STORY : ABHIJEET AT RANSOM - POST 2,3, 4 ON PAGE1 - Page 10

Mazza as gaya padh ke... It really worked for me I am not disappointed or unhappy by Abhijeet sir now... Thank you so much Vis

Vizzy here i come! From my cell... So... Ready?

Pluses-
U hv stayed as usual true to the characters. Both adaalat and cid. Though adaalat portion was less, the way u built the story up is perfect for a 4 part crossover series- cid on fri then adaalat on sat then cid on sat then adaalat on sun. Perfect timings! Then abhijeet! Absolutely what he does when under pressure. He does act like this in this context. Loved acp as he reminded me of golden era acp praddy! Daya was absolutely himself as well. If he was in abhi's shoes, he wud have done this way and abhi wud hv been extremely suspicious... I still remember your daya centric story where he was in trouble. Then the build up of the suspense was so gripping cud not put the phone down! As usual your story was fast and simple which i love. It was very clear as in clarity of the story. Loved some dialogues the typical nuances of the characters and the duo.

Minuses- hm. I know its a tv serial therefore your story has to b in line wt the show and it was shown before, but a inspector like dave has no right to arrest a senior officer like abhijeet in this manner. He has to follow a protocol before arresting him. And the story seemed to be rushed in the final portion ie the adaalat part. Daya undestanding abhi's expression in the court kinds of confuses me- because daya wasnt there wen abhi was telling kd abt the neighbour... There are some minor points which i prefer to overlook because the overall story is perfect!

Reading this story has gvn me a feel good effect which happens wen i watch a good officer or abhi- centric episode wt minor bloopers but overall well written script and well directed plot! But thanks for omitting ott rhona dhrona torture!

Well done whiz viz! U r still one of my personal fav cid writers of the forum!!

Thanks for reading and thanks for the feedback. People feel motivated to write only when people read and comment.

Oh loved the Title!! Abhijeet at Ransom!

Originally posted by: visrom

I did hurry in the end because I came to know about Abhijeet's upcoming dance performance on V-day and I thought if I put the story on hold I may remain angry with him for several days and the story will be left hanging or I may write a story where I make Abhijeet get a proper punishment for that notorious dance. 😆

wonderful story vis di. Amazing

I m reading it now..di u have wonderfully written the story..will comment when i complete it.

Heh.. Finally read the story, Vis. I must say that I adored the flow in your story.

Di, First of all, very much thank u for writting such a beautiful story and sharing here...
I really loved the way story is presented and story is itself a realistics, as it is based on real facts, its add more flavour..i loved to watch such a cid and adalat bonding in tv...dialogue u present and the way u wrote is different and interesting though...the idea and creative is the core of the story..
Do let us read such a story time and again...thank u very much for the story di..