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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hello everyone! I have been a silent reader of this forum for a really, really long time and I have been following D3 for even longer. I am a KriYaansh, SwaRon, VruShan, ArSha fan for the longest but most of all I am a D3 fan, and I absolutely adore this show. Anyway I wrote a KR OS, I had one for SS also but I thought I'd upload this one first and see how it goes. I have read a lot if the stories posted here and I must say there are ALOT of talented writers here, I'm not as good but thought I would still share 😳
Please do tell me what you all think 😊 😳

Arziyaan

He drove off into the night, he knew he shouldn't have left her alone but he couldn't help it. Ever since he had heard the news, there was this unsettled feeling that arose within him which he suppressed for the time she was around him. As soon as she fell asleep, he made his way to his car and drove to nowhere. His emotions were running, his mind racing, his heart aching. He just got her back, and even though he hadn't declared it somewhere, somehow she still held that important place in his heart. He bit his bottom lip, as he usually did whenever he was trying to better understand something. His eyes welled up at the thought of saying bye, at the thought of seeing her leave him again. Their flood of memories came soaring back into his mind, he tried to distance himself. He had a feeling he would get hurt again as he usually did when it came to someone he loved. But for some reason, in one way or another they kept ending up with each other.

After all that was said and done, he had a feeling that in some way her "universeji" was giving them another chance. However, he was proved wrong again. So much had happened since she was here and he had wanted her to leave, it wasn't as though he was afraid of rejection again, he didn't know what it was. All he knew was he didn't want her to go again, he wanted a way to stop her. As he drove his car halted in front of a crowd of people, turning off the ignition he got out. He found himself in front of a dargah.

Arziyaan Sari Mein Chehre Pe Likh Ke Laaya Hoon
Tumse Kya Mangu Mein Tum Khud Hi Samjah Lo
Ya Maulaaa...
Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula
Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula

He followed the crowd, as he approached the steps he covered his head with a piece of cloth. He paid respects at the alter and folded his hands to pray. As he closed his eyes, a flash of face, smile, laughter appeared before him. The rehearsals, secret meetings, fights, make ups, butterfly kisses were so vivid in the eye of his mind as if they happened yesterday. And as he remembered them, a tear escaped the barriers of his eyes.


Tut Ke Bikharna Mujhko Zarur Aata Hai
Tut Ke Bikharna Mujhko Zarur Aata Hai
Varna Ibbadat Wala Ssarur Aata Hai

Sajde Mein Rehne Do
Abb Kahin Na Jaunga

Sajde Mein Rehne Do
Abb Kahin Na Jaunga

Abb Jo Tumne Tukhraya To
Sawar Na Paunga

Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula
Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula

"Look, I really don't know how to do this. And honestly to sit here and pray is just something out of my capabilities. Par, agar aap ko usse phir se meri zindagi mein lanaa tha tho ab wapis kyun behg rehe ho? Please do something ki she doesn't leave. Please agar woh meri taqdeer mein likhi hai, toh usse ab mujhse door maat jaane dena" he opened his eyes and silenced his inner thoughts. Getting up he walked back towards his car. He slowed the car down once he was in front of his house, cutting the engine he quietly made his way inside. And as if on impulse he walked towards her room, opening the door he remembered the instant she walked in and saw the room. "Yeh sab mere liye hai?" She asked with a child-like expression on her face. He walked up to her, his heart skipping every other beat.

Mora Piya Ghar Aaya
Mora Piya Ghar Aaya
Mora Piya Ghar Aaya
Mora Piya Ghar Aaya
...

Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula
Maula Maula Maula Mere Maula
Maula Maula Maula Maula
Maula Maula Maula Maula

He was Reyaansh Singhania who could do anything, who had it all and could have anything but the one who had his heart; Kria. And as he stared at her, peacefully sleeping, her even breathing making her chest rise and fall. His heart admitted to itself he still cared about her, had feelings for her but not only because she was just a friend.

So what you guys think? Good? Bad? So so? All comments,critiques are welcome 😳

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Posted: 11 years ago
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This was beautiful
The way you portrayed rey's current state was awesome
I would love to witness this in D3...it felt really good to read it
Keep writing and welcome to the forum :D
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Posted: 11 years ago
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that was bful... Rey ki condition...

so well described..

do write more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Khwahish-

This was beautiful

The way you portrayed rey's current state was awesome
I would love to witness this in D3...it felt really good to read it
Keep writing and welcome to the forum :D



Thank you so so much! 😃 Your comment means a lot! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Dewdrops.ShaKun

that was bful... Rey ki condition...


so well described..

do write more



Thank you so much for reading! It means a lot! 😃 😳 will def try to write more, thanks again! 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey naveen!!
I m shanaya..
Ur os was ah-mazin!!
Like.. The way he ws disturbed..
The dargah part was sooo reyansh singhania..
N the thots in her room made all reys emotions clear..
Nice os yaar..! Luvd it..
Each n everythin u wrote to decribe reys feelings n his inner turmoil gave the story the hearty touch..!
Nice..
Keep writin :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome OS
Rey's state is beautifully penned down..
luvd it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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awesome os
n d way u have penned down reys emotions says it all
luved it
n do continue writing
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Posted: 11 years ago
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that was a superb and fabulous os... well written... loved it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Its beautiful yaar...u described rey's emotion perfectly..
Loved it...
Nd yeah welcome to the forum

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