CYBER CRIME Vs. CID ----- 57 - Page 37

Soonali, the plot was good, esp the part where Daya was asked to 'go on leave' for slapping someone and causing damage to ears. Even the plot was interesting.

Originally posted by: visrom

Soonali, the plot was good, esp the part where Daya was asked to 'go on leave' for slapping someone and causing damage to ears. Even the plot was interesting.

The only problem I see is - when you write 'Abhijeet gives his precious smile to Daya and Daya gives same to him', it becomes slightly OTT.

We know their smiles are precious and we all admire it, but when you write it in a story, it will be enough to say that they smiled. How lovely it was should be left to the reader's imagination. I hope you get me...

@ Soonaali - liked it...nice plot...beautifully written...you have narrated all the things so clearly like its happening in front of the eyes...good job. 👏 👏

Hi soonali... very nice story...
i liked it... planning and investigation are very good..
DUO friendship highlighted... thts good...
ACP sir part is also very good...
i liked freddy's dialogues abt ACP sir and abhijeet in conference hall...
good job. keep writing more stories.. all d best..👍🏼

Originally posted by: moonlight5

Hi soonali... very nice story...
i liked it... planning and investigation are very good..
DUO friendship highlighted... thts good...
ACP sir part is also very good...
i liked freddy's dialogues abt ACP sir and abhijeet in conference hall...
good job. keep writing more stories.. all d best..👍🏼

Originally posted by: DreamyDeepz28

Hey Soni 😊 ,

I loved your story.. beautifully written .It includes every moments of the favourite Daya-Abhi and Freddy-Vivek which we all genarally talk of as unseen on CID 😛.I loved this dialogue you created

Daya (in slow tone): accha hua boss tum aagaye'. Warana Rawan abhi meri pared chalu karta'' 😆

I loved your it when you created this Daya's accident very dramatically and the explanations which was very surprising 😲 for me to read eventhough CID has fooled us many a times like thiz.

When I read this dialogue of DGP below I was 🤣🤣🤣😆🤣😆

DIG: Praduman'' Tum jante ho ki Daya ke hathose ek bar jisne jhapad khaliya woh usse kabhi nahi bhulta'. Per bichme 2 -3 case me Daya ki Jhapad ki wajah kuch logo ki ek ears se sunane ki shakti kam hi gayi hai'. Human Rights walo ko jab pata chal tab unhine court mai Daya ke khilaf case file kardiya'.. or court se order mila hai'. ki Hume Daya ke khilaf inquiry bithani hogi'. Or tab tak Daya kisi bhi case me hissa nahi le sakta''.

I loved the below scene too:

Abhijeet goes near to DAYA'' he handover his gun and batch to him'.. and DUO shares there precious smile and ACP pat on Duo's shoulder.

(Itz really very very cute and a warm feeling when we see such scenes even if these are or were there several times)

Another one which i loved is related scene of this:

Fredy (in the tone of childish complaint): sir yeh galat hai'. aap log humesha kuchna kuch planning karte ho or hume batate bhi nahi ho' iss bar pata hai hum log kitana dar gaye the'. Daya sir ke bareme sunkar'.

Daya: Loh Bhai Fredy humne kan pakadliye'' (TRIO with naughty smile touches their ears) (Fredy gives ashamed look to them and other team is giggling) per iss bar humne kucnh nahi kiya joh kuch bhi kiya woh DIG sir ki order thi''

Itz so nice and funny to see Freddy complaining and Daya saying sorry.

Lastly liked dialogue:

Abhijeet to Daya: in low voice' Yaar aaj rawan khoosh hai 2 dino ki chute mang lete hai'..

Daya: good idea boss manglo'.

And the after dialogues of Freddy was also fabulous .I just loved ❤️ reading this whole concept of the story because it included all those aspects regarding Duo lighter moments,because I believe that without such moments I don't love to watch CID just plain investigation and all that...

Concludingly want to say that just be more careful in some hindi words such as 'kue' usually typed 'kyun'... Don't want to say anything more about that ..

Your story was FABULOUS 👏👏👏👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼 one keep writing some more of such stories Sonii. ALL THE BEST.. MAY YOU WRITE MANY MANY STORIES LIKE THIS 😃😃😃😃.ALL WISHES ARE WITH YOU

😃😊😛😃😃😃😊😊😊🤗🤗🤗

Originally posted by: gadhadada

LII...

HATTS OFF👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼... (halanaky meray pass KOI HAT nahi hay😉... AIK hee tha jo BARAY BHAI lay gayey😈 aur GOA mein BHOOL aayey😡)

EXCILLENT PLOT👏...
SHARP INVESTIGATIVE SKILLS👏...
NICE DRAMMITICALLY ELABORATION👏...
CUTE CHATS👏...

but BHAI is very ANGRY wid U😡...
ab batao kya karein😉!!!

SUPERB BUDDY⭐️⭐️⭐️...

I hv posted my comment at CT 31.