~~SS-DESTINY~~PART 9 UPDATED PAGE 20 - Page 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
#11
loved the prologue and the character sketch
is thisstory by any means similar to the niyaz story of yeh hai ashiqui ?
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Posted: 11 years ago
#12
Vry nicely defined characters .
Hmmm nice dear ...hoping d ss to be grt..
Plz update soon ..
Waitung dear...

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Posted: 11 years ago
#13

Originally posted by: rima4ever

loved the prologue and the character sketch
is thisstory by any means similar to the niyaz story of yeh hai ashiqui ?



NO DEAR ITS SOMEWHT SIMILAR BUT NOT EXACTLY
Edited by amfi123 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#14
Hey nice concept..
Really inrlteresting..thanks fr pm..
Update soon..:) keep writing..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#15

Part 1

Mumbai 7am,

An elegant lady is working in kitchen early in the morning .suddenly a girl comes from behind and hugs her ...lady gets scared and shouts what?????Then turns and both, the lady and the girl laughs their heart out...

Lady (mrs.anita kaul):- uth gae tu?

Girl (antara):- haan maa aur jog bhi ho gaya...

Mrs.kaul:- mere acha bacha ...nazar na lage (and puts tika on her cheek )

Antara:- eww...maa...don't do that naa (and she makes yuckkkyyy face)

Mrs.kaul:- puttar aesa nhe karte ye tou maa ka pyaar hota hai...

Boy:- kaisa nhe karty mom????

Mrs.kaul:- are aman beta ...tum kab aaye????? Raat ko dinner bhi saath mein nhe kia???

Aman:-cool mom...party the , late hogaya tha aur dinner bahar he kar liya tha...

Antara:- aur maa thora drink shink bhi kia tha tou friends chod gaye early morning... Hai naa bhai??? (and antara gives teasing smile, like i know you bhai)

Aman (embarrassed)..nhe antaraa, mein aur drink...nahe tou...mom aapko apne aman pe yakeen hai na???

Mrs.kaul(though knowing her kids very well but pretending):- haan aman mujhe apne dono bacho pe puraa yakeen hai

Aman (smiles and says):- see antaraa (and antara makes face)

Mrs.kaul (tried to distract them):- chalo ab ready ho jao me break fast banati hoon..

Antara:- maa mein aapki help karti hon (as its antara's routine to do household works)

Mrs.kaul:- chal aja and aman leaves to get ready for college.

After some time

Mrs.kaul:- antara ja ye chae apne papa ko de aa...

Antara (scary):- maa mein he jaoon??

Mrs.kaul:- haan beta... Ek tum he ho jis ko wo dant nhe sakty...tere papa tujh se bohat pyaar karty hen

Antara smiles and goes with tray of cup of tea and biscuits

Antara comes to mr.kaul's room and knocks

Mr.kaul:- come in

Antara:- good morning papa...chae...

Mr.kaul (while combing his hair then setting his tie, smiles at her and then says) :- side table pe rakho aur yahaan aao and tie this (while saying this with little irritation)

Antara comes and ties the knot of the tie ...

Mr.kaul smiles and says (while pulling antara's cheeks) :- good morning antara beta...

Antara smiles and goes from there while mr.kaul makes few phone calls...

Precap...umm lets say...Raghu's entry..

Edited by amfi123 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#16
Aww itna chota update...anyways it ws nice..
Antu scared of her father.
N loves her mother alot...
Grt...waiting fr d update ..
Thanks dear...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#17
awesome..character sketch..and update dear..👏
its really interesting yr...😛
antu's bonding is good with her dad and mom😊..bt why Mr.Kaul annoys on his wife?
precap..woww!!raghu's entry
thanks fr pm😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#18
That's a good start..
Loved it...
Amazing...
Mrs. Kaul is sweet...
Precap.. Raghu ki entry...
I m waiting...
Update asap...
Thanx for the pm...
Update soon and pm me..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#19
Nice start...
But bahot chota tha...
Update soon...
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Posted: 11 years ago
#20
lovely part
no raghu.. its ok
precap yipee
pls cont asap

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