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Posted: 12 years ago

#81

Sorry for not having read it yet GD...

Will read and give my FB soon...

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@ANGELICEYES

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Posted: 12 years ago

#82

⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️ A classy masterpiece is the story Dada⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️. Fast paced, very well written.. I really liked how you incorporated caps with the scenes👍🏼👍🏼.. Specially the title cap was so scary😆.. Kya mast birthday gift di hai Daya sir ne Abhi sir ko 😎 😉 . 20 saal toh kya, Abhi sir jindagi bhar yaad rakhenge aisa gift 😛 . Initially I thought Daya sir is really kidnapped but after the 1st clue got that its his plan 😛. Involvement of Acp sir as voice of master mind is also a nice, warm touch🤗.. Loved Abhi sir's comment with naughtiness after knowing Daya sir's fullproof plan : agar bukh, pyass se mar jata toh😛😛?? Haan, Daya sir ki itni mehnat waste ho jati😆... You describe each and every scene so well Dada that I can see all in mind's eye⭐️⭐️. Just a small correction😳.. It will be 3 and 5 am on 21st july after 12 am instead of 3 and 5 pm😳. In a word, MARVELLOUS 😳😳 bday gift for Abhi sir and also for us.. A big round of applause to you Dada👏👏👏 and a biggy huggy 🤗🤗🤗 as return gift for Duo and you🤗🤗.
Are we going to get a cute popat story next😉😉😛??

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devildiva21

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Posted: 12 years ago

#83

hey so sorry for the late comment gd...!!😳

again a super duper hit story...!!!😉

wow abhi sir was so excited for his birthday and wanted to solve the case before 21 so that he could enjoy hsi birthday...!!!

he wanted a memorable birthday and daya sir ne kya plan diya...!!😆 by god... abhi sir was so scared...!!

waise kya fultu plan tha by god... sab mile hue acp sir se leke tarika tak...!!!😆

abhi sir was so shocked seeing everyone's participation...!!! love the way he tried and identify everyone...!!!

lol wai pe daya sir ko marna chalu😆 ab kaam hi aisa kiya hai... baal katwa liye?? to isliye aaya ye idea kya?😆

and everyone else was enjoying these scoldings😆

abhi sir's talk to daya sir at the end was very heart touching and lovely...!!! iss plan ne bht kuch sikha diya unhe... awww <3 <3 <3

aur end mai phir se cell and titan watch😆

that scene was very cute...!!!

loved the story...!!

👏 ⭐️

waiting for the next story😉

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: .Nishi.
Lovely and shocking story dada ⭐️ 👏
abhi sir ke to halat kharab kar di 😛
what a bday plan dada. Abhi sir ko hamesa yaad rehega. 😆
At last abhi sir knowm that Daya sir is allright, the best gift of him.
⭐️
very very well write. 👏

yes, I inspired from that Movie and wanted to Write Something...😉

Achanak Mood ban gaya...😃

Thank You so much for Ur Praise, Claps and Liking NISHI Baccha..😳

Edited by gadhadada - 12 years ago

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: chand_hp
Nice story😃👏

Thank You so much CHAND...😳

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: anjali_mahajan
for me Its all like dreamy nd scary story Gd
wt a well proofed plan 👏
lgta h baal ktwane ke baad bhai ka dimaag kuch jada chlne lga h 😆
Abhi bhai ke sath sacch bohot bura hua...kitna drr gye the wo
bhai ke liye kya kya nhi kiya n jb pta chla to its all planned...to boss marna to bnta tha
bechare Abhi bhai chale the apna b'day remembrable bnane n ye to lifetime tk yaadgaar rhega...😃

i like the first part wn abhi sir said "muje phr se cell or titan watch nhi chahiye"
n "is baar kuch aisa chahiye ki muje hmesha yaad rhe" or bhai ka deemag dekho fully remembrable bna diya...hehe 😃

its realy well planned nd i like the disguise scenes alott
every moment wn daya bhai describe the plan to abhi bhai 😃

nd daya bhai ne pehli baar itna jada deemag lgaya n unhe mila kya punches, slaps 😃
bt yes this time he deserve ...kitna preshan kiya bade bhai ko bt bhai ke lips n eye corner se blood nikl gya punches se...thats litle hurt
nd i like last part too...wt abhi bhai said was gud n quite true...nd bhai give him watch again...hehe 😃

so Gd well done boss 👍🏼 u write nicely 👏 nd its totaly hatke story nd filmy too coz itne planning ke liye bohot paisa chahiye hota h boss n fw wale to h hi kangaal 😉...budget concious 😃 ...wo itne paise to dete nhi ki itna sb planning ka khrcha bhai utha ske😉...even puri team mil kr bhi nhi...😆😃😆

Anyways do write boss nd m nt miss u coz miss unhe krte h jo pass na ho bt tum to mere pass hmesha mere dil mein rehte ho na...😉😊 Rahul 😊

🤣 Yes its Absolutely True...😉

Yaar, it was One of My Fav movie and wen I watched it, I had this Idea in My Bheja to write a Story on it... basically I did not do much except placing the CID Cast on it either the whole Story / Plot even Characters based on that Movie Plot in which HERO Brother did the Same with Him just to Activate His Life as He was Lagard as being living a life of a Multimilionare...😃

I really Appreaciated UR Feedback as U FEEL everything which is Necessory to every Reader if He want to Enjoy the Boring Stuff like My Stories...😆😆😆

Thank You so much ANJI😳... (in RAHUL FLIRTY tone😉)...

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: Radhikerani
Lovely Story !!!!

Thank You RADHI...😳

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: snehal.
why so serious gd?
Ab pitai tumhari hogi lekin.. Bechare humare abhi ko kitna tang karoge bhai ka naam leke.. 😛

Nicely written, though in some scenes i got confused what exactly you want to portray. I want to admit one thing though this time i got to know all this will be daya's yspt plan in first few lines only.
Loved the action packed sequences with last kitne bhi naye tarikese b'day manaye gifts toh humeshawlehi milenge touch i.e. titan watch and cell 😆.. The sleeping scene did made duo humans nahi toh bohot baar unme supernatural stamina hota hai..

Thanks for the story 😃

😆 even I was Confused in All Scenes that What I want to Portray...😉😆

Boss they are SENIOR SUPER HEROS na...😈

darasal Bhai Gift pehlay Khareed chukay thy tou phir say Khareednay ka No Chance...😉

Thank You so much SNEHAL...😳

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#89

Originally posted by: DUOlover123
Sorry for late reviewing.. anyways now coming to the story..
It's really great. But at the starting I was quite sure that Daya had plan all this for Abhi's birthday.. and somewhere in the middle I was thinking ke is baar Bhaijaan Bade Bhai ko maarne ka plan to nahi bana rahe.. 😆
I really cracked up at Ganjey part.. 😆
and lovely starting of the story.. so you dedicated two stories to Bade bhai on his birthday..
I think he will not only remember this birthday but he will get nightmares of all the adventure he did..
Keep rocking boss.. Keep bringing more good stories...
and loved the part where ACP revealed his part..

awww... I was also Cracked at that part...😆

wesay bhi GANJY ko GANJA hee tou bola jayey ga na...😉

I also like that Reveal either the ACP Presention Himself scene I could Imagine by Myself...😃

Thank you so much BHALOO...😳

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gadhadada

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Posted: 12 years ago

#90

Originally posted by: Raaz_sweet
That was a lovely story GD... Just loved every bit of it.. Kamaal kar diya aap ne..!! The mastermind plan was superb..!!👏

Im fully boosted up..😊

Baccha, aap nay tou isy parh kr aur Kamaal kr diya...😉😆

Thank You so much RAAZ Baccha...😳