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Posted: 11 years ago
Very good and very interesting Sia πŸ‘πŸΌ
for how jay fix all relations.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Good that Jay dug into Neil's past and found Dr. Chandra!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ

Jay and Dr. Chandra's convo was hilarious!!!!🀣 🀣 🀣 🀣 🀣 🀣

It was sooo cute to see Jay imagine Tara with a baby bump!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

So he does want a baby with her!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊
She shall..soon..hopefully!

I hope the day comes when Jay would have to take Tara to a gynecologist!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊
Chandra would do it for freeπŸ˜‰
Why any gynecologist, I suppose this Chandra will do!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›

Yeh Jay itna kyun sharma raha hai pehle Tara se pooch if she would give you Golu or not!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊
what she'll give..he'll take dnt worryπŸ˜‰
I liked Jay's line that he tried a lawyer but he was not much help!!!!πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

Now why is Jay acting khadoos??πŸ˜• πŸ˜• πŸ˜• πŸ˜•

Waise accha hi hai isse hopefully Tara will realize his value!!!!😳 😳 😳 😳





Thanks for those lovely comments my love...

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Archi21

Sia⭐️


Wow!!!πŸ˜› Kya Update hai πŸ‘

Oh...Too mera Doc related doubt Jay ko bhi haiπŸ˜›


Doc-Jay convo 🀣

Specially :

Jay : is shocked to hear that.. oh..no no no no.. there is hell lots of time for that..but yes if she becomes she'll be most adorable one a..a.. golu polu version of herself...Jay adores her envisioning tara with a baby bump.

Doc: then she wants to become one?
Jay: well..a little blushing...utters.. only if I could ask..

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Pura update read karke mujhe bahut hasi aa rahi haiπŸ˜†

Jald hi wo din bhi aayega jab Jay Tara ko lekar Gyn ke pass jayegaπŸ˜ƒ

Ab khulegi Neli ki pollπŸ˜ƒ
Neli tu too gaya πŸ˜›


Why Jay acting as KhadusπŸ˜•...Bhav kyu kha raha hai??
Tara bechari pareshan
Sounds interesting 😊

Plz Update soon...😊



hah thanks for ur awesome comments...πŸ€—
Keep reading.

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Posted: 11 years ago
chala bagundi siaπŸ‘πŸ‘
superb update maaπŸ‘
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Posted: 11 years ago
Update:
Chapter 11



Tara introducing Jay to Chandra "Hey Chandra, meet Jay..and Jay meet my good friend Chandra "

"Hi Jay" Chandra with a bright smile..soon she realizes that its the same guy from the hospital (actually she plays along pretending not knowing him)

"YOU!! Ugh" Chandra with anger in her eyes stares at him.

Jay gets a bit scared that this time she might not leave him for the fiasco they had a couple of years back, so he excuses and escapes from CHandra's rage.

All this is a bit confusing for Tara...Chandr inquires "who is he? umm Jay?"
Tara a little hesitantly says "mm..my husband."

Chandra puts a puzzled expression, as Tara didnt invite her no did she share this news.

"tune shadi karli woh bhi aisey hot say bandey say and you dont let me know..i am hurt"Chandra rants

Tara tries to convince Chandra, but the latter is too mad. Then Tara calmly explains her everything.
Chandra consoles her pal..Tara brushing off the topic and hurt...asks Chandra in turn asks her how did she knew Jay and what did he do to earn her disgust.


Chandra narrates the episode a few years back when she for the first time saw Jay.


FB:

I saw Jay a couple of years back.. in his struggle days..when he was nuthing.

Dayji suggest Jay ..'beta tumharein haath par bahut gehra chot laga hai..doc paas dikhao..mereyliye.'

"Dayji meney kahanmain bikul theek hoon..yeh ghav bahrjayegaa"

But Dayjeet insists him to see a doc.

On Dayjeet's persistent insist Jay goes to the doc..he waits for his trun from a general physician.

As he waits, he see a couple get their reports..

The husband opens the report..which read "POSITIVE"

Husband "I really can't believe this, you are pregnant"

The wife is glad beyond words, the couple seem to have an overwhelmed feeling abt their child, thought Jay.

Jay congratulates them ...Then after Jay goes in to attend to his wounds..theyy tie a bandage around his arm and give him a prescription to reduce the pain.


A few months after that event...there was a kind of stamped in a temple and we saw Jay holding a woman- unconscious and begging the nurse, docs n accounts ppl that they get the woman some help..but as there were too many patients cause of the stampede the docs didnt give that much time for teh causality cases. And the woman whom Jay held was thought as causality . But Jay gets angry on seeing no one care for teh woman..he breaks the computer and the drawer of the main reception desk..to get everyone's attention to him..He informs the hospital authority taht the woman is a case of this very hospital and is expecting.


Then they become aware of the situation and treats the woman...the husband too arrives and thanks Jay for being the savior.

Chandra stood forth him and asks for repay for the damage he has done at the hospital reception.

He pays the cash instantly...


Back to present day:


"Tara, Jay is a fine human..." says Chandra.

"Yes, i know" tara replies.

"You know how he pay for all that?." after a pause Chandra says "he sold his HD for an unknown couple" she adds "the man is quite something."

Tara knew what the bike meant for Jay- he a kind guy... she knows what Jay is...he has always been kind and loving towards her..she knows he is a fine man..even if Chandra never said all this...she knew her man well by now.
But this piece of info touched Tara and somewhere pulled her to Jay.

Chandra states "Tara, you are indeed very lucky to have such a man as your husband. Dont let sucha guy go away from you.."


Neil calls up tara to at last talk it through on their relationship...the mess they all have been so long into.

He inquires "Hi Ta...kaisi ho tum?"
"Jay,..sorry Neil..I am fine..but I have been meaning to talk to you of something for sometime now...and I..I just need to do it today..or I'd go mad!" tara says her plight.
Neil says "Ta..we have been great friends since childhood and you still are this day...will always be indeed..but marriage is so not for us..."

Tara hearing this brightens up..then she realizes herself of her act and disciplines herself...and after a while replies "Neil, I think I have been too much into my shy and guilt mood taht it took away my practical thinking..I think your right...we were too stupid and hurt to even think of marriage with each other when we dont even fit to something as pure as love or marriage...I guess this was it"

"So that means your not mad at me" Neil inquires.
"Mad at you..no..guess I was too meek..and now when I see Jay, I feel my strength back...Neil, I am happy with my husband..and we were never meant to be together as anything but good friends." she boldly utters..leaving the skin of shame n shy.

"hah..rebound !" Neil with a sigh of relief...
"we saved ourselves from making our lives a bigger mess.." She replies looking at the ground
"True.." Neil seconds.
Neil hugs his friend and says "thanks Ta..thank for making it easy for me..for us."
Traa and Neil find their old bond back...and are very hopeful for their respective love interests.

The next weekend..neil invites Chandra, Jay and Tara to their biyearly get-together near the hill camp.
They busy themselves in their favorite activities with others...Neil and Jay decide to have their buddy time this time...and Chandra and Tara decide to cook up something for themselves and sit at a cozy corner wid a cup of tea with their cherished memories to their company.

As the dusk downs...the clouds wore a scarier and darker shade..and threaten to pour anytime...Tara is worried of Neil and Jay..as they are still busy crazy with the river rafting...oh she always hated the sport...putting once life in such perilous condition..she did try to warn bot her pal and her husband.,,but men..MEn..does anyone call them MEN...they were acting like BOYS...teenagers to be precise. There was a big cloud burst heard,,,this scared both Tara and Chandra...for Neil and Jay haven't returned yet..they ask everyone who went to the rafting...but Neil and Jay where not to be seen..

Then Chandra gets some info on the event and shares the news that there is a possibility that Neil and Jay must have been somewhere in the waters...swimming..drowning...

Precap:

his long hair floating in the water and his face wet..shining in the moon light...his hefty structure immersed in the water..


Thanks for reading and lking the write...do check the next-last update
regards
Sia.
Edited by sankalp_prapti - 11 years ago
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"Jay..!" Tara shouts terrified..her palms closing over her mouth as her eyes widened with disbelief.
"Chandra...Jay..Jay is somewhere there and..just save him..SOME ONE SAVE HIM.." Tara shouted madly.
Chandra too shouted out "NEIL..JAY.."
She is panicky and in the spur of the moment, she jumped into the river to save Jay.
Chandra was shocked to see this..



After a while, Tara tried to swim but she lacked the skill..she desperately tried to find Jay in the dark in the water and went crazy with worry...the cold water numbed her whole body and in the process, the water got into her lungs...and she is unable to even breathe properly..she then felt someone grab her by her belly.


It was Jay. Her strength gave up because of the constant fight against the waves and the current of the river to find her husband...and the last memory she had was of Jay holding her. The man came from the back and held on to her petite figure and brought her close to his body..his long hair floating in the water and his face wet..shining in the moon light...his hefty structure immersed in the water... were a few details she caught of his presence around her.
Jay then dragged her out of the water and made her sit on a rock..she coughed out the water...shivering because of the cold. The wind blew around her while she was drenched wet in water. Jay asked "How are you feeling now?"


Tara nodded to indicate she was fine...Then "WHY did you have to do this..why do you have to be a hero haan?... Are u mad...What has gotten into you?
Why did you jump when you don't know how to swim..when you are scared of water so much..kuch hojata toh..you crazy woman..!" Jay shouted at her.
"What were you thinking..? Don't you ever do such a thing again." Jay warned her holding her face in his hands.


Looking around to see where they had landed, they find themselves in the forest. In hope of finding a way out, they walk forth shivering in the cold.
As they walk in the rain drenched to the bone...they find a warehouse filled with hay ..Jay broke the lock and they entered the room.
Jay lit the lamp and she started to clean up the place...Jay asks her again why did she do this..jumping into the river without thinking twice...what if she drowned in the water.?

She says, "I..I ..I didnt want ..Chandra told me that Neil and you were drowning..and I didn't want to lose one more thing that's close to my heart. I felt that I was losing something very precious to me...something which is a part of me..and this time I couldn't afford to lose something that precious."

Jay realizes what Tara meant what she said. He felt for the first time that she cares for him - at least had started to..and that was enough for him for this life..he could die peacefully now but he has Tara now to take care of. Jay went to her and turned her around. She was hurt for she was scared to lose him and realized that she was just going to lose Jay. He then held her face by her chin looked into those deep eyes and kissed her forehead.


She hugged him tight, resting her head on his chest.
Tara informs him, "Jay I cant afford to lose you now." The hug got tighter ..he gathered his wife in his arms close to his heart.
Tara found her peace in her husband's arms. She wanted this for so long, ever since she realized the goodness and selflessness of Jay for her, for everyone around. He took care of her as her dad did.


He started to kiss her face giving passionate brushes of his lips and bearded cheek over his wife's soft face.
For the first time, she was kissed by a man with such passion... the prick of his beard made her gulp.

He held her perfect back and moved his other hand over her side of the neck...as his mouth did its act..his thumb creased her neck with the other hand holding her structure firm in his arms.
Tara then moved him away and went near the hay stack. He came from behind and hugged her..wrapping his hands around her structure.
She turned around facing him and shook her head in a no ...he then left her being the true gentleman he is.


She then stood blushing near the window with him gazing at her..she feels conscious starts to clean up the warehouse, straightening things like
the tools, the scattered hay then settled herself on one of the hay stacks.

Then Tara thinks to herself..ah..the man is too straight and innocent. "Jao bola toh chala gaya!" She muttered with utter sweetness in her voice.
But he is a perfect gentleman..she knew she had to break the ice...

"Kaisey pati ho..patni key dil baat samjhtey hi nahi" she complains with a pout..
Jay was confused..his eyebrows met in the frown he had.
Then he realized what his patakha wify meant and saw her. She looked at him from the corner of her eyes. As they hadn't ever shared such a moment of love..a moment of acceptance of each other and their relation..Jay then smiled and went closer to her.

"Agar aisi baat the toh pehle hi keh deti. Tumhari har baat samaj jata..aur tumhain bhi apni bahut si baatein samjha deta.." Jay said with a naughty glint in his voice.
He pulled her to him n their chest bumped, she looked into both of his eyes...he then lifted her by her back crushing her chest to his.


Jay measurably entwined his hands with hers and kissed all over her silky neck. He gave a series of pecks to his wife from her neck to her stomach..via her cleavage...making her feel jittery..yet displaying his passion.

She got alerted at once when he reached her tummy..as he reached there she held him by his hair..he then went near her face n brushed his meaty lips over hers ..Tara's off-white dress stuck to her figure as if it was her skin...He was busy was playing with her assets through the thin cloth she wore.

For the first time she felt his core pressed to her...it was literally taking her breath away...he pressed his structure hard to hers..she moans ..
holding tight to the strap of his vest...occasionally scratching his shoulder..on his moves. He played with her wet dark long hair..


He was lost in her neck and she too doesn't shy away...she kissed her man all over his torso he ran his mouth over chest...with her clothes almost separated off her torso..all the go he pace his lips around her chest n neck...making her breathless..she ran her wet lips over his neck n stubbly jaw line..
As he pressed hard against her ...she bit at the area around his neck n ear.
They shared a passionate kiss...feeling each other's repressed feelings.
Then Jay alerted Tara that they should be ready for surprises...so they part away after that passionate first discovery of each other's love, passion..as their dear ones would come looking for them. Jay n Tara fix themselves and move out finding their way as the rain stops.
Jay and Tara are found by their dear ones...they head back to their house.


PS: Special thanks to Shaina for helping me in editing this part of the FF.
Sorry Shai..dnt thinkk I'd continue...not until for a few months,,,so gym willl be only in our dreams n memories..πŸ˜’

Note:
Since I have almost virtually left both EBI and IF..I am discontinuing this FF. Thanks for your kind appreciation of my humble work.
have a great life

Regards
Sia
Edited by sankalp_prapti - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Chandra knows Jay from before and Jay was scared seeing her!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

Why was Tara hesitating before saying Jay is her husband??πŸ˜• πŸ˜• πŸ˜• πŸ˜•

Tara ko haq se bolna chahiye and with pride!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ

Jay is indeed a gem and it is good that Chandra told Tara about the first time she had seen Jay!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Chandra is right that Tara is indeed lucky to have Jay as her husband and she should not let him go away from her!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

It is good that Tara and Neil realized their mistake and decide to remain friends!!!!

Great that the four of them went to the hill camp to enjoy themselves!!!!πŸ₯³ πŸ₯³ πŸ₯³

But Jay and Neil haven't returned and so Tara and Chandra are so worried for them!!!!πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜”

Tara loves Jay so much that she jumped into the water even though she couldn't swim!!!!😲 😲 😲 😲

But our hero Jay saved her in time and dragged her out of the water!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

I loved your description of Jay in water!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Jay scolding Tara while holding her face in his hands was soo cute!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Waise hero aur heroine ko hamesha ek shed ya warehouse mil hi jaata hai rukne ke liye when it is raining!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

Great that Tara ne apne dil ka haal bata diya Jay ko and said that she cannot bear to lose him!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Jay ke liye toh bas itna hi kaafi hai that she cares for him!!!😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Their hugs and kisses were very romantic and passionate and showed their love for each other!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

Jay is indeed a true gentleman aur Tara ke ek baar bolne pe usse chhod diya!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Tara figured out ke Jay ko sab bolna padhta hai and how cutely she hinted to him what his wife wants!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Jay teasing her was soo cute!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊

Finally they are together and showing their passion for each other!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Jay and Tara are soo romantic and passionate!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

The chapter was awesome!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘




Edited by Shaina_b - 10 years ago
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😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭 😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
😭
Will miss u Sia
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Posted: 11 years ago
Character sketch. ...Chandra Sharma πŸ‘
too yehi hai Neil ki jaan πŸ˜ƒ
interesting πŸ˜ƒ

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