SACRIFICE...! (my story) :D

Nice interesting story. Well formated, easy to read.

I want to suggest two corrections though. I will be glad if you consider them.

Originally posted by: somu_05

Daya : yes sir..!! par Abhijeet ka yaa to mujh par vishwas nahi raha ya fir Freddy ki baat sahi hai sir..!!

Naah, that's not Daya Sir's reaction especially "Freddy ki baat sahi hai sir" he would be suspicious, yes but not suspecting that Abhi Sir got scared. Naah, can you please change this dialog.

Originally posted by: somu_05

Exchange of bullets takes place....Abhijeet shoots down two terrorists... suddenly the leader jumps forward and shoots Abhijeet on his HEAD...! Abhijeet gets hit and falls down...!!

Don't show Abhi Sir being hit by bullet in the head. Then its practically impossible for him to survive that long and even more to be able to do what he did in the hide out. See Abhi Sir is going to be badly injured due to the blast, you can say that the leader hits him on the head with something to make him unconscious.

Daya : Haan Sir, Abhijit kuch to chhupa raha hai, par kya, bahut pareshaan bhi lag raha tha, kyon hatvaya hoga usne mujhe Gate No 2 se. Kya use meri kabiliyat par bharosa nahin raha [confused] kya karan ho sakta hai.