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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Gamayun

@Minionite

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Team Silver Trio

Posted: 13 years ago

Lovely idea Bhavana. I'll participate for sure in this contest. I say it every time and always miss, but this time it's a promise. It's a shapath. 😉

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

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Posted: 13 years ago

Good that you've taken the Shapath 😉

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Gamayun

@Minionite

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Team Silver Trio

Posted: 13 years ago

Entry 1

My first time ever writing for a story contest. Here it is:

ACP: Yeh kaun aaya hai?

Abhijeet: Yeh toh DCP sir lag rahe hain.

Daya: DCP sir yahan pe kya kar rahe hain?

Freddy: Main jata hoon.

ACP: Ruko Freddy.

DCP enters the bureau.

DCP: Aur ACP kaise ho?

Abhijeet: Sir aapne apne baal kaale kyun karva liye?

DCP: Freddy ke saath compete karne ke liye.

Vivek hides a laugh at this.

Abhijeet shocked.

Abhijeet: Freddy ke saath compete karne ke liye?

DCP: Haan. Freddy ke baal asle kaale hain toh maine bhi socha ke baal kaale kar loon taki mere bhi asli lagen.

Vivek and Purvi's turn to be shocked.

Purvi: Sir, Freddy ke baal asli kaale hain?

Abhijeet looks at Purvi.

Daya: Purvi yeh tumhe kahan se laga ke Freddy ke baal range huye hain?

Purvi: Vivek ne bataya tha.

The duo looks at Vivek in anger. Vivek quickly hides. Abhijeet looks at Daya and the two burst out laughing.

Vivek: Kya hua sir?

Daya: Freddy ke upar aisa masak pehle baar kisi ne kiye hai.

Abhijeet: DCP sir aap toh Freddy se kabhi muqabla nahi kar payenge kyun ki Freddy hamara assez hai aur aap'

Edited by khota_sikka_sri - 13 years ago

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Daydreaming

@Daydreaming

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

ENTERY: 2
Hi all. This is for the first time I am writing any scene.I hope its not very dumb 😳 (I am posting the picture first and the picture is followed by the happenings and the dialogues.)

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Daya and Abhijeet storming angrily in the bureau.
Abhijeet : Is Shamsher ki problem kya hai?? Humesha humare peeche pada rehta hai. Pichhlee bar aya tha toh tumhe suspend kawane ka order lekar aya tha. Is bar na jane kya bakheda khada karne wala hai.

Daya : Haan.. Aur toh aur yeh ACP sir bhi kuchh bata nahin rahe hain. Bus announce kar diya ke bureau me saari team ki meeting hai. Aur woh bhi us Shamsher ne bulaai hai.

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ACP sir enters.
ACP : Arey aa gaye tum sab?
Abhijeet: Haan sir. Ab bataiye kya karne jaa raha hai woh sarphira insaan?? Kya is baar hum sab ko suspend karne ka iraada hai uska?
ACP : Arey Abhijeet apney gusse par kaaboo rakho.
Abhiieet : Yeh aap keh rahe hain sir? Kya aap jaante nahin usey?
ACP : Haan main sab jaanta hoon. Tum bas jo main keh raha hoon woh karo.

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Till then rest of the team also gathers in the bureau. All are wondering about the reason of the meeting.
Freddy : Pata nahin woh Shamsher kya kehne waala hai. Logon ka mazaak udaane mein toh use bohot khushi milti hai.
Abhijeet : Aane do usey Freddy, dekh loonga kaun tumhaara mazaak udata hai.
Nikhil : Sir agar usney Daya sir ke bare me kuchh kaha na to main resign kar doonga.
Daya trying to hide somewhere while Abhijeet giving him glances.
Freddy : Oh. Chup raho Nikhil tum pehle hi yahan kum tension nahin hai.
Nikhil : Sorry sir.
Suddenly they hear the sound of the door. All look at that side.

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Shamaher enters. All are looking at him.
Shamsher: Woh aa gaye tum sab log?
Abhijeet : Ab aap ke saamne khade hain to jaahir hai ke aa hi gaye hain.
Shamsher (stammering) : Ha toh wo wo wohi keh raha tha main ke ke maine tum sab ko bulaya hai kyon ki...
ACP (with an amused look) : Haan haan kahiye aapne kyun bulaya tha..
Shamaher (still stammering) : Wo woh Da Daya se kuchh baat karni hai mujhe.
Daya : mujhse kya baat karni hai??
Shamaher : Wo whohh mmm muze tumse..
Daya: Kya? Mujhse kya?
Shamsher: Wohh mm mujhe...
Abhijeet : Isey ho kya gaya hai?? Dar toh aise raha hai jaise kisi ladki ko propose kar raha ho.
All trying to suppress their laughter.
Shamsher : Mujhe tumse maafi maangni thi. Sorry Daya. (and he storms out like a hurricane.)
Abhijeet : Yeh kya tha sir??
ACP : Is liye hi toh maine yeh meeting bulaai thi Abhijeet. Maine high command mein complaint ki thi Shamsher ke khilaaf Daya ki insult ke baarey mein. Aur haigh command se orders mile they is Shamsher ko Daya ki is tarah publically maafi mangne ke. All are very happy.
Suddenly Nikhil jumps like he has got an electric shock. YEAHHH... Usey mere Daya sir se maafi maangni padi. Daya and Abhijeet are

Edited by pvkd - 13 years ago

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Chintu.dummy

@Chintu.dummy

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

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abhijit and daya moved out in anger from bearue after hearing the news of arrival of Dcp shamsher from fredie.

abhijit: fredie tum jantay ho na, wo kitna kharoos aadmi hay

daya: aur dusrun ki beizzati karna us ki hobby hy.

fredie: per sir!

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suddenly Acp entered, and with much effort relaxed abhijit and daya to be at bearue, they heard Dcp voice behind, all members turned their neck.

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Dcp coming up with a suprise news that now he promoted two members and shuffle their job,

Dcp: arry Acp main tumhary officers kay liyey khushkhabri laaya hun.

Acp: sir kiya? (thinking) aap ki achi khabr bhi dhamakay wali hoti hay.

Dcp: main nay socha hay nikhil ko thori overhauling ki zarurat hay, tou usay main aj say abhijit kay sath ker deta hun.

daya moved his face to hide his big laugh while vivek after hearing cant control in his laugh.

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Dcp: aur dusra promotion tou Acp tum ko aur tumhary officer kay hosh he ura day ga.

Acp: abhi bhi kuch reh gaya hy.

Dcp: main aaj say daya ki duty forensic lab mein dr tareka kay sath laga raha hun.

abhijit: ki, kiya?!

Dcp: haan, daya nay is ki request ki thi.

abhijit: daya!

daya: boss, main ny tou bus kaha tha kay mujhy nikhil ki jagah koi aur day dein, mujhy kya malum tha ye us say bhi bara jhatka dy day ga.

abhijit completely shocked after hearing this, all stunned while daya in anger left the spot.

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

ENTRY 4.

Freddie(low voice): Abhijeet sir, kya hua, poori team bureau mein? Humesha aadhi team bureau mein rehti hai aur baaki baahar murder spot par hote hain. Aaj sab log yahan kya kar rahe hain?

Abhijeet: Muhe bhi nahin pata Freddie...lagta hai koi senti scene hone wali hai, ya hum mein se koi phasne wala hai. Isliye Daya ko bhi bula liya hai.

ACP: Abhijeet, kya phus phus ho rahi hai?

Abhijeet: Sir, Freddie jaanna chahta hai ki hum sab ek saath yahan kya kar rahe hain. Aaj main bureau aaya hoon aur Daya bhi yahin hai...baaki sab log bhi...

ACP: Yahan DCP Shamsher aane wale hain. Koi zaroori baat karni hai.

Daya: Kya? DCP Shamsher? Main kuch der ke liye baahar jaa raha hoon sir.

Abhijeet: Kahan jaa rahe ho?

Daya: Actually mere paas resignation letter nahin hai. Jo type karke rakhe the woh sab khatm ho gaye...mujhe fresh letter type karna padega.

Abhijeet: Sir, Daya ke saath main bhi jaa raha hoon.

ACP: Kahan?

Abhijeet: Sir, mere paas bhi resignation ke copies nahin hai. Main bhi jaa raha hoon copies banwane.

Abhijeet; Sir, Daya kahan hai?

ACP: Daya tumhare saath hi toh gaya tha, resignation letter type karvane.

Abhijeet: Sir woh DTP centre ke andar chala gaya aur bohot der tak baahar nahin aaya. Main andar jaakar dekha toh woh wahan nahin tha.

DCP: Hello. Main aa gaya. Daya kahan hai?

Abhijeet: Kya sir, aate hi Daya ko phasane ka plan bana rahe hain?

DCP: Kisne kaha ki main Daya ko phasane aya hoon? Actually mujhe pehle se maaloon tha ki Daya resignation type karne gaya hai. Toh maine use sms bheja ki iski zaroorat nahin hai.

Aur maine use yeh bhi bataaya ki main yahan kisliye aa raha hoon.

ACP: Achcha? Kya wajah hai sir?

DCP: Main headquarters mein baithkar bore ho gaya hoon. Aaj se main yahin aap logo ke saath CID bureau se kaam karne wala hoon.

Vivek laughs.

Abhijeet: Kya hua? Daya gaayab hai, DCP humare sar par baithne wale hain aur tum has rahe ho?

Vivek: Sir Daya sir real estate agent ke paas gaye hain...humare naye bureau ke liye office space dhoondne.

Edited by visrom - 13 years ago

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astonish

@astonish

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

Entry 5

DCP Enters the bureau

DCP: Kya hua... aaj yeh bureau mein ithni bheed kyon hai???
Everyone turns back

DCP: Koi tamasha chal raha hai kya... ya ACP dadaji pariyon ki kahaani suna rahe hai???

ACP (thinking): tamaasha... tamaasha mai kartha hoon.. ya yeh...

Abhijeet: Bas sir... ab bahut seh chuke ham... aap ACP saab ke baare mein hamaare saamne aise kaise bol sakthe hai???

DCP: Kyon...kya kaha maine... dadaji hi toh kaha... kuch galat kaha kya...??? Biwi ke gaayab ho jaane se kisi ki umar choti nahi ho jaathi...aur naahi shaadi na karne se 😛

Daya: Ab bahut ho gaya sir... aap aage aur kuch nahi kahenge...

Daya: aaj tak yeh abhijeet Tarika ji se sirf flirt kiye jaa raha hai... Kyon??? Kyunki... ise dar hai kahin shaadi ke baad biwi badal gayi to sab ko kya jawaab dega?? Girlfriend agar badal bhi gayi toh kam se kam kahega ki bhaag gayi kisi aur ke saath...lekin biwi ????? Is Freddy ko hi dekhiye.,... maine uthne ghar nahi badle...jithne biwiyaan badli hai Freddy ne 😛

Edited by astonish - 13 years ago

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Debasree

@debasree04

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

ENTRY 6

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Abhijeet : Are sir yeh DIG kahan se aa gaya?
ACP : Abhijeet yeh Shamser ab DIG nehin raha...iska demotion ho gaya...yeh DCP ban gaya
Freddy : Kya baat kar rehe ho sir?
Daya : Sir, pata nehin iss baar yeh kya karne wala hein !!

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DCP Samsher : Kyun Pradyuman kaiso ho? Mujhe vul to nehin gaye?
Abhijeet : Kya baat kehe rehe hein Sir...hum aur aapko vul jaye...nehin sir yeh nehin ho sakta
Freddy : Magar Sir aap to...(some pause)...mera matlab DIG the to yeh DCP kaise ban gaya?
DCP : Errr...main main...yeh sab afbai hein aur kuch nehin...
Abhijeet : (in a undertone) Kutte ki dhun itni asani se sidha nehin hoga
DCP : Abhijeet ..kuch kaha tumne
Abhijeet : Nehin nehin sir
Vivek is laughing to hear all this

Picture 3

DCP : Dekho yeh tum log sab CID chod do aur himalay ki taraf chale jao
Abhijeet : Ainnn...
Purvi : Abhijeet Sir yeh DCP sir kya keh rehe hein
Vivek : Sir mujhe lagta hein DCP sir ki dimaag kharap ho gaya
Abhijeet : Vivek sahi kab tha jo kharap hoga

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Daya : Boss, mujhe lagta hein yeh DIG se DCP ban ke baad yeh Samsher pura pagol ho gaya hein
Abhijeet : Haan yaar...pata nehin kis gadhe ne iss DIG banaya tha...are demotion karne ki kya jarurat thi sidha nikal dena chahiye tha
Daya : Sahi kehe rehe ho Boss...chalo yahan se...nehin to mein kuch kar baithunga !!

Edited by debasree04 - 13 years ago

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Bhavanab

@Bhavanab

Stunner

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Posted: 13 years ago

#10

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Edited by Bhavanab - 13 years ago