Take care & get well soon.. First, U get fit & fine totally, Take time & then only update.

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Poulami :)
Edited by Poulami11 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#72
Get well soon..
take care 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thanks for all the wishes.
Will definitely take care :)


Getting discharged tomorrow finally!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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mittu update can wait...u take care of urself first ...take care sweety...take rest n be careful...love u... God bless u...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#75
Good News!!
Chapter 2 i. e. the last part of this story is being written and it will be updated soon.

Just wait for some more time.

Thank You.

-Mitali
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Posted: 8 years ago
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yaaahhh...🥳
will be waiting
Glad to knw u r back😃
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

<font size="2" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Good News!!</font>

<font size="2" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Chapter 2 i. e. the last partof this story is being written and it will be updated soon.</font>

<font size="2" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Just wait for some more time.</font>

<font size="2" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Thank You.</font>

<font size="2" face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">-Mitali</font>



Hey Mittu! 😊

Are you posting the last chappy tonight?! 😳

If yes lemme know! OK?!

Love
Cas ❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
#78
Hello! First of all sorry to those whom I couldn't reply personally since I fell ill and was disturbed in the middle for quite few days but this time I will try my best to reply to all. This was to be updated yesterday but since my laptop all of a sudden stopped working,I couldn't finish writing.So here it is the second and the very last part of this TS.
No Proof Read.


Chapter 2

Suman was walking towards the main gate of the Malhotra Mansion when she was pulled by someone.

"Ahhaaa"She screamed but was cut short by a hand being placed on her mouth.

"Shhh Sumo,koi sun lega"Shravan whispered.

"Ende"Sumo murmured against Shravan's hand.

"What?" Asked a confused

"OUCH! Oh sorry na"Shravan shrieked in pain as Suman bit his palm,indicating him to remove it from her mouth.

"Mehndi,Shravan Mehndi hai,kharab hojayege.Chodo!"

Suman twisted her in order to free herself from Shravan's grip but failed as Shravan picked up Sumo's palm and brought to his lips and kissed the part of his mehndi where sat his name proudly written in a beautiful cursive.

"Ohhoo,mein marjawa!Meine toh socha ke koi tha joh mujhse gussa tha" Shravan spoke slowly as he nuzzled deep in her neck.

"Hmmm" Suman moaned.

Shravan continued doing his work, he knew how to please his wife.Suman soon realized what he was up to ,she had learnt his doings over these months.

"Sumooo,PAGAL LADKI!" Shravan shrieked in pain as Sumo kicked his leg with hers.

"Ohhoo,meine toh suna tha ke Mard ko dard nahi hota'"Suman smirked.

"Theke,if you want to behave like this then do! Nahi dena koi surprise." Shravan pouted and turned the other side to walk away.

"Aji,Sunte ho ji"Suman called out.It was her chance now to lay her cards of pleasing her husband.

"Areey ruko toh sahi,sunte ho meine kya kaha?" Suman spoke in a heavy marwari accent.

"Aji sorry na ji" Suman spoke in a mere whisper as she traced her finger along Shravan's jawline.

Suman's finger continued playing for some time until she could see Shravan's eyes getting darker and his breathe getting heavier.

"Damn the bloody anger!" Shravan spoke and pulled Suman into a fierce kiss.

Both pulled out to catch up on some breathe,smiling.

"On a serious note Shravan sorry toh meine keh diya but tumne gussa toh mujhe dilaya tha.Sab ke husbands mehndi ke time unke saath the.Even papa was with Maa but tumko toh time he kahan?Court see shaadi karni the!"

"Ohhoo Jaan I am really sorry, but the place I am going to take you to right now will melt you in a second.Dekh lene"Shravan lifted up his invisible collar.

"Achaa Ji?"

"Haan ji.Toh chale?"

"Chalo"

And of they sneaked from Malhotra house amongst all the family members being busy in the celebration that was going to take place in the evening.

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"Surprise Jaan" Shravan said as he carefully removed his hands that were covering Suman's eyes.

Suman looked around to see where had he brought her and her voice was now stuck in her throat.All she could mutter in a whisper was Shravan'.

Her eyes were now watery and tears could make their way down her cheeks anytime now but even after this a small smile was adorning her face.

Suman looked around to see that it was her old house,the very house she had spent her childhood in,the very house which was built with happiness,her parents. Nothing was more dear to her than those memory she had spent here,those memory which probably comprised half of her happy ones.

If god could grant her one wish she would have asked for those memories to return back to her and today being her right next to Shravan seemed to have fulfilled that.

"Sumo,yeh tha voh kaam because of which mein mehndi ke time tumhare paas nahi reh saka.Yeh raha gift tumhare liye...mere taraf see" Shravan grinned.

"Shravan but..." Sumo stopped as the tears now made his way down her face and she sobbed happy tears.

"Areey mera Sumoo" Shravan smiled and stepped towards her and engulfed her in a tight hug.

Suman cried her heart out,resting her head on his chest while Shravan kept comforting her,telling her that he was there by her now and so would the happy memories too.

"Sumooo"

"Hmmm" Suman whispered against his chest.

"Mera shirt"

"Hmmm kya?"

"Sumo,shirt chodo.Tumhare aasoonon ke wajah see pocha ban gaya hai.Lagta hai kal Ramu Kaka ko dena padega"

"Huh!?"Suman hit Shravan's chest with her fist and moved back.

"Par Shravan yeh sab kyun?"

"Areey mere jaan" Shravan cupped Suman's face and continued speaking.

"Dekho,aaj karva chauth hai and aaj ke din har husband apni wife ko kuch na kuch deta hai yeh hai tumhara gift" said Shravan lightly hitting his forehead with Suman's.

"Par out of all why this?Why this house and no jewelry,saaree or such a thing?"

"Dekho,mere Sumo is one of a kind,ekdum hatke so uske liye gift toh bhi ekdum hatke hona tha na.After all it should be upto the level with my Wife! Achaaa...on a honest note yeh sab cheeze,jewelry,saare,money..yeh sab toh materialistic things hai.Inse kya hai?Materialistic cheezoon ke materialistic khushi but mujhe toh mere jaan ko dil waali muskaan dene the and mujhe pata hai ke brining back the best and happy memories to her is the only thing that will make that happen.Honestly Sumo, tumne mere liye fast rakha hai,mere lambi umar ke liye but agar mein tum khush he nahi rahoge toh mein karoonga kya?Umar,Zindagi yeh sab toh chaiye but happiness is way above all after all only when Suman's lip curve up does Shravan's sun shines"

"I basss..." Suman couldn't finish speaking as tears again made their way down her cheeks.

"Love You,I know" Shravan completed and planted a kiss on her temple.

"Chalo mere saath" said Shravan as he led her to the swing set in the home.

Shravan carefully pulled Sumo in his lap,his chin resting on her shoulder blade and his arms wrapped protectively around her. And so both spent the afternoon seeking peace in each other's arms surrounded by love and happiness.

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"Bohut lucky hai na tu?" Asked Suman who was lost looking at her husband who stood at some distance from her talking to some relatives.

"Huh? Kya?" Suman now came out of her trance and shifted her attention towards Pushkar.

"Meine kaha bohot lucky hai tu.Shravan bhaiya jaisa bohut kam ko milta hai"

"Pata hai" Suman smiled,feeling proud.

"Bohut pyaar karte hai na voh tujhse?"

"Haan"

"Pata tha.Dekh Sumo bhaiya ko dekh.Unki aankhen dekh, aur bata ke tujhe kya dikhta hai.Ruk! Mein batata hoon.Pyaar aur voh bhi sirf tere liye.Bohut pyaar karte hai voh Sumo tujhse aur tujhe kush dekhne ke liye kuch bhi kar sakte hai,kisse se bhi lad sakte hai,yaani khud tak see lad sakte hai. Unka dil ab unke liye nahi but tere liye dhadakta hai Sumo,tere liye.Meine dekha hai ke kaise unke chere par ekdum se muskaan aajati hai bas tujhe dekh kar specially jab tuu khush ho jaati hai and kasie voh pareshan ho jaate hai tujhe udaas dekh kar.He loves you more than anything Sumo yaad rakhna.Just like there comes no day without a sun even there comes no Shravan without Suman."

"Hmm" Sumo couldn't help but smile.

"Ab mein chalta hoon,Preeti bula rahi hai" Pushkar started moving in the other direction."Aur haan suun! Bhaiya see ek baar pooch lena ke unhone subhah see kuch khaya hai ke nahi" Pushkar winked.

This statement of Pushkar left Suman very confused. What had Pushkar meant and why will Shravan not eat anything from the morning?He loved food specially when she made it.' Suman thought.It then struck her that she had not seen Shravan eating anything since the morning and even avoiding water whenever anyone asked him.HE HAD FASTED AND SHE HADN'T KNOWN IT TILL NOW! WOW! Now she just needed to go to Shravan and get the conformation.

Suman walked to where Shravan stood at the corner of the terrace gazing at the sky and said," Shravan,mujhe kuch poochna hai."

"Shhh Sumo! Abhi nahi.Dekho chand nikal gaya hai.Aooo."

And the procedure began.Through the channi did Suman see the moon first and then her husband whose smile radiated the light of the moon.She indeed was very lucky to have him in her life.Puja followed after that and it was now the husbands turn to make their wives drink water and feed something.

Shravan made Sumo drink water and when he was about to feed her something,Sumo stopped him and said,"Nahi Shravan,mujhe kuch khilane see pehle lo tum yeh paani piyo.Subah se na kuch khaya hai na kuch piya hai!"

"Tumhe kaise pata?"asked Shravan,now confused.

"Pushkar ne bataya. But ab mujhe Why' ka answer chaiye" Demanded Suman.

"Voh actually tumne mere lambi umar ke liye yeh fast rakha hai but agar tum in umar mein,aane waali umar mein mere saath hogi he nahi toh mere lambi umar ka fayeda hoga he kya! Bas isleye." said a smiling Shravan.

"Shravan " Suman shook his head and dived in for a hug.

Shravan lifted up Suman in his arms and off they set for their room to meet the moments that awaited them while Pushkar watched them,smiling.His Bhaiya Bhabhi were definitely EK DUJE KE VAASTE.

Hope you enjoyed reading this as much as I enjoyed writing this.Do leave your likes and comments below.All criticism is welcome.

Thank You.

-Mitali❤️

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Res!
Yaaay!
Me first!😃
Edited by AbhilashaM - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Res

Yeh post kyu nahi ho raha!!! 😲
...
Hehe hogaya post!

Mittu 🤗
This was sooo adorable! 😳
Shravan saying, "Ohoo, mein marjawa!"
How would it have looked on-screen? *sigh*
Sumo biting and kicking Shravan on Karva Chauth 🤣
Mard ko dard nahi hota! 🤪
How I wished to hear that again from our ShraMan
'Aji sunte ho' 😳
Haaye!! Mein marjawa!!
Remember when Shravan had said "Sumo khud se shaadi karegi..."?
We got Sumo's rant today! 😆
"Court se shaadi karni thi" 🤪
"...happiness is way above all after all only when Suman's lip curve up does Shravan's sun shines" ❤️
Are you for real?!! Wow 👏
Shravan fasting for his Sumo 😳
I knew it!! 😛
Another 'Wow' moment for me was when Pushkar said...
"...Just like there comes no day without a sun even there comes no Shravan without Suman."
You just summarized ShraMan here! 😳

All in all...just loved it! It was worth the wait! 👍🏼

Keep writing!

Love
Cas ❤️

P.S. Though I was expecting something else, I am not complaining! Nup!! Not at all!! 😉 😆
Edited by Castile2 - 8 years ago

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