RIKARA DRABBLE:~ HIS...?

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RIKARA DRABBLE:~ HIS...?


"chodo hume" Gauri shouted as Kali Thakur dragged her mercilessly to the wedding mandap. She felt disgust at herself under his touch and wriggled ferociously to remove his hand.

"Omkara"

"OMKARA" she shouted but could not find him. Defeated badly, she closed her eyes and put her pallu in the havan kund. Everyone were horrified with the scene. And within minutes, all that was left was her burnt body.


"NOOO" Om shouted hardly before waking up from the deadly nightmare. He turned to the other side of the bed where he found Gauri in a sound sleep snuggling under the blanket for warmth.

He sighed and drank a glass of water kept on the nightstand. He shut his eyes but sleep was miles away from him. He turned his head facing Gauri and the nightmare played in his head sending shivers down his spine.

He was confused with his emotions regarding Gauri. On one side was his mind which still accused her and tagged her Svetlana 0.2 where as other side was his heart which refused to accept the allegations of his mind and developed strong feelings for her.


Who was she? What was she to him?

Various questions arouse in his mind leaving him disturbed. All rituals done, papers were signed and announced in the media, both were tied in a relationship. But he was not able to give their relationship a name. And that status to Gauri.


She was his...


Mind conquered with a set of disturbing thoughts, he slipped into another restless sleep.

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This drabble was in my mind for a long time and it left me restless. Hence, I decided to post it. Waiting for feedback. Criticism is most welcome.

Nivi

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Well written this.. a disturbed n confused Omkara stuck between his heart n mind is a real desirable situation to read about:)).. so thanks a lot for tapping this zone .
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Thank you so much, ayushi.
Cheers,
Nivi
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Thank you so much.
Cheers,
Nivi
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Originally posted by: A-Musing-Me

Well written this.. a disturbed n confused Omkara stuck between his heart n mind is a real desirable situation to read about:)).. so thanks a lot for tapping this zone .

Thank you so much for the appreciation. Often a person is stuck between heart and mind. And this conflict often leaves a disturbing impact on somebody. I tried my best to portray that disturbance and restlessness in Omkara. I am happy you liked it.
Cheers,
Nivi
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Thank you so much.
Cheers,
Nivi
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Dropped in to say 'Hi' dear.
How have you been? After SR, its been so long to have seen each other, no?

Hope you are doing great.

Lots of Love
-Harshada
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Nice one at some point he was shocked and hurt but still we ant gauri at his side and afraid of loosing her... Nice one...
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Originally posted by: LoveToWrite

Dropped in to say 'Hi' dear.

How have you been? After SR, its been so long to have seen each other, no?

Hope you are doing great.

Lots of Love
-Harshada

Hi, harshu. How are you? Hope you're doing great. Missed you very much. Hope to see you more often here. Writing any stories on rikara?

Love,
Nivi
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Originally posted by: IlaTanwar

Nice one at some point he was shocked and hurt but still we ant gauri at his side and afraid of loosing her... Nice one...

Thank you so much. Om's characterisation is like that. He is scared of getting committed but somewhere in the tiniest corner of heart, he wishes to be loved.
Cheers,
Nivi

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