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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: vampire12345678

awesome

this was super duper awesome
lovely
the whole thing was so perfect
i loved the whole thing
please update soon
i loved uday's point of view and manyata chasing the theif
please please please update soon
i loved the whole thing really
loved the writing

Thank you dude. Hope you lyk the next chapters too😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: Vasishtha

Hey Malvika.😊 Character sketch was so unique. Supercool yaar.😉

Manyata as a Inspector I liked it.👍🏼
Awesome update.😊 UV actually annoyed cos of J but pretending to be nice in front of Media.😆 UV-Tanya first meeting was great.😊 now UV is interested to know Tanya.😉 I like it.😊
Thank u so much for the PM.😛
Do update soon.🤗 I'm waiting for the next chapter.😊
🤗 🤗

Hey vasishtha. thank you for lyking it. & UV has 2 be annoyed with J (drama queen).i wil update soon😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nyc strt
do continue it 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: ashukapoor007

Hey Malvaika! Awsum Start!! ManVeer met😲 OMG Dat Was Sooo Dhansuu 😆 Pls Don't mind Mind My Language😆 J 😡 aghhh!! JaiVeer Engagement ???? Wat Have U Planned Baby?? Well This Update Was Short But Sweet & Intresting One😉 ! TY 4 d PM & update Soon 😃

I'm not minding any language as long as you comment. Thank you for lyking it😊.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Sorry for being late but I am updating all my FFs & SSs now. So this is were I start. I am giving a small chapter 2 of this FF.

Chapter 2

Recap:- A chasing and a happy ending of the day.

Uday

The raining has ceased. I am heading home with my so called fiance! And she is annoying as usual. Not a moment's peace is given to me.

J: Wo larki kitni battameez thi na, Uday!

Me: J tum please kuch der chup reh sakti ho?😡😡 Usne tumhara bag bachaya aur tum ho use kose jaa rahi ho!!

J(sulking): U dear, tum mere fiance ho ya uske.

I thought to myself that I would be thankful to be Inspector Tanya's fiance but kept quiet thinking of dad and dadisaab. J unki poti lagti hi nahi hai. Mujhe unke liye ye karna hi parega. A sudden jerk broke this chain of thoughts. We had reached the Devgarh Mahal. J tugged at my hand.

J: Chale Uday?

Me: Ha, chalo.

We went in together, J was clinging to me as usual. I had been summoned by Dadisaab. The reason why I entered with her.

J: DS se milke kya tum mere paas aoge?

Me(flirtingly): Of course J. Anything for you! Par ab tum apne kamre mein jao. Mujhe pehle Dadisaab se milna he.

J went to her looking very pleased with herself. And she was quite pleased too. But the flirting part was just because I was in her territory. I crossed the hallway and proceeded towards Dadisaab's office.

Me: Seemaji wo andar he kya?

Servant: Ha rajkumar, rajmata andar hi hai.

I knocked at the door of her office & called: May I come in?

DS: Aayiye beta. Hum aapke hi rah dekh rahe the.

Me: Ghanikhamma dadisaab.

DS: Khammaghani, beta. Bethiye. Hume aapse kuch baat karni hai.

Me(sitting down & smiling): Kya baat hai dadisaab! Ap bohot kush lag rahe hai!

DS: Kush to hum bohot hain aj. Hum soch rahe the ki ap aur J ek 20 days ke trip par jaye. Shaadi se pehle.

A electric current passed. 140 volts ka jhatka. 20 days with J all alone before marriage!!! But the shock remained in my mind. I acted quite normal outside not letting the horror come to my face.

Me: Hum log akele jayenge kya? Aur kaha jayenge?

DS: Nahi beta. Aap aur J apne dosto ke saath jayenge.

Me(heaving a sigh of relief in my mind): Press wale toh nahi honge waha?

DS: Hum toh press se apki sagai ki baat chupane ke liye hi ap logo ko bheg rahe hai waha pe.

Me: Par hum ja kaha rahe hai?

DS: Ap log jaa rahe Andaman & Nicobar Islands.

Me:The other side of India. Bay of Bengal pe! Par hum jayenge kaise? Flight se, zaroor?

DS: Nahi beta ap log ship se jaa rahe hain. Yaha se Kolkata plane pe aur phir waha se ship pe jayenge.

Me: Good idea Dadisaab! Waha pe toh press pohoch bhi nahi payenge.

DS: Par apko kuch extra security chahiye hogi.

Me: Kyu?

DS: Ships ab utne bhi safe nahi hai. Isiliye ap yaha ke kuch CBI Inspectors ke sath jayenge.

Me: Jee Dadisaab. Jo aap thik samjhe.

DS: Thik he beta ab ap jaiye. Bohot der ho gayi he.

Me: Par Dadisaab kya ap J ko ye news de denge?

DS(smiling one of her most charming smiles): Ap kal subha J ko bata dena.

Me(looking embarrased): Jee, Daidisaab. Ab hum chalte hain.

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Malhotra Family

Shopping was complete they were having a great dinner. But in the middle of that some called Abhijeet.

Caller: Hello, Abhijeet tumhari beti kaha hai?

Abhijeet: Tanya? Wo toh yahi hai. Kyu kya hua?

Everyone sitting around the table looked at him. Tanya looked a tad bit worried.

Caller: Usse phone dena!

Abhijeet assured the caller and handed the phone over to Tanya.

Tanya: Hello, sir!

Caller: Inspector tumhara phone kaha hai?

Tanya: Wo paani mein bheeg ke kharab ho gaya he.

Caller: Kaise?

Tanya: Lambi kahani he sir. Par ap kisliye phone kiye the?

Caller: Tum hare liye ek assignment hai.

Tanya: Okay, abhi jana hoga?

Caller: Nahi. Next week 20 days ke liye tumhe Andaman & Nicobar Islands jana hai. Royalties ke saath. Tayyar ho jane ke liye?

Tanya: Of course sir. Par mujhe akele jana hai kya?

Caller: Nahi tumhare saath humare ward ke aur bhi inspectors jayenge. Aur tumhe normal dikhne ke liye apne family ka ek young member le jana parega.

Tanya: Aditya chalega?

Caller: Ha chalega, agar use koi problem na ho to.

Tanya: Okay sir. Kal milte he.

The caller cut the call. Tanya shifted her attention to her family to find everyone was staring at her with a questioning glance.

Tanya: Kya hua?

Aditya: Phone pe mere bare mein kya baat kar rahi thi?

Tanya: Ghar chal sab batati hoon.

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So guyz this was the 2nd chapter of this FF. Leave your precious likes & comments.

Signing off, Malvaika.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Lovely update dear continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Malvika I'm sorry for not commenting before actually i'm not more active member on forum this days so Thanks for the PM...:):)I have read its character sketch & both chapters and it was superb...loved Uday character...waiting for next chapter...continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#28
Awsomeee...very nice update soon thanx for PM.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#29
awesome
thanks so much for pm
manveer together for 20 days
wow
i can see romance coming
please please update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res...adha parha hai..pura parhke comment karungi😊..till now its very good👍🏼

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