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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Gurveen

Fantastic
They are back as best friends with husband wife relationship

Thank You ! :)
Yes , I wanted to write about their easy friendship , how it naturally comes to them , it is instilled in their souls and they love each other so much , as friends and even more as lovers. 😳

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Posted: 8 years ago
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@siliya , @jazmeen , @evaviego , @jesi15 , Thank you all ! Means a lot :))
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: dhanyata

Sumo and shravan...what a couple yaar...most well written characters of any shows or movies, i would say. And you bring all the cuteness together for them. The dialogues👏..omg those are like 100% theirs. This is how our shrav and sumo will talk like. Can imagineee it well😳. You must be living them to write like this. Super good. But have to wait for 1 week more...it's okay. Please keep them coming

Aww , Thank you so much ! Means a lot ! :))
Yes , I do envision then , I imagine them while writing , that is the whole point of writing this story 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome writer you are👏this is turning out to be a nice story!!! while reading your story, i can very well imagine shraman talking your dialogues!!! please update soon!!!
And sumo getting jealous with her halwa--- hahaha!!!!i loved that'
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: donottulip

Thank you ! :))
Yes , last week I could , this week was super busy I did not have time at all.
I have exams this week so I will probably update next Friday. 😊


Best wishes for your exams!!!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#86

Hey guys !😊

How are you all ? I hope you had an amazing week :) How was Diwali guys ?

Belated wishes to everyone who was celebrating.😳

Coming to the story , thank you. All of you. So very much. You guys were so kind , reading your comments truly makes me happy and makes me want to write even on my busiest days.

So here it is , an update during one of my busiest weeks , what with all the assignments and tests and presentations.

Hope it is not disappointing. Please keep commenting , makes my day.( and sleepless nights too hehe).

do read them , I will reply to them as I get the time.So here goes..

Also , for PM's , please send me a buddy request ! I will send out PM's to everyone who likes and comments :))

Suman woke up to voices. Loud voices.

"Ye Shravan aur Suman itni jaldi kaam pe chale gaye ? Bahadur , tumne unhe naashte ke liye poocha ya nahi ? Ramu kaka , Aapne unke liye kuch bhi nahi banaya ? Ghar ke bacche bina naashta kiye ab kaam pe jayege ? Batao ab" , Kamini chachi yelled at the house helps , annoyance dripping from her tone .

"Woh ... madam ji"

"Kya hai Bahadur ? jaao kaam pe lag jaao. Mera sar aur na khapao"
" Mein toh abhi aaya kaam pe, maaf kar dijiye , aaj thodi der ho gayi , bacchi ko school bhejna tha , uska pehla din tha"

" Thodi der kehte hai isse ? 11 baj rahe hai. Koi nai , jaao ab jaldi jaldi haath chalao"

Suman tried pushing herself further into her pillow , trying to block out the voices.

"OH SHIT !"

"It's 11. Oh My God , how could I sleep so much."

She woke up with a start , trying to get out of Shravan's hold.

" Arre yaar , haath hai ya loha."

"SHRAVAN!"

Shravan covered his ears , slowly waking up. He sat up on the bed ,squinting due to the sunlight in the room , staring at Suman. The sunlight made her face glow , her hair shone as the light bounced off it.

"Good Morning" , he smiled at her.

"It is too early in the morning , stop screaming in my ears , Madam"

" Too early ? How are you going to run a law firm at this rate ? 11 baj rahe hai aur sahabzade ki subah ab ho rahi hai", she said , hands on her hips , bangs on her face , eyes narrowed at him.

"WHAT ? What the hell ? Sumo why didn't you wake me up ? I had a meeting at 10. "Shit shit shit" , he scrambled off the bed, leaving it in a huge mess, and looked for his phone.

" Ha Ha, nice question." , she answered sarcastically. "Because I just woke up. I have never slept in for so long. I always wake up early ,get ready and get everyone's breakfast ready too. Ye sab tumhari wajah se hua , Qutub Minar.", she blabbered.

"Accha ? And how is it my fault ? Late uthi tum , galti meri ? Waaah Sumo." , he said , shaking his head.

"I have never had such a comfortable sleep okay ? Excuse me for not having slept with any guy before.", she fired at him , gathering her clothes and other stuff, not even realizing what she was saying at this point.

Shravan could not believe his ears. What was his spitfire of a wife saying ? He needed a minute to gather himself.

"Accha ?" , he smirked at her. "So I was your first ?"

Suman halted , hands in midair , filled with essentials , suddenly realizing what she had said without meaning to. She gulped and slowly turned to face him , her heart racing and face red.

" well , we didn't technically , you know", she tried explaining , hands moving around wildly.

"Did you want to ?" , he asked , thoroughly enjoying himself.

"Didn't you have a meeting ?" , she snapped , as the haze on her brain cleared.

"Oh haan. Let me see"

"13 missed calls", he groaned , "Ye client toh gaya mere haath se"

They showered and freshened up , separately , and ran down the stairs only to find everyone at home. Staring at them. Dumbfounded. Confused. Speechless.

They looked around confused , why was everyone at home at this time ? Did no one have work ?

Kamini chichi decided to break the silence , "Aap dono abhi uth rahe ho ?"

Shravan cleared his throat. "Haan , who chachiji , kal raat ko der se soye toh isliye", he trailed off.

"Hain ? Tum dono der se soye ? Kya kar rahe the itni raat ko ?"

Pushkar came forward and held his mother by her shoulders , "Mumma , aap newly weds se pooch rahe ho ki woh raat ko kya kar rahe the ?"

Kamini chachi blushed , "Woh, kya haina, ... Chup kar besharam." , she pulled his ear.

"Arre waaah , cheti cheti ek aur khush khabri suna diyo. Kyun Soniyo ?", Lalaji spoke up , smiling that infectious smile of his. Everyone else cheered.

Shravan looked downright embarrassed and Suman wanted the ground to open up and swallow her up.

"Accha bas ho gaya , puttar ji , kal shaam ko humne tum dono ke liye reception rakha hai , vyaah na sahi , reception toh hume de do. Suman , aaj na tu jaldi ghar aa jaana. Aur Shravan tum bhi. Shopping jaana hai."

"Okay Chachiji , I am getting late , I will see you in the evening", Suman whisper-replied, and rushed out the front door. She sat in the car , took a deep breathe and looked at her reflection in the rearview mirror. Cheeks flushed and eyes sparkling , she realized she looked happy after ages. Truly happy. "Mr Shravan Malhotra , its time to give you a gift. Bohot ho gaya tumhara drama , I will show you what it feels like to be flustered."

"Bye Chachi", Shravan left for work , a happy smile on his face.

Ramnath looked on , his frown deepening , his worry reaching new heights. What should he do now ?

"Aisa kya ho gaya inn dono ke beech , aaj itne khush lag rahe hai , kal tak toh ek dusre ka murder karne ki soch rahe the. Aisa bhi kya hua kal raat ?" , chachi muttered to herself. "No, this is not done , they cannot be fine so fast , Bhaisaab ka sach Shravan ko batana hi padega , aise kaise rukne dungi mein use yahan ape , Malhotra & Associates ka maalik toh mera Pushkar hi banega."

12:03PM Come pick me up at 5.

1:37 PM Did you have lunch ?

2:01 PM What about the client ?

2:18 PM Why are you not receiving my calls ?

3: 37 PM Did you have lunch ?

3: 44 PM Are you coming ?

4:44 PM I am waiting , Shravan.

7 missed calls : Sumo.

"Hello"

"Hello ? HELLO ? Kabse tumhe call kar rahi hu , phone utha nahi sakte the ? I was worried. Qutub Minar kahin ke , ek minute nahi tha tumhare paas phone check karne ke liye ? You irresponsible rat !"

And that was it. Shravan burst out laughing ; his apology went for a toss as he sat there , on his chair , clutching his stomach and laughing.

"HOW DARE YOU ? I am annoyed and worried aur tum has rahe ho ?"

"Rat ?" , he managed to get out in between his peals of laughter.

"You could not have used a more wrong adjective for me"

"Oh God , Sumo" , and he burst out laughing again.

Suman smiled listening to him laugh carelessly , like a kid , with no care in the world.

"Earth to Suman ! Helllo.. Sumo ? Are you there ?"

Suman shook herself free of her thoughts , "Haan , sorry , I was looking for something."

"For what?"

"Haaan ?"

"You were searching for what ?"

"Oh , woh , for my lipstick"

"Kyun ? Client ko impress karna hai ?"

"Kuch bhi ! Shut up Shravan , bakwaas band karo aur mujhe batao when are you picking me up ?"

"Didn't you take your car ?" , he asked , confused.

"I did. It broke down. Tow truck mangwa ke car repair ke liye bhej di hai"

"Kab tak uss khatara ko chalogi ?"

"Until I deserve a new car. Plus , I love my baby" , she replied , smiling even though he could not see her.

" I am sure you will love our baby when it is here but we need to do a lot of work on it."

" OhMyGod , one more stupid word comes out of your mouth , and I will sell you on Amazon.com. Apne liye woh nayi car bhi khareed lungi phir.", she threatened.

"What ? Tum pagal ho Sumo." , he said trying to control his laughter.

"Accha , be ready in 15 , I am going to come pick you up."

"Hello ?"

"Nirmala ?"

"..."

"Ramnath ?"

"I want to meet you."

"I don't want to do anything with you.Just keep my son happy. I am happy watching him from afar."

"You don't have to , not anymore"

She let out a sarcastic laugh.

"Are you out of your mind ? Why now ? He will never want me back."

"You don't know that , Nirmala."

"No , I do. He is grown up now. He does not need his mother. Not anymore. I saw how much he hates me. Who mujhse nafrat karta hai , Ram. I just want him to be happy. He has the one thing he has longed for ten long years. Just keep him happy and I will be at peace."

"I will never be at peace. Please , Nirmala."

"It was your doing. I would love to see how hell goes down in your life , because of your own deeds, all over again. Goodbye , Ramnath"

And she slammed the phone , tears streaming down her cheeks , her heart aching for that child she had left behind , for her loneliness , for her heartache , for the void in her heart , that could never be filled.

Okay Guys , I know literally nothing happened in this chapter , but please be patient with me. I am going through the busiest phase of my life and it is becoming increasingly impossible to find time for myself.

The next chapter is half written. Plus , this chapter was supposed to be completely different but when I started writing , this is all I could come up with.

Next Update on Tuesday , Promise !

Have a nice week you all.❤️

Hugs ,🤗

Sanober

Edited by donottulip - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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brilliant update
totally loved it
superb
continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hiii Sona...(i hav given u a cute nick name hope u won't mind me calling u Sona 😳 )

Wel coming to the upii...
Tht was brilliant one... ⭐️
really loved sumo ki batoon ki train...n Shravan teasy antics were damn damn cute ❤️
Really loved the way he always manage to fluster her 😳...i see its becoming his hobby 😆
N sumo is planning to take a revenge...so so so much fun... 😆
Ramanth is like a danger bell... 😡
Still worried bout the fact tht Shravan still hadn't tell her the truth bout Aditiya... moreover Kamini ki planning plotting bhi shuru...such a greedy woman she is 😡

All in all i enjoyed it..love u Sona 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dear Sanober, I just read the parts 2,3 and 4 , such a treat to read.
I love the ShraMan conversations plus the overly doting wife in Sumo. You write really well, thoroughly enjoyed it. Sorry for the delay in reading the other parts, I had this in my list but have been lagging behind in my reading 😕

About this part, sometimes it is necessary for the story to just build up, as I can see you are moving towards the Nirmala-Ramnath issue, so this build up is needed and yes, we don't always write what we started to write, characters decide what they do 😉

Once again, loved it ❤️


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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sunain

Hiii Sona...(i hav given u a cute nick name hope u won't mind me calling u Sona 😳 )

Wel coming to the upii...
Tht was brilliant one... ⭐️
really loved sumo ki batoon ki train...n Shravan teasy antics were damn damn cute ❤️
Really loved the way he always manage to fluster her 😳...i see its becoming his hobby 😆
N sumo is planning to take a revenge...so so so much fun... 😆
Ramanth is like a danger bell... 😡
Still worried bout the fact tht Shravan still hadn't tell her the truth bout Aditiya... moreover Kamini ki planning plotting bhi shuru...such a greedy woman she is 😡

All in all i enjoyed it..love u Sona 🤗


Aww that's so sweet of you !
Ofc you can call me Sona 😳

I am glad you are likimg the story , that is what motivates me to write.

Ahaaan , Aditya part ?

Actually , I had made a huge ass mistake in the first two parts , and somehow no one noticed it but I went back and edited it so yeah :P

Go read the first two parts again ?

Thank You so much ! :))

Have a nice week ahead 😃

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