Hey sarah ..
Im sorry (again ) .. u see the thing is that i love ur ff and i dont wanna write 2-3 lines comment i wanna give a big wala comment bt im a very lazy girl ..
a very very happy belated budday and congo for ur third thread ...
1st part-
Giriraj stepped forward and hugged her'
At first manyata was startled she didn't expected a hug was coming on her way and that from giriraj'
Giriraj: bete I know you feel alone here you don't have your ds your brother your father here'. But you don't need to worry..
I will be a father for you unnati a sister'
But yea uday cant be like a brother to you'..( laughs)
Manyata laughs'. She felt so pleased' she literally needed a hug and right now it was working as a medicine to heal her wounds'..
They broke the hug'
Manyata: thanks uncle'
Giriraj: no call me dad'.. no matter what happens in future I will always remain your dad and you my daughter'. No one not even UDAY can break our relation'
i toh bas loved this part ... i mean giri is bettr than brij...
2nd part-
Uday knew the way he behaved with her wasn't good at all but he couldn't help it he was out of his mind after seeing that bas***d ( AYAAN)' he couldn't control his anger'. He knew if he stayed downstairs he will probably harm her or himself'. That's why he left without answering her back'
uday was afraid of hurting maanyata .. hayee.
kuch to huya hai kuch hogaya hai 😳😳
3rd part--
Uday talked to her for some 5 minutes more but after getting no reply he gets out of his mind'.
He got really frustrated now he got up pined her hands on the table and crushed her body with his...
Now manyata position was really awkward...
she was half pressed on table beneath her hand and he was infront of her...
Uday: i told you when i speak i want answer... Don't you dare ignore me...
Manyata eyes were glued to his' she was scared to see him in his real avatar again'.
ahem ahem
Get a room guys''
i really thought ki iske agge bhi kuch hoga bt ..
koi nai mughe vaise bhi uday ke jyada kareeb koi ladki pasand nai 😃😃😃
part4--
Manyata didn't wanted to tell unnati the truth after talking to her she observed two things one unnati didn't knew anything about her and uday forceful marriage and second that unnati loved uday a lot he was kind of her hero' she didn't wanted to show her how cruel he was' she knew how lovely the bond between sister and brother is '.. she has a brother too and she knew how much she will get hurt if she knows about him and his deeds'''
i really liked this part ..
the way u portray maanyata's charactr is just amazing ...
part5--
Manyata found a chance and ran outside in the garden'.. she kept running but suddenly she slipped due to the wet floor uday who was after her like a express train fall as well'.. he fall above her' she was already drenched and breathing heavily but when he fall above her she was more uncomfortable'.
Suddenly her heart rate increased'. Their eyes met and she was totally lost uday could easily hear her hear beat like a drum'. He smirked after seeing her condition' right now she was totally vulnerable'' he took advantage of the situation and snatched the file away from her hand'. He got up instantly leaving a cofused manyata behind'.
hayee .. uday on top of maanyata..maanyata hrt beat increase matlab maanyata ko bhi kuch kuch hota hai ...
this whole part was very beautifully written
part 6--
He was looking at her in awe' he was wondering how can anyone be so beautiful so innocent'. He belonged to a world where girls are like show pieces they make their selves pastries and shows them selves '. But here this girl who was the simplest girl he has ever seen was totally opposite nor she likes to show her self nor she makes her self a pastry In order to seek attention infact she is the one who hates extra attention'.
omg ...
i loved the way u used the expression pastry to determine girls ..(well done) ..
nd uday is attracted towards maanyata ... :) :)
part 7--
Uday: wifey itne pyaar se khilarahi ho to saraa khilado'
Here manyata got confused'
Manyata pov:-
Mene to khud is me mirche dali thi then how this giraffe is
Eating it' kahin maid ne phir se to nahi bana dia but she didn't saw me adding chillies in it'
Uday shakes her: kya huwa wifey..
Manyata: kuch nahi she feeds him more'
Unnati cell starts buzzing she excuse herself and walks away'.
Uday: alright wifey thanks for such a wonderful breakfast' he kisses her hands' and walks away'
Manyata on the other hand even didn't care that he kissed her hand all she could think was how he ate that omelet'
When she saw him disappeared totally she took first bite of the omelet in order to check what's wrong when that small piece entered her mouth she was all red'.
It was really really spicy' she drank water instantly' her eyes were now all teary due to a single piece' she wondered how he ate all of it' her mouth was still burning she called out a maid and asked her to bring some honey for her'.
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Uday mouth was burning as well but he didn't care he was about to enter his car when he heard manyata from behind'.
Manyata: wait'.
He didn't knew what now she wants'.
She came near him'
Manyata: open your mouth..
Uday: why kuch or bhi teekha khilana hai smirks..
Manyata: shut up and open your mouth..
He opens his mouth all bewildered and ready for something more terrible' but he was totally wrong'
She feed him a spoon of honey'
Manyata without making any eye contact: now you will be fine' she walks away leaving an smiling uday behind'
ye maanyata toh mere uday ki vatt lagane par tlli hai ..bt ya i liked it wen she went nd fed him the honey ..
uday meri jaan bina kuch kahe puri mirchi wala omlet kha gaya ...ab iska badla zarur lena maanyata se ...
promos--
marne ka irada hai kya ..?? itne acche promo dekar ...ab jitni jaldi promo diya hai utni hi jaldi update bhi kar dena ..
sorry again nd congo ..
sarah u r doin an amzing job ..
keep p the good work ...😊
Indian Mythology
