ShraMan OS: Tears and Confessions

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PrincessAshVik

@PrincessAshVik

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Ishqbaaz
That was marvellous!!!
Brilliant... beautiful!! ❤️
Sigh!! Koi jaake yeh CVs ko dikhao!!! *sigh*
Loved every single word... the way u have expressed all they might have felt is so beautifully written and ur vocabulary id fab!!
Keep writing darling 😳

Aww thank you so much!! Really sweet of you😳

I will try writing more on them, if I get the ideas😳😆

Thank you again, really appreciate it😊

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PrincessAshVik

@PrincessAshVik

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Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: nuttynuts
Awesome! Please continue!

Thank you so much😃

I am not sure if I can continue this...But I am currently writing a drabble series if you want to check that out (if you haven't seen it already)

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Lara / Clara

@devilaonmoon

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Posted: 8 years ago

#33

RES

🤗

Wow!

UNRES

aakhir mil hi jaate hain jho banein ek duje ke vaaste...

👏👏👏

You've created a superb ending with that verse. I love stories and the chapters in it consisting such banging ends, it makes the entire shot even more appealing. And you've done so with their confession, a realistic step with saying how there're problems still unsolved - it literally makes a reader crave for more... those loose ends you know. 🤗

And I'm craving for more now. It would be awesome so, if you continue. 😳

The emotions are expressed very well.

Shravan's suffering which has reached it's limit was aptly and very beautifully written.

Great job.

And I love tears! But I also love happy endings!

And you've given both. 🤗

Keep writing such awesome pieces.

Going to read your drabble series soon.

Take care.

Love,

Lara.

Edited by devilaonmoon - 8 years ago

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Nik03

@Nik03

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Hey dear!!
I know am kinda late in commenting but better late than never!!
I seriously LOVEDDD it dear!!
Shravan's outbrust was a must!!...He needed to let out everything he had kept within himself for so long n u just nailed it 👏 ..
Sumo coming to her Shravan leaving everything behind just to be there for him...It was soo heart touching!!
Aww Shravan cried...n Sumo hugged him ❤️
I Loved the simple confession by Sumo!! 👏
Confession doesn't need to be a fairy-tale story type, ...N in ShraMan's case, the 3 words by Sumo were a must to console Shravan who was broken badly!!
Those 3 words gave Shravan everything he needed!!...Well done bro!!
I just Loveddd the ending...There were so many MU n issues btw them to solve, many hurdles to cross but now they were together n that's what matters the most...!!!
How I wished we could see all this on the show itself but first CV's n then Sony tv butchered it badly n we got a rushed confession within just 5 min...
Thank u for this masterpiece dear!! 👏
N plz plz do write more on ShraMan...Would loveee to read!!
Loads of Love
Nik

Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago

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Safire

@Safire

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

Sorry for being late!!!! This was excellent!!!

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evaviego

@evaviego

Dazzler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Amazing...!!!

Beautifully penned...

Loved it...!!! ❤️

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PrincessAshVik

@PrincessAshVik

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon
RES

🤗
Wow!

UNRES

aakhir mil hi jaate hain jho banein ek duje ke vaaste...
👏👏👏
You've created a superb ending with that verse. I love stories and the chapters in it consisting such banging ends, it makes the entire shot even more appealing. And you've done so with their confession, a realistic step with saying how there're problems still unsolved - it literally makes a reader crave for more... those loose ends you know. 🤗
And I'm craving for more now. It would be awesome so, if you continue. 😳

The emotions are expressed very well.
Shravan's suffering which has reached it's limit was aptly and very beautifully written.

Great job.
And I love tears! But I also love happy endings!
And you've given both. 🤗

Keep writing such awesome pieces.
Going to read your drabble series soon.

Take care.
Love,
Lara.

First of all, I am really really sorry for replying so late. I am really embarrassed.

And thank you so so much for such a sweet comment!!!🤗

I did not want to make it a 100% happy ending, because that would have been unreal and impractical. They've been through so much! They need more than just one emotional breakdown and some alcohol taking it's effect😳 hence the end. It really means a lot coming from a writer like you😳

I wish I could continue, but my brain shuts off when I try

Thank you. I am glad I could write well enough to express the pain, the anger which had reached its peak.

I also love tears and happy endings, which is something I always thought ShraMan and especially Shravan should have😳 (I kind of became partial towards him round about Aditya Sumo wedding track😳)

I hope you manage to read the drabble series, I have also written another OS.😳

Thank you so so much Lara🤗

Much Love!!!

P.S: I know I am yet to unres on your FF, I will soon...

P.P.S: Thank you for nominating me in the forum awards of Nov😳😳

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PrincessAshVik

@PrincessAshVik

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: Nik03
Hey dear!!
I know am kinda late in commenting but better late than never!!
I seriously LOVEDDD it dear!!
Shravan's outbrust was a must!!...He needed to let out everything he had kept within himself for so long n u just nailed it 👏 ..
Sumo coming to her Shravan leaving everything behind just to be there for him...It was soo heart touching!!
Aww Shravan cried...n Sumo hugged him ❤️
I Loved the simple confession by Sumo!! 👏
Confession doesn't need to be a fairy-tale story type, ...N in ShraMan's case, the 3 words by Sumo were a must to console Shravan who was broken badly!!
Those 3 words gave Shravan everything he needed!!...Well done bro!!
I just Loveddd the ending...There were so many MU n issues btw them to solve, many hurdles to cross but now they were together n that's what matters the most...!!!
How I wished we could see all this on the show itself but first CV's n then Sony tv butchered it badly n we got a rushed confession within just 5 min...
Thank u for this masterpiece dear!! 👏
N plz plz do write more on ShraMan...Would loveee to read!!
Loads of Love
Nik

Hey Nik😃

I am really sorry for the delay in replying and please do not apologise for commenting late😳

Thank you so much for such a lovely comment😳

It was all pentup. The 10 year long pain all in his heart which made him hurt so much! All that anger towards her because he felt she had still not changed. That she used him back then, she used him again. What kind of a person was he? Once bittten, twice shy did not apply to him because he fell for her, even deeper. Hence the punching the wall and the drinking.

Simple confessions are always the sweetest. Because they scream out the feelings of the person saying it. Not saying that fairy tale like ones don't scream out feelings😉😆 But there's something sweet and beautiful about simple confessions. And here Sumo needed to say it. Only those 3 words gave Shravan so much. It gave him assurance. Hope. Faith. Trust and courage to confess his love for her to her. This was so so needed in the show. I will never forgive the CVs for what they did. They ruined such a beautiful love story.

I wish the CVs could have shown us something similar. Where they get together and solve their way through their problems instead of the trash they made us sit through! Anyway, it's way too late

now

Once again, Thank you so much dear 🤗