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Originally posted by: visrom

Read the story GD. this story is a fantastic idea. Like Sonali said, I wish you had not made Daya cry so much...I wish his silence had spoken more.This is purely my view...I wish there were no Rahul. 😛...I wish it had been Freddie or maybe Asha who could recognise Daya's anguish...lots of maybes...your idea was great. I got a lot of ideas from your story...but no time to write anything. 😒

Originally posted by: shreela

awesome plot GD, and very well-written!👏👏 thanks a lot.😃

Originally posted by: ANGELICEYES

First of all a big big sorry Dada for such a late review😒.. Busy with studies, Puja etc. etc. .. Please accept the sorry of your baccha.. Now coming to the story..
Well what can I say.. Just enjoyed the time travel from the core 😳 😳. What a soothing, pleasing effect it gives to the reader's mind ⭐️ ⭐️.. The concept itself is MASTERPIECE ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️. Like Neha di said truly you filled the gap 👏 👏. Abhijeet sir...Abhijeet...Abhi This gradual transformation⭐️⭐️😳.. An amazing experience reading itself🤗 🤗. Thank you so much for this Dusshera gift Dada 🤗 🤗 🤗.

Originally posted by: gadhadada

First I m really Honored that U read it and give UR Precious FB so I'll Improvise it in Future... 😳

About BHAI Rona Dhona, I think just cz of Missing Bullet and Injured Witness, I make Him more in Tears cz in Panic, either with support of other and with Guilt, He always Bursts into Tears... but I tried Best not to continue it especially when trying to Write Some Decent...😆

Hmmm, so FREDDIE Sir or ASHA would be Tere other than RAHUL, UR intentions were really Brillient but DII, I can't get it in EPI, even it's just US the Writers of Fans Thought or I might say Hope that DUO ARE BEST BUDDIES... Cz I did not find anything especially Sharing between them and not from Recent from Classic Era too..😕

FW never showed them as Best Buddies, they Only showed them Good Colleagues so Both did not Share anything with each one till now specially Personal Matters...

ASHA was Bsent in STOLEN DYNAMITE so I skipped He character a bit, about FREDDIE Sir, I never found Him Mentally Close to BHAI but Yes He was so Close either more than ABHIJERT Sir, His Closiness Shwed by FW in Episode...😳

U got lots of Ideas from My Bhangaar Story...

Kya DII... Aap bhi... kuch bhi Bolti HAIN...😆

Thank You so much...🤗

Originally posted by: visrom

Not like that...what I mean is...yeah Daya is sometimes fragile. But when we write we can reduce it a bit. What I like is how he behaved in father's revenge or staged murder.

About this

Cz I did not find anything especially Sharing between them and not from Recent from Classic Era too..😕

That's the whole point. they have never shown anything 'in-the-face' in the past.

But when you see 50000 enemies...Daya is in full tension about Abhijeet going away alone. There you can make out that he always felt guilty about what happened in Stolen Dynamite.

See Unknown Lady." ACP saab ne kaha hai tumhe akele na chodoon." Daya always has been a bit anxious about Abhijeet's welfare. It's shown in a subtle manner. It's left for the audience to feel it.

In Shruti series, when Abhijeet decided to make the 'most important' decision, the only person he consulted was Daya.

I like it that way.

And yeah...point to be noted...men don't share too much stuff unlike women. They are from Mars, women are from Venus. Women share personal stuff with friends...men don't. 😆

About Rahul...he's entirely your creation. Somehow with such a big crowd I find it tough to accept him or any extra member in every story. It's purely my problem.😆 You can continue with him.

Originally posted by: gadhadada

Yes, Thats True, even in MURDERIOUS AFFAIR, the way Bhai casually deal that Orphanage track was really Good👏... I really like FW in that way but in SR INSP ABHIJEET... it was totally Shocking either ruined the way how He Doubts on Baray bhai and never tell him abt PURBI and all...😡

Somehow the word FRIENDSHIP was and is Not found in theeir Relations, the Scene which U mentioned was only a Collegue Perception or might be I said a Good Mutual Understanding between Two Same Desgnated Person working on same Organization quite Long and in Unknow Lady, DAYA Sir stress on Word ACP Sir nay kaha hay.. matlab He was only Obeying Order...😉

There is Nothing Friendship Kinda Stuff between their Relation... Yup A Good Understanding we said... So now I think what We as a Fan thought was Completely a Fan fiction...

there is no ABHI-DAYA... there is Only ABHIJEET and DAYA with Term Inspector or Sub or Senior Inspectors, FW never ever Show or feel that touch which would be presented in Friendship...

Either I Like till I watch BARAY ACHY LAGTAY HAIN just cz of RAM and VIKRUM Friendship... Somehow EK deal that Very Nicely till Last Year...😆

Everyone has their own views GD. I have always felt a very sweet friendship between duo. Unspoken, subtle...I like it this way and I can only relate to them this way. It's more real...more than shouting dosti dialogues.

It's not obvious...but you can actually see some things come naturally to them. They dont need to be told...that when Daya was bending to pick a laash from a cupboard, Abhijeet put his hand on the shelf above. It came naturally, not rehearsed. Satam sir rightly said...what you see on screen is exactly what they are...😊

Originally posted by: visrom

It's not obvious...but you can actually see some things come naturally to them. They dont need to be told...that when Daya was bending to pick a laash from a cupboard, Abhijeet put his hand on the shelf above. It came naturally, not rehearsed. Satam sir rightly said...what you see on screen is exactly what they are...😊