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ANGELICEYES thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
I would really love to watch such an investigative, action packed case onscreen. Snehal di has mentioned many things I want to say, so am not typing them again. Liked the fact ACP sir gave that inspector a kadak dant 😆. He deserve it fully and your writing.. I simply adore it. Overall a fantastic, professional presentation.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Thank you so much, everyone. It's truly encouraging. 😊 Will try to write more whenever time permits.
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Posted: 11 years ago
That was an awesome story, bro. 👏
Some scenes were so realistic that they were playing close me especially the action towards the end 👍🏼. I liked the way you chose to give the twist there 😊

Great job! 👏⭐️
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hey demonstar i read ur story, the case of the desperate call, its amazing full of action specially the ending, all that motor boat and all sequence, really great one 👍🏼
Superb story well done ⭐️
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Posted: 11 years ago

Thank you so much, Resh and Veena. 🤗 😊

Anyway, here's a poem I began writing as a doodle a while ago, and finished today since it turned out better than expected. It's dedicated to the bond between ACP sir and Purvi mam. I know it's not everyone's cup of tea, and anyone who has issues with our dear "stupid soap queen" or whatever is most welcome to ignore it. I do hope all others like it and the way I've tried to portray it. Please do give me your honest feedback. 😊

*****

"FATHER"

Every moment felt amplified with utter guilt
Every second agonizing to sit through
Sunken in dreadful realization to the hilt
My conscience shattered as realization grew

In a single thoughtless act of desperation
I had fallen victim to near betrayal
Once laden with dreams and aspiration
Now reeling as though hit by a ship's hull

In a time when the world shunned me with scorn
You saw the grave reluctance at my core
Knowing about my past, when I lay torn
All responsibility for me you gladly bore

My papa I shall forever hold in highest respect
Giving your compassionate advice its due
But in course of this, I never did suspect
That I would find what I always sought in you

In your eyes I see pure and untouched humanity
In every touch I feel your care most genuine and warm
In your smile I see the divine, with no trace of vanity
In your words I feel truth in its purest form

In the line of duty, you shall never see me flinch
Nor shall I uphold anything over my duty's call
But when it comes to those I love, then in a pinch
My entire being collapses like a brittle wall

They mercilessly hurl all ridicule and slander
Call me a drama queen, crybaby, filth in the sand
But I never let my heart and soul ever meander
For I know you are always there to understand

Father, I fear more than anybody ever saw
It gnaws and thaws my inner being to the core
No matter how strong I'm as a guardian of law
I fear for you all as we march towards hell's door

I know you taught us the importance of sacrifice
The spectre of death leaving doubt if we'll survive
I care not about myself, but feel chills cold as ice
For I cannot even think of my family not being alive

My team is my family, my loyalty, my love
There is nothing I cannot do for you
Day and night I fear of hellfire from above
What dangers on you all may come out of the blue

I see in you, father, that assurance and solace
Encouragement to always put my duty first
A living idol you are, of that dignity and grace
My venerable teacher on paths yet not traversed

You nobly taught me to take life in its stride
To greet all obstacles with an unyielding smile
To accept whatever the divine gifts me with pride
To use precious time only in things worthwhile

I admit I'm weak, for I care too much
I can do nothing about it, I accept that too
They'll call me an emotional fool with a crutch
But I only know, father, that I can't bear to lose you

May our bond strengthen as the days grow older
Our relationship endure, be the hurdles whatsoever
Your kindness and love, your warm hand on my shoulder
May they remain with me always, forever and ever


*****





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Posted: 11 years ago
Amazing job boss... Simply awesome... Take a bow...
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Posted: 11 years ago

Ah ha!! Kya kar diya...⭐️

"But when it comes to those I love, then in a pinch
My entire being collapses like a brittle wall"

^^These lines are beautiful 👏👏👏

"I admit I'm weak, for I care too much
I can do nothing about it, I accept that too"

These lines remind me of someone..


Mind blowing poem, bhai ji!! 😃🤗
Edited by Reshma. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Lovely poem Ravi, fantastic. 👏
The poem and that last siggie too. 😃
Edited by visrom - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Ravi Bro,
You are Just AMAZING..
So wonderful poem...
each and every line of poem touched my heart...
its so TRUE..
Just love the bonding..
Their eyes speak... so pure and innocent bond..
Realy some lines relate to some moments...
In all a GREAT , MINDBLOWING Poem...👍🏼
and an AMAZING siggy👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
Wonderful poem Ravi bhaiya..
Glad to see you picking up this theme..
Thank you so much..

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