Review story 1
Read it . I thought I will put down my thoughts as later I may forget
I really liked the build up to your story. From the first sentence you have been able to attract my interest. I liked the worry Abhijeet felt for purvi but more then that I liked what you said about if that package has weapons. The story is moving fast and is giving food for imagination . Who are these oppose , if not terrorists and what do they want???. Now I can't wait to finish it. I will be biting my nails till I can get back to it again. Oh yes and your visualisation effects are too good and I am also liking your narration style of present situation then taking us to the past
I am writing this as I am reading so am sorry if it sounds a bit disjointed 😆. Ok thank you for bringing out the intelligent Abhijeet that guard thing was really smart. Also I liked Purvi's fight scene . She really outsmarted them and went down fighting. Really enjoyed that portion. But you have used the word gut a bit too often😆. The person who has captured Purvi sounds very sinister but why have they chosen Abhijeet to do their dirty work?? Maybe answer will come later.
It's getting better and better so now this gang is playing some sort of double game with Abhijeet and want to create misunderstanding . Let's see your narration is amazingly good
I liked the reply Freddie gave to Pankaj. It was nice comic relief from heightened tension.😆
Ok I am a but confused at this point. ACP didn't know delegates have been kidnapped?? DCP gave them news??? Slightly confusing there. You should have been clearer but never mind.
This is really getting really interesting now, you have made the plot really intriguing. I dint understand who wrote the message behind the truck or was it another thing to trap Abhijeet or did Purvi write it.?? It's just a small thing but all in all I am finding it very gripping. So the boss wants to plays games with Abhi. Interesting
Btw are you Bengal??? Nothing to do with the story by by the name Arijit I wondered😆
Purvi is such a smart girl and your visualisation powers are extremely good. I can see her rubbing her hand against the sharp object. Waiting for her to free herself.
How did they put the bug in Abhijeet's jacket??!
Well it's going good. Waiting for the game to end so to speak😆
Ok first confusion got cleared while Daya was searching you clarified that message was left by purvi.
Finished the whole thing. I loved your style. Loved the valour and courage shown by CID. It was a gorgeous story written very well. You tied all the loose ends and the way you narrated different locations was superb. You did not loose track of the story at all. The best thing was purvi freed herself. Such things are very rare. And the ending. Gosh I was not expecting it. It was something different Very very well done
Keep it up
Rating 8.5/10
Story 2 review
Your start is so powerful and a bit scary.😆 I will write it as I read so forgive me if the review is a bit disjointed
Your English is really good and the story has a majestic opening. As if one is staring a thriller novel. Starting it with a mythological story is a really different and novel idea. Shows you are innovative.
Finished first chapter, it's interesting and very sinister. The closing part is so good that I guess can't wait to reach next chapter. Your narrative is extremely good and very descriptive. It's obvious you go into detail. Pace of the story is very good. The idea is unique and you give comic relief at stages.
The story is action packed and incidents halogen fast bad sequentially. It has a action thriller like quality. But at places it becomes a little bit complicated and focus is needed to understand .
But all in all very very good
9.5 /10
Story 3
The start and build up was very nice. You are a good narrator. Also I liked the way you distributed the team. Jungle scene was very very good.the child part was very sensitively written. Also you provided information on adoption part . I really liked that. Good and interesting story. The narration was very realistic and visual impact good. Culprit revelation was good unexpected . I felt the story lacked some action and thrill and was a little brief in some places. This is not a criticism only an observation going by your abilities and other stories. But all in all great job
Rating 8/10
Edited by Nandiniraizaada - 11 years ago
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