Swaron Two Shot- Tanhayee..(current track)part4-pg 10

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sneha_sharon

@sneha_sharon

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Oh my god!!
This was beautifully penned down! :)
The way u described sharon's pain...i could feel it...
Update ASAP!

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zk456789

@zk456789

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Wow this is beautifully penned down
Loved it
Thanks for the pm
Do update next part soon

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-TanHaVruShan-

@-TanHaVruShan-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Unres...

Varshu u have left me speechless..

So deeply touched..

It was such an amzing os..

Amazing bolna bhi kaam hoga for dis..

U literally made me cry yaar..

Am so touched..

D sharon simmi convo was superb..

It was brilliantly penned..

D pain in sharon, d chages in both der personalities such beautifully portrayed..

Ur such an awesome writer n u just get better n better wid every write up of urs..

Tum meri bahi favourite ho gayi ho..

Fab fab fab👏👏

Loved it👏

Update fast yaar..

I wanna read more

Edited by Shilpa_SwaRon - 11 years ago

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meenal singh

@swaron_arshi_07

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

awesome os

I think something of this kind can happen in the show to

I really liked

do update soon

thanks for the pm

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

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+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

What do I say reading this has rendered me speechless I have absolutely no words to convey to you how really beautiful and heart touching your OS was wow varshu mindblowing you've done a brilliant job..👍🏼.
Right from the moment in the classroom to the end it was penned down fabulously.. The changed personalities of swayam and sharon.. Swayam turning into a straightforward person while sharon going in the shell like swayam would everytime they had a fight.. I loved reading the part where swayam contemplates throwing away sharon's gift but then he gives in to his heart not listening to his brain and puts it back in the locker and that is because he yet loves her he has put on an exterior mask of being cold and rude but from the inside he is yet the same who loves sharon unconditionally..
Then sharon reminising every moment spent with swayam the jogging date then the chai date the ride on the cycle with swayam.. I liked reading the changed and a subdued sharon though I din want to see the fiery sharon after the mess that was created..
Though I feel angry at what she has done I also feel sympathy for her and my heart cries for both swayam and sharon.. Simmi is the bestest friend one can have and I'm happy she is supporting sharon and will speak to rey about the matter..
Update the next part as soon as you can plzzz plzzz I'll be waiting to read it..😊.
P.S- thank you very much for the pm..🤗

Edited by sweet16cash - 11 years ago

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GlamourousPearl

@GlamourousPearl

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

u r awesome yaar...grt job...all emotions well expressed...grtly justified...wooowww...superb...

grt choice of song

if i sum up...its Exceptional Writing

(claps)
😊

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darshita

@sweetydiyafrien

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

that was good and great ... liked it...
the outcome u portrait are damn emotional and made me 😭...
look forward to read more... do continue soon and pm me

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Nishi

@.nerfherder

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Posted: 11 years ago

#18

varshu di!!!!!

that was AMAZING!!!

your writing is PHENOMENAL!!!

the way you potrayed the emotions was beautiful..and a vulnerable sharon is always loved..her feelings were beautifully expressed..

its marvellous..simply splendid👏

cant wait for the next part

please update soon

P.S. great song

and thanks for the PM

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paro1311

@paro1311

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Posted: 11 years ago

#19

Editing finally :)

The story was very well thought and yes definitely fits the current swaron track.

The beauty of this 4 shot for me were 3 scenes, the sharon-simmi one, then swaron dance nd kiss and the swayum-GRP one.

I just loved the lines u wrote for simmi in the second update. Those questions were so apt.. Nd i've always wondered the same abt Sharon's love for Swayam. The way u put it across thru simmi was nice :)

The swaron dance- i could imagine the scene in my head nd the moment tht followed was written beautifully.

I liked the Swayam-GRP scene cos ever since sharon confessed in front of Mr. Shikawat, i've been wondering how Grp-Swayam meeting would be. So i was pleasantly surprised to read somethin like that here:)

the ending though higly cliched:) is a happy ending, any swaron fan would love.

As i said this was a really gud story and ur swaron were very much in their characters :)

Edited by paro1311 - 11 years ago