I killed Uday- OS! PART 3 on PAGE 12 Updated.

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Adden

@Add123

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Posted: 13 years ago

#81

Okay so finally done with Part 3, on the insistence of you guyz 😃

Hope you will like it 😳 Yes I know a lot of Jay 🤢 But she plays a big role in ManVeer life ... so had to put her in! 😳

Okay for the passionate romance at the end 😆 I'm surely going to hell ... because writing such besharam stuff in Ramadan is not something a passenger to heaven would do! 😆😳😭 But couldn't help it! 😉 ☺️

There is perhaps one more part to this OS and then it'll be done! 😃

Hope you liked this part 😳 Do leave your views and do hit "Like" if you liked it 😃

Cheerz.

:-ADDEN-:

Edited by Add123 - 13 years ago

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757315

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Posted: 13 years ago

#82

wonderful the way u made J realise her mistake i wish something like that happens in the show this update was wonderful loved manveer scenes please update as soon as possible

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hamra

@rocker12

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Posted: 13 years ago

#83

awesome it was just briliantly written

ohh what a reality check for j was the best part

h ow could i say it was the second best as the kisses which he was teasing was fabulous loved it cont soon :)

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@-SilverAngel-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#84

OMG that was AMAZING!!!... So playful yet so innocent.
I loved how you did justice with showing Jay her faults... it was well thought out and the dialogues were splendid. I liked her realization of the hurt that she caused and the guilt that followed it😊😊👏👏

I liked how the childishness and masti that ManVeer shared in the beginning returned in this part. Manyata has really grown/ come a long way as a mature girl in your OS but I was really happy to see traces to the child like innocent Manyata in your OS. It was dreamy😍. She grew but kept her essence in tact for her beloved... extraordinary👏👏👏👏

Must says Adden dear, there is a soulfulness in your writing that does not seem cheesy, OTT, or under worked but something at par with excellence⭐️⭐️.

I can't wait to see how you sort things behind Manyata's elders and her sudden marriage?.. or if the truth of her marriage will even be revealed.. will Jay confess her sins or keep them hidden in her heart?... so many questions but I have full faith on your writing capabilities...

Edited by mahi0809 - 13 years ago

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Sonali

@adventure_gurl

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Posted: 13 years ago

#85

wow Adden loved the update!

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517072

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Posted: 13 years ago

#86

U know I just loved dis update!!👏

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oyshee

@..oishu..

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Posted: 13 years ago

#87

awsum awsum awsum!!!!! finally part3...now update part4 fast!!!

and,now..plzzz check my post yaar!!!! plzzz plzzz plzzz!!!!! i reaallly need your opinion!!!

plzzz check this: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3121585#61942648

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Zainab

@--Zenu--

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Posted: 13 years ago

#88

Superb one Adden! Finally Jainandani Realised her Mistake! Wooow ManVeer full too hun? Loved ManVeer ! Ty 4 d pm & Cont choon 😃

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Sarah

@MsLuscious

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Posted: 13 years ago

#89

L0ve it swty plx update da next part ASAP

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#90

loved the update loved jay realization of what she did and how she hurt everyone with her disgusting ways and her wants not caring who she destroyed to get what she wanted loved it loved uday and maanyatha romance so cute and sweet thanks for the pm loved it awesome

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