CID Story: Ruthless Kidnapping

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 14 years ago

#11

Wow, new story!!! Will read it when free.

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astonish

@astonish

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Posted: 14 years ago

#12

Guys Please don't keep you hopes very high before you read it.. I wrote it in 4Hrs... 😊

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halfbloodprince

@WindsOfHeaven

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+ 8

Posted: 14 years ago

#13

Nice story di, loved it.👏👏👏👏 End is different but I liked your story.😛

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sunny

@sunnyp1414

Dazzler

Posted: 14 years ago

#14

I am very happy that you kept is story close to reality. I really loved this story and the way you portraited real situation which is actually truth of today. There are not always happy endings in real life and your story was totally practical.

The way you involved Abhijeet is this 👏 and this story took me to golden CID days. Simple idea described very beautifully. Everyone reacted the way they should.

Just my view only I was actually thought may be Ranjeet will be one involved as Abhijeet was saying how come they came to know about we were present there. Thankfully he was not.

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astonish

@astonish

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Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Yeah.. The officers involved in the case were actually not guilty...they were only hasty in taking decision

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Ravi

@Jurassic_Shark

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#16

Nice story, astonish - written in a very apt and precise manner. Abhijeet's and ACP sir's characters were well portrayed in the situation. Bold move to not give it a happy ending; child kidnapping and murder is sadly a brutal reality in India and I think awareness about it needs to be seriously spread among the people.

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

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Posted: 14 years ago

#17

It was a nice story...clear narration, dialogues, everything. Yeah, the investigation part was less but much better than some of the episodes we are seeing now.

It was somewhat 'real',you know...the boy getting killed...it was sad, but it's something which happens in reality. It's very rare that the police force is as efficient as they are shown on screen. Abhijeet getting suspended is also realistic. But thanks, you didn't make him resign and walk off. At least he'll be back after 15 days.

I could actually feel the emotion when Abhijeet goes to meet the boy's parents...how he would have felt - sad and guilty...very well written. 👏 Not in an over-senti, in-the-face manner, but manner left to the reader's imagination.

I loved it. 👏 Looking forward to more from you.

Edited by visrom - 14 years ago

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astonish

@astonish

Sparkler

Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Yup... I had lots of problem putting the emotional part in words...mostly when the boy's body is found and then Abhi sir's expressions... That's why.. just wrote a few dialogs and left it to the viewers imagination...

And afterall... everyone here knows how Abhi sir and The whole CID team would actually react... when something like that happens...

I just didn't want to increase the emotional levels as already the investigation was very little...

How can i make Abhi sir resign forever?? OMG..CID without Abhi sir... "aisa story likne se pehle... yeh zameen phat jaata..aasmaan gir jaatha...zalzale aajate" 😉😆

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 14 years ago

#19

Originally posted by: astonish
That's why.. just wrote a few dialogs and left it to the viewers imagination...

This is how it has to be written.

I am sure if seen on screen, we would just have 4-5 expressions by Aditya sir and no lengthy dialogues. Those 4-5 expressions would have said the whole story.

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Debasree

@debasree04

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 14 years ago

#20

Excellent story Astonish...based on the practical world...really love it...I'm not depressed to read it (as u said yesterday) rather after reading this wonderful story i'm really happy...& simultaneously in thought that when FW learn to write this kind of story...

Edited by debasree04 - 14 years ago