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Posted: 13 years ago
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HEy coolgirl 🤗, what a heart throbbing update 👏. Loved it😃.

Comming to ur update:

Part 1 : introducing the evilness of Rajmata: very well described, her April fools day joke, her evil laughter on seeing Komal in despair, all very beautifully portrait-ed . I could feel it happening in front om eyes.👏

Part 2:Victimized komal but still not a damsel in distress: Loved how you carved Komals intial happiness, her capabilities, her excellence, and her helplessness in not understanding what was her fault, where did she go wrong in all of this. And then her decision to fight for her Child. The way she handled the situation with the rowdy guys was just fabulous 👏, proves what a true Rajkumari and Maharani she is.

One question here, If she has a Dada, who is gonna be the Maharaj of Rajghar, the Komal has to be juts Rajkumari not yuvrani, right?

But anyways, loved her wit, intelligence and self control in every situation. She was thrown out of her own house, she was shattered into pieces, but still she picked up each and every piece and composed herself all alone 👏, really have never loved Komal in the serial, but here a big salute to her 😛

Thanks for the PM doll, and do continue soon 😊




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Posted: 13 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: chitra_rao

HEy coolgirl 🤗, what a heart throbbing update 👏. Loved it😃.


Comming to ur update:

Part 1 : introducing the evilness of Rajmata: very well described, her April fools day joke, her evil laughter on seeing Komal in despair, all very beautifully portrait-ed . I could feel it happening in front om eyes.👏

Part 2:Victimized komal but still not a damsel in distress: Loved how you carved Komals intial happiness, her capabilities, her excellence, and her helplessness in not understanding what was her fault, where did she go wrong in all of this. And then her decision to fight for her Child. The way she handled the situation with the rowdy guys was just fabulous 👏, proves what a true Rajkumari and Maharani she is.

One question here, If she has a Dada, who is gonna be the Maharaj of Rajghar, the Komal has to be juts Rajkumari not yuvrani, right?

But anyways, loved her wit, intelligence and self control in every situation. She was thrown out of her own house, she was shattered into pieces, but still she picked up each and every piece and composed herself all alone 👏, really have never loved Komal in the serial, but here a big salute to her 😛

Thanks for the PM doll, and do continue soon 😊


yes chitra, komal is only the rajkumari of rajghar because her dada is the maharaj. she was the mahrani of devghar, but that title was stolen from her so now she is just the rajkumari of rajghar.



Edited by kakacool123 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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👏👏thanks..brillaint.amazing...pelase updta esooon...and pm me when you do updte...👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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uve got me curious.like reali curious.plz cont soon n i loved it buh komal was thrown out?.reali so d prologue mysterious person was manyata...kya baat hain
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Posted: 13 years ago
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very interesting...😊
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Chapter 2 –New Beginning

"They kicked me out, Daada – Rajmata threw me out of the house, she told me that a daughter in law like me was not needed" I explained, my mind was thousand of miles away reliving the happy moments of my past life. My hand stroked my stomach lightly comforting a new being whose existence had become Komal's first priority.

"KYA! Arpreet humare rifle baar nikalo" Daada eyes burned with hatred and he shouted a few more commands as the guards emerged "Unki itni Himaat, ke voh humari choti ki saath itni naanin sathi Karin!" The guards assembled and Daada was on the phone in seconds.

Komal panicked, there were too many guards; Rajghar was higher in status and wealth, they would take down every little member of Devghar and she couldn't let that happen no matter what she felt towards them. This battle must be fought with the mind and not the heart, if they played with the heart, emotions would weaken their instincts and there every step would be met with thorns, they would fall hard and Komal at the moment had every thing to lose and to throw themselves into a war would bring back casualties, some she could not afford."

Komal ran to her Daada and grabbed him "Daada no, tumhe meri kasam, aap kuch bhi ni karoga!" Searching her Daada eyes, Komal felt pain disguised behind the immaculate features, pain caused by seeing the sister he loved unconditionally so unjust fully thrown away like garbage.

"Daada, Har koi Jaang mei hatyaro ke saath nahi, dimaag se keli jati hai. Humhe unse koi rista nahi rakna, this is not how i want the future of my new life to begin." Even as she said the words, Komal knew they were lies – if she could turn back time, she would trade her soul for the chance but for her child she could never revisit them again even the thought made her shake with what they were capable of doing.

Daada waved his hand and the guards disappeared, Komal emotions had reached crescendo and for once her mind closed down the rajkumari lesson objectives as they vanished from her hold and she became a girl whose family had abandoned her. The tears leapt free of there rightful place and flowed freely, her Daada hugged her and led her to her room "Choti hum tumko istara se nahi dekh saktai, Seema ji?"

The maid moved forward slowly "Ji hazoor"

"Choti ko uske kamra tak legao" The maid gently took me from Daada arms and we made our way up to the second floor.

I thanked Seema Ji and closed the door, sitting down i let my mind flow over the wounds inflicted upon me and allowed them to heal, closing each and every one. There was one customary rule with wounds; they left scars that you could never be ridden off.

For the Hundredth time this night i patted my stomach reassuring the small being that it would never be alone.

My sweet child, I promise to you on my ancestors blood and heritage , that you may feel alone in this world but i will nurture you so that even the world's knives will not be able to penetrate you, your teaching will be as through as a rajkumari's. I will educate you not only to Sit, Eat and Talk like an Uvrani but Fight, Slay and Play with the Mind like every great Yuvraaj is skilled in. You will never be scared or put in a position were difficulties will plague your mind. This is my promise to you child, this is my wish!

My eyes fluttered closed and I lay my head against the plush cushions, the nightmares came easily as the flow the water from a tap. I pushed my mind to what had once been an ideal life.

1st April 2012

"Ma, get up, come on – it's time for your medication." Manyata gently shook her mother and eventually after some tossing and moaning she opened one eye and hugged her daughter.

"Hey My princess, Are you off to work today?" Her mother released her and sat up pulling M down beside her.

"Yes, but make sure that you don't Jay or Vijay Bhai that i can't attend there graduation. I promise I'll buy them something nice but I'm pitching to a new cosmetics company today, and i really can't miss it." I pulled an Aspirin out of the packet and handed it to my mother with a glass of water, just as a Guard walked in, he looked excited and pleased.

"Maam, today my wife gave birth to a baby boy and because of this Khush Khabari i wanted to give you this metai" I smiled at him and took a jalebi out, biting it and savouring the taste.

"Thank you Ram, on this very special occasion you should be by her side, taking care of her – you can have a 2 week leave starting from now." I said

The Guard looked shocked and his eyes watered. "Maam, app ki bhout, bhout shukriya"

He left quickly, and M stood up and kissed her mother softly across the forehead "I'll be going."

***

"Manyata Maam, you have the meeting at 3:00 PM and the rally at 5:00 PM, i have cancelled most of your presentations and meetings today to make room for the prep of the Pitch and because you specifically told me to Cancel all schedule reminders around the time of the rally race." Abhiya, My PA said looking through his IPAD, with a scrutinising stare.

"Abhi, Take it easy, everything will be completed." My mind was just filled with a new challenge at completing the race.

I stepped into the Boardroom and was met instantly with 20 pairs of eyes, I swallowed

"Good Afternoon, I am Manyata Singhania; I am the Manger of Singhania Care Cosmetics and today I'm going to pitch for the new Skin Care Cream – Forever young, this new cream has been tested thoroughly by dermatologists and not only looks but makes the user feel younger, this product is smooth and first to push all of its competitors out of the challenging market, Customer reports are to be believed that 90% of all consumers fully recommended this ointment , for those of you who have been in the Skin Care Market for a long period of time, will know that all of Singhania Products, are germ and allergy free. Our customer care is at the all time high and from this point on we are moving upwards making bigger and better brands, with that yet traditional feel. I know that together Singhania Care Cosmetics and Rutherpritab Singh Care Collection can make both of our Companies move so far that no one would be able to lift a hand upon us. So what do you Say?"

There was a long, deep silence, until the whole Boardroom erupted into applause, People got up to shake my hand and Manyata smiled politely, the reaction was expected. Pitching like his had become her second skin and the sense of thrill inside of her that no other could replace, the sense of a new challenge she had crossed.

Leaving with another deal under her arm, M felt proud. There was an argument going on the at the Main reception and M knew the familiar voices

"Excuse me she is my Jiji and me and Vijay are her siblings, how dare you stop us from meeting her!" Jay's voice was hard and she looked ready to burst with frustration

"Jay, Vijay" I called out to them and instantly the anger left there faces and they ran towards me, grabbing me in a bear hug.

"We graduated, Jiji, I'm soo happy and where are our gifts. In fact why weren't you there with Aunty and Papa? We kept searching for you in the crowd, for that we better get some good gifts."

I laughed loudly "Okay my sweet sister, come on I'll show you your gifts there waiting outside"

Jay and Vijay's eyes widened twice there size "Really!"

I Nodded and led them outside waiting on the curb were 2 sleek black Ferrari's; I pulled the car keys from my pocket and handed them over. They both hugged me one more time and leapt towards their gifts.

Leaving the office in my own Mercedes i got home and went straight to were i knew my uncle would be doing his regular sword fights. No doubt he was there, a shiny silver sword in hand; i took my own blade from its stand and stood in a fighting position.

"Come on Adaa, let's see what you've got" My voice was brisk and clear.

My uncle turned and we began, the swords clinked together and we were off in a flurry, hitting and moving – defending and attacking – each movement was panther like and cleverly executed, with little room for error we were as good as each other, one had years of experience and the other had a will of a lioness. I pounced forward in attempt to de sword my Adaa, but as swiftly as a tiger protecting its territory, My Adaa flung out and moved the sword away from him grabbing me he turned me around so that i was facing the front and his sword at my neck, my own weapon hit the floor and i closed my eyes in defeat.

"Tum, Phir Haar gayye Choti" My Adaa remarked, I nodded disappointed at my loss

"Choti, The first rule of battle is never underestimating your opponent, you attacked thinking my defence was weak and I protected, proving that my attack was stronger. All games must be played with the mind Choti, only then can you truly win. Jab tum josh se khelo giyye, tho phir tum kese Jite hasal karo giyye. Remember Manyata Josh se Ni Hosh se khela karo!" I nodded the logic in the concept behind that was true but there was always two sides to the sword and Manyata forgot her Rajkumari teachings and spoke with words that came from within her.

"Adaa, I play with Josh, because i don't measure my wins and losses, for me i fight with passion, if i lose then my thrill and drive was not strong enough and if i win then my force and mind game both played a part in my win."

Adaa looked at me with a new found respect and astonishment "Well Done Choti, now you've not only learned to play with Hosh but you've incorporated Josh through your passion to win. You truly are an exceptional Rajkumari."

I laughed bitterly

"How can i be a Rajkumari Adaa, after what my Grandmother and Father did, they stole that right from me a long time ago, uncle."

The astonishment vanished replaced by a hard look "Choti, You don't become a Rajkumari through Position and Prosperity. The blood of your ancestors and the teachings of your people is who you are, it is your Legacy and Heritage that runs deep in your veins and no one has the right to steal or seize that. Your Birthright is what you have to fight for and Manayta always bear in mind that with Birthright comes great responsibility and to find the Uvrani within you, you must look further than with a naked eye and i know that you most certainly have power and knowledge to fight and battle for a nation."

I smiled lost in thought, how could i find it sometimes M wondered whether her Lost Heritage could ever be reclaimed. Rajghar had moved far away from the Royal Social Circles, becoming a more modernised family. Yet the Painstaking Rajkumari Lessons continued!

Her phone buzzed and M looked at the caller ID, it was Abhiya; she picked up on the second ring:

"Maam, it is precisely 4:30 PM, we need to get you to the rally race. I am waiting outside in the jeep!" His voice was stiff with compressed frustration, i told him I'd be there, and looking through my call history I noticed 10 miss calls. Oops looks like i know why he's angry!

I grabbed my gear and went out to meet Abhi; he was waiting in the car with a sullen expression and i quickly apologised.

"Oh Abhi, I'm soo sorry, you know i hardly get time to spend with my family, i put my phone on silent's that's why i couldn't answer your calls. It won't happen again, i really do appreciate all the work you do for me." I said earnestly

Abhi smirked and his happy – easy going personality reappeared and he jogged around in his seat flattered.

The rally race was M's favourite sport, there were some big competitors around and M went to change into her racing gear. She wore a Red and white full tracksuit, with stripes and a belt to hold everything in place:

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The shoes were red and laces white – they were sneakers and M felt most comfortable racing with them. The car was a sleek red and white racing car with a ferocious horse power and neon light. If anyone had called it an animal, they would have pinned the description.

M was racing with 12 other competitors, sitting beside her was Abhiya – it had taken tremendous amounts of persuading to make him sit alongside her and right now he was trembling with fear.

The countdown began: 10, 9,8,7,6...

Abhiya released a little yelp "Its okay Abhi, Pretend that you're reading me the reminders for tomorrow."

He nodded quickly

"You have 4 reminders..."

3, 2, 1

"Go"

The screams and cheers were undeniable as M pressed down on the accelerator and pushed her car forward. Abhi screamed

"Get me out, please save me; I hate you M, MUUUMMYYY"

I Laughed "This is just the beginning Abhi, watch what happens next"

***

Uday loved rallying and this game he would win at any cost, the girls screamed and clapped as he stepped onto the track, his killer smile and good lucks never disappointing him. The pristine features didn't let any girl near, he was spoken for and this made the girls even more nuts about him. He was HOT, undeniable and taken, though his Fiance Rajkumari Anvesha didn't seem to be present. Her loss!

As the countdown began, Uday looked over at the White and Red racing car next to him, unexpectedly the person wore a helmet and they'd selected a car just or even equally as high-quality as his! The race began and Uday accelerated forward, his car roughly throwing him forward and in seconds he was ahead of the losers. Uday had a passion and a talent for rallying, he manoeuvred the car from side to side bullying the other competitors and once again he reached the last lap with a noticeable gap between himself and the car behind.

He could taste victory in his mouth and he savoured it. The joy and thrill were a swirl of emotions he felt, he changed the speed and accelerated faster.

The white and red car speed up and met up with him, they were head to head and the cheers and squeals were at there all time high. Uday believed in challenges and sometimes that crossed over into danger, right now he had no seatbelt or helmet on, the cars were banging against each other causing frenzy on the race track. Uday pushed forwards but the car matched his speed.

***

Manyata used her Uncle's teaching to guide her... never underestimate you opponent ... logic... Josh se ni Hosh se.

They had nearly reached the end and then Manyata used her mind and not her passion, she slowed down and let the car over take her as soon as she was just few meters away from the finishing line she accelerated down and overtook the black car cleanly and crossed the line. The crowds broke into applause, as Manyata swung her car and circled it around his for a few moments looking outside her window the spectators had stood in ovation.

She got out with Abhiya who had turned green, the boy got out of his car as well, he looked at her with an intense stare; he looked considerably baffled at losing. I guess its not his strong point, Manyata blew him a kiss and smirked she loved toying with those who were full of themselves, the boy blinked and a slowly and inquisitive smile overtook his striking features, girls and boys alike ran up to stand behind him like a power ridden army. The girls looked sick, their faces masked in makeup caked up against. Pathetic!

The Judge ran upto her and shook her hand as quiet descended upon the those in the crowds, he tried to hand over the trophy but i only wanted to know one thing:

"What was my time" I said removing the gloves

The man looked at me dumbstruck, i repeated my question

"4.09s"

"What! Shit i don't want that trophy; i didn't beat my previous time of 4.08s."

The crowds stared at her in disbelief; she looked at the attractive young boy and smirked.

"Give it to him; i can't see his pitied expression. After all i was taught to give my unused things to the less fortunate."

I walked away my hair blowing in the breeze, the air tickling me gently as Abhiya followed me.

***

Uday stood star struck, his gaze never left her and to those who knew him, thought it was very sinister. Uday didn't stay interested for a long time but in this occasion he was very fascinated about the young girl who had so shamelessly embarrassed him but had also caught his attention.

Please comment and like, it's a long update, Please enjoy😉😛😊

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Posted: 13 years ago
#37
It was a fantastic update... loving is such a small word for it... it was something beyond it.
It was exhilarating... ufff I'm totally blown away. Excellent work Ash!

Btw one blooper I noticed, wasn't M wearing a helmet? so she blew Uday a kiss while wearing the helmet or did she take it off...I mean did Uday see her face or did she stay hidden from his gaze?

I was kind of confused about it ... plzz edit this part to get rid of this confusion.
Edited by mahi0809 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#38
it was really really awesome loved it :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
#39
It's a completely different concept.love the ff to the core...pls pm me when you update next
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome update ash 👏good work 👏do continue soon👍🏼👍🏼

this is for my special sister ash love u❤️🤗


Edited by smiley12 - 13 years ago

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