Samyukta Part 11- Gadhwar – Coup exposed!

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OSR Samyukta Part 11 - Gadhwar – Coup exposed!

Palace of Niphaud – Garden below the guest bedroom window

The bundle drops on the soft base echoing a muffled clank. Instantaneously, the light of a lantern is spotted at a distance followed by a guard's voice "Who is it? Who is it?" He prods his sword around the dim shrubs, wildly searching for the origin of the noise.

Suddenly, a dark silhouette springs up behind him and shouts "Arghhhhh…..Look at what I have got…" The guard swiftly jumps around, startled by the gruff holler behind him.

Seeing a tall fellow soldier haughtily showing off a new gleaming shield in his hand, the edgy man exhales deeply in relief "It was you… why do you always create a ruckus…"

The tall guard interrupts his complaints by posing in different combat stands with the gargantuan shield and uttering war cries. Seeing no response, he speaks up "Stop being so grumpy…Maharaj has ordered for new shields... they look brilliant…come on…I'll show you…"

The disinterested man starts walking away "No I have to complete my duty! I can't…"

Tired of his cranky attitude, the excited guard grabs his associate by his arm and forcefully whisks him away, to show him the new stock of arsenal.

The gladdened Veer and Dharam silently snicker and proceed with their mission.

Palace of Niphaud - Siya's bedroom

Seated on the floor and propped against the wall below her window, Siya smiles lifelessly as she moves away a lock of her tangled tresses from her swollen eyes, smudged with kohl. Distraught, she watches through the dim light, as Nanda separates the pieces of jewellery from bits of glass and broken lanterns; angrily strewn all around the room. She deliriously crosses her empty wrists around her bare neck to shield herself from the chilly winds and starts playing with the small fire of a glowing candle "Nanda… I told you… don't put it all away… I need it…I have to run away from home… mother is never going to talk to me now… and I will never agree to marrying Rajkumar Dharam … so… the only option is that I run away from my home… from my father… which I cant do… so I will have to die…if I die…will you cry too…."

Fed up, Nanda walks up to her friend and shakes her vigorously "Stop it Siya… you will become unwell… stop it…stop … I have to leave now or my family will be very worried…" looking at the spiritless persona of her ever-lively princess, Nanda weeps desperately "How can I leave you like this…don't speak like this Siya…your mother will talk to you once the guests leave tomorrow. Maharaj will never allow this injustice …"

She abruptly stops, to peek through the window, as her attention is caught by a faint movement in the garden. Shocked, she stands up and leans out of the window "Oh my God… thieves… no…not thieves… that can't be… no…is that R…Rajkumar…."

Siya dismisses her friend's murmurs "Stop it Nanda…. Stop trying to distract me…"

Nanda pulls the princess up firmly and pushes her towards the window. Expressions of alarm finally begin to overcome Siya's blank visage, as she notices the three royals, many yards away. Observing their attempts to climb the palace compound wall, Siya stammers "Rajkumar D… Dharam...Veer…Balram ji…why are they behaving like thieves…with that heavy bundle…at this time of the night…this seems very sinister..."

Nanda shrieks "Siya! Something just fell from the bundle…something shiny…was it a"

Siya adds "it was a knife…" she stares at Nanda for many moments till she has a flash of realization "knife… oh God! Their trips to the b…blacksmiths…did they order … did they order w…weapons..."

Siya begins to recollect the incidents from the past few days "No wonder Rajkumar Dharam was not interested…in meeting me…in talking to me… in this proposal…How vile! They were actually using the pretext of a proposal to the princess of Niphaud for their devious plans. Are they planning something against…"

Exasperated, Nanda starts concocting her own theories "Are they planning an attack on Niphaud … we should wake up Maharaj … what if Niphaud is in trouble… in war…"

Siya "No! Nanda! I will not allow anything to happen to Niphaud…I don't care what happens to me…however…we can't raise an alarm without being sure… we need to know what is going on for certain, as this concerns the safety of two kingdoms…"

She drags her reluctant friend and exits her room, to investigate the matter further.

Enroute Gadhwar

Bhalla yawns aloud and resumes professing about their secret mission "I am invincible at covert missions…what an escape I made at Niphaud…no one caught sight of me…"

Veer pats a mosquito on his back "Bhalla… why don't you go to sleep now? You have been yawning and dozing off ever since we started…"

Annoyed, Bhalla looks away "I am not sleepy…just mind your own business…."

Veer laughs to himself and then turns to his brother for a reaction.

Deep in thought; Dharam whips the reigns of the horses, not noticing Veer's nudges.

Veer asks him "What happened, Dharam? You have not spoken much, ever since we started?"

Dharam replies slowly "Oh! Veer…it's just that I am troubled about everything happening at Aryanagar…troubled by Dhruv's statements…and what he said about Agni…Jai chacha..."

Veer rolls his eyes and replies "Stop! Stop worrying about Aryanagar…we will tackle everything one by one, together" he then puts on a serious tone "Start worrying about issues that…you … alone… only…you…can… sort out…I…I…mean… like… Rajkumari…S…S…"

Looking at his mischievous advice in reply to a serious query, Dharam darts forward to hit him, while Veer ducks down, begging for forgiveness. Bhalla enjoys a hearty laugh at their pranks.

The lack of a map takes them through a long tedious night journey, before the fatigued princes reach the intimidating stretch of the narrow pass of Niphaud. Veer and Dharam exchange the responsibility for the reigns silently, while Bhalla sleeps blissfully unaware of the perilous journey they were undertaking. Veer levers the jute reigns of the horses and skillfully steers the cart, while Dharam warns Veer of any dangerous obstructions. Combined, they maneuver their way through the risky length of the pass slowly, till they spot the first signs of new land. Riding through a short expanse of barren ground, Veer and Dharam observe the grey sights of the kingdom of Gadhwar unfolding before them.

After a while, they come face to face, with barricades guarded by unwelcoming soldiers in a military camp. The soldiers harshly order them to descend their cart in order to make a thorough search of their wares. The three boys alight from their carts, while the soldiers begin to ransack their belongings to ensure they did not find anything untoward. Looking at their bundle of weapons, the soldiers demand an explanation for the purpose of their untimely visit. Veer and Dharam introduce themselves to the unconvinced soldiers and then display their weapons to request an audience with the commander-in-chief. However, despite repeated efforts from the forlorn princes, the arrogant soldiers don't permit them entry into Gadhwar.

Out of desperation, Veer finally tests his luck by blurting out baseless claims to the dubious soldiers "but...the commander-in-chief knows us personally…he knows we're coming…he is expecting us!"

The Soldiers exclaim in unison "What!"

Dharam exclaims "What!"

Bhalla exclaims "What!"

While Dharam and Bhalla become astonished by Veer's lies, the soldiers straighten themselves and address Veer meekly "My! W...why didn't you say so? He generally visits our posting before daybreak…when he arrives, I will let him know you've arrived. You may wait at the village nearby till then..."

The soldiers let them through and then lead them into a murky village, housing only a handful of destitute residents. As they place their heavy belongings on the ground to rest under the dark shadow of a large tree, Dharam grumbles to himself; troubled by Veer's fearless false stories.

Aryanagar – Inside a humble dwelling

Within the rustic walls of a modest hut, a homely woman sits by the flickering light of a candle and excitedly wipes a crude bamboo idol of an infantile Lord Krishna. Not a trace of the day's hard work evident on her face, she hums sweetly "I worshipped you all these years. Now finally, I am handing you over to queen Nivritti. Please protect my son…"

Listening to the unceasing enthusiasm in her voice; Sakshi grins as she rubs medicine over the swollen ankles of her mother and tells her "Prayer festival… prayer festival… that is all you have been talking about…" she adds doubtfully "What difference does it make, if you pray to the idol here? You have been doing so all these years…why do you have to give it to the queen? What if she doesn't even care for it? What if she finds out the truth?"

The caring mother refutes her "Don't worry! I wouldn't tell her the truth! You know that it is customary for the idol to be worshipped at home…to protect the child. Veer was at the Gurukul so long, but now he stays at the palace; so it should be kept there! The festival is an apt occasion to hand it to the queen..." she smiles to herself, thinking about the opportunity of watching her son at close quarters "…and I wonder if I would be able to meet Veer...even for a moment..."

Gadhwar – Village near military camp, at the outskirts

Driven by thirst; Veer stands up, stretches himself and hunts around briefly for a source of water. He approaches a lady drawing water from the water well, a short distance away and requests her "May I have some water please? I am parched…" on receiving no response, he tries to make pleasant conversation with her "It is only past midnight…you are up very early…"

The lady begins walking away, as she gives him a curt reply "Fetch your water by yourself..."

Momentarily taken aback by her rudeness, Veer goes ahead and starts drawing the water till he feels an unexpected extra helping tow on the ropes. Looking at the familiar face housing a warm smile, Veer complains "Dharam…the people here are so inhospitable!"

Dharam pours the water into Veer's hands "Veer, every kingdom is different… different people….different circumstances…attitudes…we need to learn to accept that…"

Suddenly, distracted by the sounds of sharp voices, they turn around to see a group of angry soldiers rapidly coming towards them. As the ghastly group advance ahead, the alarmed Dharam and Veer watch an enormous brute sporting powerful metallic armour, step forward from the dwarfed soldiers around him.

Stopping in front of the shocked princes, the commander roars "These soldiers told me that I was expecting you…I don't know you! Why did you lie? Where are you from?"

Frowning at an anxious Bhalla and Dharam; Veer stutters, trying to think of something to say "Oh!... we are weapon merchants…we bring w…weapons…t…that…" gazing at the commander's chunky armour, he pretends "weapons that would be capable of even cutting through your armour…"

The group slowly breaks out into intimidating sniggers, while the irritated Dharam closes his eyes and hopes that Veer would not commit to any more exaggerated claims.

The commander seizes a startled Dharam by the neck "Do you know that liars are not welcome here? Especially those that dare to lie to the commander…you better prepare to die…"

His pride defied, Dharam glares at the commander and then removes each finger from his neck rebelliously, while the tall man stands stupefied by Dharam's strength. Weighing the possibility of a violent outbreak, Veer eyes the bundle and then immediately darts towards it, to pick up a handful of weapons. He walks back towards the group and wasting no time, aims the knife into a small crevice of a distant tree. He swiftly hands a knife to the commander, to distract him from his outburst at Dharam. Subtly awed by Veer's adept skills with the knives, he slowly examines the sleek blade. In a flash, the commander contests his skills by hurling the weapon at the tree.

Falling slightly short of Veers's perfect aim at the crevice; he gets enraged and tries the variety of knives in Veer's hand; one after another. After he fails to match his target at all instances, Veer eventually waves his empty hands and then indicates with his eyes, asking the commander to fetch the knives back. Shocked by Veer's intimidations, he takes a few moments to overcome his ego; before following his instructions. As predicted; the well-housed strong blades only loosen with great force, purging out small chunks of the tree trunk with them; leaving the soldiers and their commander marveling at the quality of the weapons.

Taking mighty strides back to his tent, the commander speaks up "Do you have a written contract? I would like to seal it… I need these weapons as quickly as possible…in a week…"

Watching the commander disappearing into his tent, Dharam whispers to Veer "The knife trick was very impressive! Where did you learn it?"

Thinking of his encounter with the veiled girl at the blacksmiths, Veer proudly beams in reply "Oh Dharam…that…you see… well… that is just me…"

Gadhwar - The military tent at the border

After the three royals enter the tent, Dharam gives the commander a scroll and attempts to converse with him "We will aim to please you Senapati… but…may I ask…w…why do you need them in a week?"

Receiving the scroll from Dharam, the Commander replies tersely "Oh we are marching south…" aware of the fact that he spoke too soon, he pauses; and gets back to laying out the specifics of the contract.

In an attempt to gain more information, Dharam prods him hesitantly "South? You mean Aryanagar?"

The commander looks at the inquisitive Dharam and smiles quietly, in approval. Listening to the very fact that they dreaded most being proven true; Dharam stands speechless, while Veer strives to mask his horror and silently challenges the commander "Gadhwar is a relatively small kingdom… it is very brave of you to openly declare war on Aryanagar…"

The commander laughs in reply, as he hands Veer the sealed scroll "Openly? We are not fools..."

Appalled by the increasingly disturbing facts provided by the commander, Dharam enquires with a choked voice "Not openly declaring war? You mean…you have inside help…you have help from the Aryanagar army?"

The commander nods his head reluctantly and answers "Not only the army..." he suddenly stops, perceiving that he was probably giving the merchants more information than necessary and orders them "That is enough...you may leave now...I will be waiting for the order...thank you..."

As the soldiers begin to lead them outside, Veer continues goading the commander; hoping to extract as much information as possible "Commander, you seem to have meticulously planned everything… when you meant inside help…did you meant the palace…we know the royal family of Aryanagar well…we can provide you with any information you need…"

The commander stares at Veer and inquires doubtfully "How do you know so much?"

Veer replies with a frown "We are weapon merchants… we keep an eye on all military secrets…"

The indecisive commander asks him slowly "What do you know about Rajkumar Agnivardhan and his father Jaivardhan? It was their idea…they promised to help us…"

The princes stand dumbstruck; seething in rage as the all the information that they had unearthed so far started gaining clarity. Gradually realizing how their uncle was teaming up with a rival kingdom to overthrow the current regime in Aryanagar, Veer responds numbly "We realized they had their eye on the throne… but didn't know that they would go to war against their own family…you trust such rogues, commander?"

Finally tired of their nagging questions, the commander dictates his soldiers to escort them out, while the distressed and drained brothers don't put up any resistance to the uncouth men and step out silently themselves.

Enroute Niphaud – The ride back

Bhalla clings his quivering hands tightly around the beams of the cart, as they approach the steep pass at breakneck speed. When the edge of the cart passes dangerously close to a protruding rock, Veer gasps in fear. Surveying the escalating risk, Bhalla again implores Veer to comfort the anguish and the unusual behaviour of their generally calm prince.

Ducking to avoid a branch, Veer tries reasoning repeatedly "Dharam…how much ever you tug on the reigns…the horses can only ride so fast…Please… I beg you…please give me the reigns... you are very upset Dharam… you are driving very hazardously…"

Aggrieved, Dharam yells back "We need to get to Aryanagar…to protect father… mother… Aryanagar…from Jai chacha and Agni…they are planning a war against us…"

Veer again tries to take the reigns forcibly, but Dharam refuses to give in. Blinded by the torment of betrayal and the worry for his kingdom, he unwittingly shoves Veer aside. Nudged forcefully by Dharam; Veer looses his foothold and desperately tries to hold on to the edges, but the speed of the cart shuffles his balance and the prince is hurled outside the cart. Clenching on to the wooden beams; Veer lets out a piercing scream, as he is dragged brutally by the swift conveyance. Rudely awakened from his trance, Dharam instantaneously passes the reigns over to Bhalla and lunges forward. Petrified for his brother's safety, the desperate Dharam grabs Veer's arms with all his might and grits his teeth as he pulls his brother up, inch by inch. With immense exertion, Dharam heaves Veer onto the moving cart; which is eventually restrained to a slow trot by the shaken Bhalla.

Catching up on his breath, Veer notices Dharam's guilty face and pacifies him "I am all right…I am fine…don't worry…we will start for Aryanagar as soon as we get back to Niphaud…."

After a few tense moments, Dharam quivers in remorse "Oh God…forgive me…what… if something had happened…to y…you Veer…I don't know what came over me…I couldn't accept the fact that Aryanagar was in danger from my own cousin…my own family…"

Veer places his hand around Dharam and replies supportively "Kauravas and Pandavas were also cousins Dharam! Different places...different people….different attitudes…remember? We should learn to accept that…"

Moved by Veer's counsel, Dharam reconciles himself with a pledge "Yes…Veer… I should learn to accept it...I will accept it...we will defeat their purpose...we will show the Aryanagar assembly"

Veer interrupts him "No! Don't talk to the assembly! I don't trust them now…" trying to uplift his brother, he hits Dharam's chirpily "we both are strong warriors with a strong army…we will prepare for war strategically…the only way anyone could ever defeat Aryanagar, is if Dharam and Veer were not together… and that day would never come!"

Bhalla adds sulkily "What about me? You never include me…"

With an innocent expression, Veer corrects himself "Oh yes and Balaram too…"

Amazed by his brother's affection and wise support, Dharam hugs Veer proudly.

Ciao till next Saturday 😳

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Preview of Part 12

Dharam tries reasoning desperately "You seem adamant on not trusting our words... but let me tell you this...the day I met you at the garden was the first very first time, I ever saw you…"

Gradually numbed by the crude reality and the chilly winds fircely battling her open tresses, Siya's faintly denies with her ashen lips "Please...don't lie!!!! Didn't you speak to your mother about me... your mother even sent my mother a message.. with the proposal…"

The already flustered Dharam, despairs "How could I have spoken to my mother…if I..I...had never even heard of you, Rajkumari Siya?"

Nanda endeavours to prove her lost cause "but I heard our Maharani reading the message from queen Vaidehi… and it stated everything... everything about your asking for Siya's hand..."

Frustrated, Veer puts his head in hands in fear of losing his sanity "Oh! another person to add to this confusion... Queen Vaidehi...may I ask who Maharani Vaidehi is..."

Not wanting to face the shame of her blunders or her wrecked image in front of the young men, Siya hopes the earth would swallow her, as she drops paralyzed on to the flat rock...

Links to previous 10 episodes

Dedicated this story to the name Samyukta which signifies togetherness, unison and interdependance (the very reason the princess of Kannauj was named so). This story is no doubt about trials and tribulations but definitely the underlying message being that unity is victory!!! ... hence aptly named the Samyukta of Dharam and Veer

Part 1 & 2 https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/853004/samyukta-1-and-2-dharam-and-veer-story-so-far

Part 3 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/859041/samyukta-of-d-and-v-it-sinks-in-part-3

Part 4 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/864874/samyukta-part-4-realizing-their-fears

Part 5 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/871744/samyukta-part-5-to-find-out-the-truth

Part 6 -https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/877903/samyukta-part-6-the-feast

Part 7 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/884104/samyukta-pt-7-dharam-siya-first-glances

Part 8 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/890384/samyukta-part-8-siya-feels-cheated

Part 9 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/896808/samyukta-part-9-veer-meets-his-match

Part 10 - https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/dharam-veer/902913/samyukta-pt10-dharam-siya-a-war-of-egos

Edited by lashy - 17 years ago
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Ok.......first of all sorry shraddha di for late rep........Busy with packing n all tht.
anyways.............U r a Rockstar.... This part was awesome just like other epis.......... loved it alot......When as i asked in previous part also, when this MU b/w sia n Dharam will be cleared??.....................aur kya??😛... bas/ i loved ur part alot......especially tht part when Dharam is angry riding to Aryanagar.......I'll read next part surely next Saturday😛
Edited by arshitgupta - 17 years ago
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Wowow lashy what an absolutely fantastic update………..ok my fav secenes of the epi👏👏👏

  1. Veer trying to distract dhram from his troubling thoughts abt aryanagar by bringing up sia…….it reminded me of the scene in the prison where veer comes to meet dharam and tells him to forget abt everything else and think abt his upcoming engagement to sia…….seems sagars ka veer ho yahan lashys veer, he remains our typical veer only.😆😆😆
  1. the next scene I loved was when veer very confidently lies to the soldiers and baffles both poor dharam and bhalla😆😆
  1. I but loved just loved veer thinking he needed to chat up the lady at the well and she wld be so bowled over by his charm and handsome face that she will take out some water from the well and give it to him…………but when the lady just snubs him and goes away he complains that the ppl of that village are very inhospitable…..some ones ego took a beating I think.😆😆😆
  1. I loved veer impressing the commander in chief with is knife trick which is just him……..or stolen idea from someone.😉😆
  1. but the best scene dia and scene of the epi "the only way anyone could ever defeat Aryanagar, is if Dharam and Veer were not together… and that day would never come!"

Bhalla adds sulkily "What about me? You never include me…"

With an innocent expression, Veer adds "Oh yes and Balaram too…"

Amazed by his brother's affection and wise support, Dharam hugs Veer proudly………….sooossssssssss sweet😳😳😳

Edited by crazy_kiran - 17 years ago
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👏wow lashy, 🤗🤗

Another wonderful part which has humour, friendship, love and betrayal. I loved the way you have unravelled the suspense.👏, its like all the jigsaw puzzles coming together to show a fuller picture. 👏⭐️👏. Excuse the different fonts, my computer threw a tantrum today 😭

What i loved :

  • the soldiers thinking that the king has ordered new shields just for them 😆
  • the way dharam and veer laugh when the soldiers go and bhalla creating havoc as usual 😆 😆
  • Aww it is so sad to see siya upset 😭 😭 and loool the princess has a temper after the state of the room. 😆 🤣 I think Dharam will have to wear a helmet everytime he has a argument with sia😆

  • siya is so lovely, 😍 the way she moves her tangles tresses from her swollen eyes to the way she starts playing with the small fire of a candle. 😳

  • Awww siya wants to run away from home. 😍😍 I like the how she cares so much about her father that she does not want to run away but die. 👏 She is so sweet and vulnerable when she says if I die will you cry too. 👏👏 It makes me want to go and hug her 🤗 🤗
  • Awww I like nanda, she is so worried about siya and does not even want to leave her even though her parents will be worried if she goes home late. 👏 I like the way she is supporting siya. 👏
  • Loooool 😆nanda sees the dharam 🤣 🤣, veer and bhalla in the garden and thinking yeh kuch aur gadbad karge abh 🤣🤣

  • Looool 😆 I can just imagine siya's bemused face as she is wondering what the hell are these three doing behaving likes thieves at night carrying a heavy bundles . 🤣🤣🤣

  • 😆 Looooooool siya shock when she sees the knife and thinking about the previous incidents and getting a totally wrong end of the stick by thinking dharma, veer and bhalla may be planning something against the kingdom. Dharam would never harm his sasural 🤣 🤣🤣

  • Looool 😆 😆talk about nanda's over imagination when she talks about an attack on Niphaud and waking the king up

  • Brave siya (so sweet )😍😍 defending her kingdom and saying that she does not care about what happens to her. 👏 She is being very sensible by not going to wake the king up as this affects two kingdoms. She then and goes to investigate what is going on. I think if siya sings there is no question of anyone attacking the kingdom 🤣🤣🤣

  • Bhalla's " understatement of the year" by saying that he was invisible and no one caught sight of him. My god he was loud enough to wake anyone up🤣🤣🤣

  • Veer patting a mosquito on his back and telling bhalla to go to sleep as he has been yawning. I bet Veer is wishing that bhalla going to sleep is better as it would not cause any more problems. 🤣🤣🤣

  • bhalla being defensive 😆and veer worried about Dharam as he is quite 😊

  • 🤣 🤣 Veer start worrying about how he will sort out princess siya like that will be more impossible and difficult that winning the war would be easier 🤣🤣. Dharma going to hit veer as he knows that what veer has said is true 😆

  • This bhalla sleeps anywhere and anytime like khumbkaran 🤣🤣

  • Veer saying to the soldiers that commander in chief is expecting them 😆 veer's plans always cause alarm to dharma and bhalla . Dharam must be thinking that everytime veer opens his mouth with a new plan, it will involve me getting into trouble and getting the blame for no reason. 🤣 🤣

  • Veer saying it meekly why didn't you say so. This I have to see veer being so meek for the first time in his life 🤣🤣😆

  • Dharam mumbling to himself and thinking yeh ek din hum marwake choddee ga. 🤣🤣

  • I like the way you have described pari and how she wipes a crude bamboo idol of an infantile Lord Krishna and how she has been worshipping the idol for many years. You can feel the love and she has for her son and how she wants to hand the idol to the queen at the prayer festival and thinking about the opportunity of watching her son at close quarters "…and to meet Veer"😭
  • Awww sakshi looking after her mother and worried at the same time as to what will happen if the queen finds out the truth about veer. 😭
  • I am looking forward to that scene when mother and son meet for the first time, with so much emotions, love 👏👏👏.
  • Loooool veer 😆trying to make conversation with the lady at the well and asking her why she is up early. His comments are going to get him slapped one day. 🤣🤣🤣

  • like the lady 👏asking him to go and get the water himself and veer saying that the people are inhospitable and dharam trying to explain how every kingdom is different and their customs. or maybe its veer who brings out the worst in girls 😆

  • Veer telling the dharma wishing that veer would just keep his mouth shut for once in his life otherwise he will never get the chance to see siya.🤣🤣

  • me like seeing dharam in action when he "Dharam removes each finger from his neck rebelliously, while the tall man stands stupefied by Dharam's strength. " 👏👏

  • I like how veer distracts the commander by throwing the knife at a small crevice of a distant there and laughed when the commander failed to do it. 👏I think it will only be the veiled lady who can match veer. 🤣🤣

  • veer copying the veiled girls action by indicating with his eyes 🤣🤣 to the commander to fetch the knives back. I was in fits that veer had the nerve to ask him to go and fetch the knifes like the commander works for him and not the king of Niphaud 🤣🤣

  • Awww dharam impressed with veers knife trick and veer the little liar saying "you see… well… that is just me". 🤣

  • I like the way how the commander blurts out that they are going towards south and to declare war on aryanagar. At least dharma and veer will be able to find out their plans and go back to defend aryanager. 👏

  • Dharam and Veer totally shocked by what he hears and Veer trying to get as much information out of the commander as he can. 👏👏

  • My god the truth is out its that sick agni and his psycho father who has been giving all the secrets. 😡At least now that dharma and veer know the truth they can stop the attack and always be aware of them

  • Veer saying that he realized they had their eye on the throne… but didn't know that they would go to war against their own family…you trust such rogues, commander?" He is trying to find out more information from them

  • veer is in fear 😕as the cart gets very close to the rock and telling dharma to give the reins as he is going too fast. I can feel dharam's urgency, anger, pain and the need to go home to protect the kingdom.

  • Oh no, veer being dragged brutally ouchhhhh 😭and then dharma realizes what he has done and rushes to save veer. 😭 Dharam is in such a shock after what he heard😭

  • So sweet 😊veer trying to reassure dharma even though he is hurt. I felt dharam's pain as he is worried about protecting aryanagar and feeling upset at what has happened to veer. 😭 He feels so betrayed by his uncle 😭and I like how veer calmly explains to dharma that people are different and we have to accept that. 👏

  • how veer says that they both are strong warriors and that they will prepare for war. I also like how he says that the only way anyone can every beat arvyanagar is if Dharam and Veer are not together and how that day will never come. 👏 such a beautiful dialogue 👏
  • The minute dharma says we will show the Aryanagar assembly, veer is like "please not them", I like how veer is trying to support and encourage dharma to be strong.👏

  • Awww bhalla saying that they have not included him. So sweet and lool then veer says you too like he has no choice but to include bhalla 😆

  • Awwwwww I love the last line how dharma is awed by veers affection and support and hugs him 😍😍

The preview of part 12 - wow, 👏 me want to know now what happens, you know how impatient i am 😆 I love the scenes :

1) where dharam is trying to reason with a headstrong siya 😆

2) both dharam and siya are confused, siya thinks he is lying and he is like i have never heard about you. Nanda trying to prove her lost cause and realising the amount of confusion that has been caused 😆

3) Veer thinking he is going to go mad by the time he goes back and i bet is hoping never to come to this kingdom again as the girls here are strange 😆

4)awww siya wanting the ground to open up and swallow her 😭

Edited by divareena - 17 years ago
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omg chech!! thank u so much for posting this... i was feeling so bored today... will read and post my review... 😃
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chech FANTABULOUS update as usual.... 👏 👏 👏
i totally totally totally love your characters.... last time i was raving about dharam... this time its sia... she may come across as being childlike and immature... but inside that there's a sensitive, sensible and not to forget brave girl.. i love the way she said -
"No! Nanda! I will not allow anything to happen to Niphaud…I don't care what happens to me…however…we can't raise an alarm without being sure… we need to know what is going on for certain, as this concerns the safety of two kingdoms…" i love this sia.... 😃 i'm sure she'll make a very good and just queen one day... aryanagar will do quite well under the leadership of dharam with sia to support him.. 😳
again i really liked the scene with pari and sakshi.. 😊 somebody tell the sagars to take tips from u on how to potray their characters..
i love how even in the most serious situations veer manages to a bring a smile on dharam's face 😳 -
Dharam replies slowly "Veer… I am troubled by Dhruv's statements…by Aryanagar…"
Veer rolls his eyes "Stop! Stop worrying about Aryanagar…we will tackle everything one by one, together" he then puts on a serious tone "Start worrying about issues that…you … alone… only…you…can… sort out…I…I…mean… like… Rajkumari…S…S…"
Looking at his mischievous advice in reply to a serious query, Dharam darts forward to hit him, while Veer begs for forgiveness. Bhalla enjoys a hearty laugh at their pranks. 😆 😆 😆 so cute..
so now they know what jai and agni have been planning against aryanagar... 😡 i dint expect dv to learn about jv and agni's true colours already.. but good thing they did.. now cant wait to see dv and jva's takkar... 😉 😃
oh my poor dharam.. he's so disturbed.. 😔
"I don't know what came over me…I couldn't accept the fact that Aryanagar was in danger from my own cousin…my own family…" 😭
but trust veer to make him feel better - Veer places his hand around Dharam supportively "Kauravas and Pandavas were also cousins! Different people….different attitudes…remember? Learn to accept that…" so sweet of him.. 😛 he used the same lines that dharam used on him... 😃 😃 😃 and i loved this dialogue - "we both are strong warriors with a strong army…we will prepare for war strategically…the only way anyone could ever defeat Aryanagar, is if Dharam and Veer were not together… and that day would never come!" 👏 👏 👏
poor bhalla felt so ignored - Bhalla adds sulkily "What about me? You never include me…"
With an innocent expression, Veer adds "Oh yes and Balaram too…" 😆 😆 😆
awwwwww u ended it with dv hugging... 😳 😳 😳 they are choo chweet... 😳

cant wait for the next part chech... poor sia... 😭 i hope dharam makes her feel better... 😳 i wanna see some cute scenes between these two.. something that the makers are just not ready to show.. 🤢 but u'r there to make up for it... thank u so much for the lovely part.. luv ya... 🤗 🤗 🤗


Edited by kunataanya - 17 years ago
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Amazinggg!!!!!!!!!!! 👏

Wow!! Whatta chapter!!! 👏 👏 👏

I loved every bit of it and also the revelation in the chapter which you made so early on in the story while in the actual serial its still not made!

Siya's part in the chapter was interesting as well...since you have given your Siya some brains...not like the serial 😆 😆 😆

Bhalla is so cute!!!
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omg.....very nice very nice.......i dont have much comments .......but on the whole it was great 👏 .....and the preview too.....very good idea.......its good that you wouldn't drag dharam sia confusion for long like those stupid shows.......after all its our story.....reminds me of sth.....oh ya.....fans' story....by the fans ......for the fans 😆 😆 😆
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sigh....what lot of emotions you put in your story!! I am soo awed..will reply in detail 'morrow 🤗

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