EDKV ..An Adaptation-PART 5 updt on P 12 - Page 4

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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: orion23

Read both the updates in one go!

Loved them..
Interesting concept..
Can't wait to read the next part😳



Thank you so much for reading both the parts. I am not gifted like other writers in the forum but I tried :)

Also I will update the next part and will look forward to your feedback
Thanks again :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#32
This is going way too good.
You are making it look so real and simple.
Just like what an episode goes like.
And I am really happy that you haven't shown a lovey dovey Shraman all at once
I loved it 👏

Continue soon

-Mitali❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: SleepyPsycho

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">This is going way too good.</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">You are making it look so real and simple.</font>
<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Just like what an episode goes like.</font>
<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">And I am really happy that you haven't shown a lovey dovey Shraman all at once</font>
<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">I loved it👏</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">Continue soon</font>

<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif">-Mitali❤️</font>



Thank you so much . :) that's my plan to keep it simple as I am not a good writer just want to give story my take . I shall post the next by today thank you :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: Nishtha



Thank you so much . :) that's my plan to keep it simple as I am not a good writer just want to give story my take . I shall post the next by today thank you :)


Don't underestimate yourself. You are a brilliant writer👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35
@Mitali : thank you so much for encouraging words thank you thank you 🤗

I just want to end the story by tomorrow night and will make sure that they unite but I will have a very different take on that hopefully you all will like it :)

Thanks again
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36
Nice one...slowly it's becoming interesting ..thanks fo pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#37

Originally posted by: Zenab78

Nice one...slowly it's becoming interesting ..thanks fo pm


Thanks for reading and commenting planning to update the next chapter today
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
Ramnath the villain
I so hate him right now
I just want to throttle him
But i'll leave that for you🥱
So it was wonderful on the whole
And please continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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superb
absolutely loving this story
continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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EDKV ..Part 3
Sharvan has come back to his house and briefing Ramnath " the meeting went well and now we have to give the second presentation in Mumbai " thats great son I trust you do you want Pushkar to accompany you to Mumbai ? No I will manage actually one of the lawyer from their side turned out to be my friend from London who is helping SN industry..oh thats even better news as we now have a better chance at winning..Shravan looks little amused at his father's desperation to win this client.

Papa May I ask you something if you dont mind.? . go ahead son retorts Ramnath .. why you want to win this client?

Ramnath replies actually they are going to be one of the biggest client of ours, moreover their international assignments will add good image for us who knows even we can go global after few years.

Ok Papa let me go and sleep I am planning to leave tomorrow night. As I have to study about the company as well. Good night son

Back to Tiwari Killa..

Sumo has reached home and Mami has got the news that she won 4 Lakh rupees contract. Mami ji ask Sumo to sit and have tea as she must be tired ..Sumo feels surprised no mami jee I can do it myself but feel helpless at constant demand to be seated.

Mami comes and sit near Sumo : so the money that you got today are you going to spend all ?

*Sumo : * now understand the reason behind the sudden change in behaviour of Mamiji *

But maintaining her composure she replies no Mami ji I am planning to deposit the money in my bank account . oh cmon you have so much of debt I thought you will give me some money towards Preeti's marriage . Ok Mami ji I will give you 2 lakhby tomorrow that's like my niece.

Sumo reluctantly gets up and goes to her room.. oh I have to clear the mess also... as soon as she enters her room she gets reminded of Shravan and how they used to spend time here.. Why cant we be together why so much of hatred between us?I only wanted to to bring Shravan close to his mum... she is lost in her thought when it starts raining and mausi shouts.. Sumo take out your clothes from courtyard ...jee Mausi jee Sumo shouts back...

On the other hand..Shravan is standing at his room window enjoying the first rain of this season..and remembers Sumo when they were kid..." Young Sumo pulls young Shravan into the rain..they sing and dance " Suddenly Shravan shrugs himself no I cant do this...I cant let my past my memories rule over me.. What Sumo did was very wrong she crossed all the limit this time and I will not forgive her this time..and goes to bed to sleep...

Next Morning...

Sumo gets up late thanks to sleepless night she just had...suddenly her phone rings she anticipate Sharavan's call but its preeta on the line..

She answer the phone What happened Preeta why you called me this morning.? Sumo come to PCT now its urgent... sensing some trouble she runs leaving behind her bag

On reaching PCT she spots police jeep along with couple of cars and could hear them throwing things around.. What are you doing with my belongings how dare you touch them!!

Lawyer suddenly comes in between...looking at Sumo he says Madame your office is going to be sealed at courts order ,but.. but nobody informed me nor given me any notice well we have sent the notice to your land lord and its his responsibility to inform his tenants ... no sobbing Sumo asks for court orders if she can read it.. you may says Lawyer.. its says due to on going dispute my client has asked to seal this property until further notice signed by SHRAVAN MALHOTRA..

Reading his name Sumo fell on floor he cant do this... he cant close this kitchen he can close this place where I cook the daal...Preeta comes from behind.. Sumo get the grip of the situation If shravan did this he can correct it too lets go and meet him...Sumo says you are right Preeta lets go now..

on the other hand Shravan is packing his luggage to leave for Mumbai...

Sumo reaches Shravan house may I meet Sharavan she asks chachi..? How dare you come here after you have done so much? go out before I call security I will not go without meeting Shravan today ..Ramnath hear commotion and comes out... how dare you come here ? you cant meet Shravan he has left for work and will be back after 2 days...

Sumo now pleads I need to meet Shravan for PCT... as chachi just told me he is busy but very much at home...sorry you cant meet himgo out before I call security.. Preeta ask her to leave and look for other lawyers as they have to deliver the tiffin to new client before they lose the contract.

Sumo shown leaving the Malhotra house reluctantly..

Shravan comes down I was in bathroom I hear someone shouting ,..nobody son , hope you are done with packing as you have flight in couple of hours? Yes dad leaving now ...he takes blessings of Ramnath and Lala ji and leaves...

Sumo reaches PCT and looks her world scattered around the road she ask he staff to collect things ...and suddenly it starts raining..all her vegetables..cooking oil get spoiled...and simultaneously they show Shravan boarding the flight

In Mumbai.

Shravan is waiting for his cab to arrive as he has never been to Mumbai before , but there is nobody so waiting for couple of hours he called Abhiraj Sorry to call you actually my cab hasnt arrived yet and on the phone they said there is some mistake and hence there is no booking under my name in the hotel I booked.

Abhiraj sounds sympathetic and says why dont you stay at my place ? as Sahil is here as well.
Sorry replies Shravan I cant , oh you are my friend now and trust me this will not make any impact on decision of the contract so I am sending my driver he will bring you home. and dont say no. Shravan agrees.

Sharvan reaches Abhiraj home which reads " Ahuja Villa" oh why am I feeling uncomfortable here...anyways lets spend a day here and then I will book any available room in any hotel.

Abhiraj shows him guestroom...This is your room next to the most beloved and cherished room of this house so do not get lost in the night..Surely not assures Sharavan

Precap :Sharavn is all heart broken in the room and feeling suffocated and crying profusely ...while Sumo is trying to pick up the pieces of her business and opening her new PCT in small shanty room.


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