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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: shailusri1983

The plot is thickening. Nandini seems conflicted by everything that is happening around her at such a fast pace. She is unable to make sense of what is happening and what she exactly wants to happen. Chandragupt seemed to be greatly impressed with Nandini's learning and book reading. So he is seeing more sides to her. The marriage alliance of Chaaya is also a good twist. Let's see what comes out of that.


Thank you so much Shailudi! ๐Ÿ˜ณ Will be looking forward to your response at the next installments. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Avantika1115

Did chandragupta developed some kind of liking towards Nandini...?

Dhananand is promising
Helena suspecting nandini
Nayanika is a mystery but i like her

For now Chandra is somehow impressed with Nandini's personality, her skills of sword-fighting and habit of reading etc;but this is just a natural feelings. We cannot say he 'likes' Nandini now. It will take place slowly.
Helena's suspicion to Nandini has no valid reason; she is judgmental.
Thank you for commenting. ๐Ÿ˜ณ
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Avantika1115

Kudos stuti... nice plot...better than tv seial version

Hope helena is not a vamp ...


Thank you so much.โญ๏ธ

No till now Helena is a positive character. ๐Ÿ˜†
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: jayaks02

Kiddo, lubbed lubbed lubbed it totally. In Himachal now on a small vacation. Will comment in detail on reaching base location. ,


๐Ÿค—Have a safe journey and happy tour. Will be waiting for your comment. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ
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Posted: 8 years ago
Thank you so much for your beautiful review! Loved it. ๐Ÿ˜ณ
My comments in blue... ๐Ÿ˜ณ

Originally posted by: rajatshweta


Poor Nandini has had too much for a day - her father's atrocious reign, state of roads and people during and after his reign, his lust for gold, insult from family members at the temple, reaction of Praja when they saw her at the temple, and now suddenly she is pushed into the schemes of Dhananand and Nayanika. And she got to see another positive side of Chandra, unlike her previous suitor who did not want her to study at all. The poor girl is so confused at this point, as to where she stands and whose side she should stay.

Yes, Nandini is loaded with so much contradictory happenings one by one that she has lost her normal power of thinking. This confusion will beget dilemma after this.

So Chandra is hiding his feelings for Nandini. He was already impressed with Nandini's valour and bravery on the Full Moon Night. Perhaps that could be one of the hidden reasons why he agreed to marry her. He tested her patience and how far she would go with her vengeance and revenge when he had the Sword Practice with her. Now he is saying that he is already aware that Nandini was the initiator of the process of conserving the books in the Library. That she was the first person who protested against the Guard who was beating the child - has already made an impression on him. So he is leaving no stones unturned in learning about Nandini, without actually letting her, or anyone for that matter, not even Chanakya, know about it. Impressed !!

In his subconscious mind Chandra has developed a natural impression for Nandini, but that is not any 'love'feelings till now. The decision of marriage was completely political and free from his personal feelings as Chandra has never learnt to think for himself and for his own feelings till now. Yes he is testing her, he is trying to know more about her, but everything he is doing subconsciously.

While Nandini herself was stumped with Nayanika's beauty, it did not seem to have made an impact on Chandra so much. That man does have some self control hmm... !!!

Obviously, Chandra does not have any interest on woman. ๐Ÿ˜†

That Chandra was sharp in observing and remembering even the names of a guy called Parikshit in a Library - he surely must have had an account of all maids and guards who are on duty of his Prisoner Wife Nandini - and the look he was giving at Nayanika - clearly shows that he has identified Nayanika as a newcomer and is the actual spy of Nand. Lets see how he plays out Nayanika's plan.

You have given a good thought on this. Wait and watch. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Nayanika behaves very bold in front of Nandini. In fact, she seems to be overpowering Nandini, sometimes calling her name, sometimes addressing her Princess, controlling and instructing Nandini what to do,.. Too much for a mistress . May be her overconfidence will bring her downfall. Then it would be interesting to see how Dhananand reacts.

I heard in ancient era the status of the mistresses was very high and they used to be very accomplished lady. So I made Nayanika smart and superior who can also be commanding to the princess. Again I would like to say that just wait and watch. ๐Ÿ˜†



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Posted: 8 years ago
Ekta is running a quite good show..it is a period drama..may be based on some real time characters and the other supporting fictious persons
why do take so much pain to write lengthy tales

The fans enjoy the CN story, remarkably played by Rajat Tokas and Swetha

Now the episodes are in a positive trend and all the historical stories are from hearsay and some from parchments

We appreciate your endeavor..thank you
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: siva06

Ekta is running a quite good show..it is a period drama..may be based on some real time characters and the other supporting fictious persons

why do take so much pain to write lengthy tales

The fans enjoy the CN story, remarkably played by Rajat Tokas and Swetha

Now the episodes are in a positive trend and all the historical stories are from hearsay and some from parchments

We appreciate your endeavor..thank you

I write as I enjoy writing, it does not give any extra 'pain' to me and I am not doing it anyway to compensate Ekta. I am not demanding that fans are not enjoying the show and the actors. Neither I am writing the story to demote the show or spreading negativity.
If you don't want to read, don't do. You're free to enjoy the show.
Thank you.
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: siva06

Ekta is running a quite good show..it is a period drama..may be based on some real time characters and the other supporting fictious persons

why do take so much pain to write lengthy tales

The fans enjoy the CN story, remarkably played by Rajat Tokas and Swetha

Now the episodes are in a positive trend and all the historical stories are from hearsay and some from parchments

We appreciate your endeavor..thank you


Siva FFs do not mean that anybody is criticizing the actual show which is nice and entertaining these days thanks to the phenomenal acting by RT and SBP. With due respect and appreciation to everyone concerned in the making of this show, truth remains that no story is complete.

If Valmiki wrote the Ramayana why did Kaban write the same story as well. If both Kamban and Valmiki wrote, why did Tulidaas write the same centuries after. There are endless versions inspired by original Ramayana. Nobody is questioning the validity of the original just because there are versions of the same. It is because the original is there that we have the versions. So these versions are a tribute to the original. Similarly many of these versions have their own readers and takers.

It is the same with any TV show or movie. Hundreds of stories are written on the same story and characters. This is still only a TV show not a national epic like Ramayana. If you take shows like IPKNND and JA, the shows have ended, but till date those forums are alive and active and a lot of stories are still being written on the original show and loved characters. There are always endless possibilities for spin off.

A spin off usually begins with the original show or concept and ends somewhere else depending upon the perspective of the writer who is writing it and his/her line of vision for the story. Depending upon the length it is categorized as a One Shot (OS), Two/Three Shot (TS), Short Story (SS)15 or 20 parts, or Fan Fiction (FF) more than 20 parts. For that matter no spin off is complete either.

What Stuti is writing is her own perspective on the story of CN which is pretty fine with many of us. She has a story to share and many of us love to read it. For that matter, I and Avantika happen to be writing stories on the same forum as well. I have been doing it much earlier than Stuti or Avantika. If you look up on IF, you will find most forums here have FFs, SSs, OSs based on the show.

As a matter of fact, there is very little being written on CN compared with what is written elsewhere on other shows. Just as making discussion posts is permitted and follows the forum rules of IF, creative pieces are also permitted and do not break the forum rules. Since it is precisely being specified by the maker of the post that it is an FF implying it is a work of creativity, those who are not interested like you can stop reading that particular thread which is perhaps not meant for you.

Stuti has a lot of readers who read her work. And she is writing her story for all of them not because she is trying to prove a point. It is of course another thing that many of us feel she does several things better than the original show like story and characterization. But then, it is our personal opinion. It cannot be equated to negativity or bashing.
Edited by shailusri1983 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Devil - Let me record something straight.

1 week back the serial Chandra and Nandini were charming and were competing with your creation in some sense even though characterization is vastly different. But this week has been a let down with the serial pair and the MOST INTERESTING Chandra-Nandini is IN YOUR STORY NOW.

I have always loved your Chandra who is a Matlab Ka Aadmi and KING. ๐Ÿ˜† ๐Ÿ‘

Coming to what I liked most,

1. Your Interesting setting of how Chandra unravels N's love for books. It is set much better than serial itself where I felt at one point it was oversold. It is much more believable in your story that she has been in touch with Librarian and had started some initiatives as well there. Kudos to your setting and this premise. Loved it.

2. Chandra getting really interested in Books and wanting to borrow some for reading during bed time. You are cleverly setting future scenes where they can get to discuss or fight over books. ๐Ÿ˜† Clever Kiddo. ๐Ÿ˜† You give different shades to Chandu than the serial one and that makes a good difference. I see yours as a far sighted, much more applying kind than a follower of CK. Clever premise as Nandini will start seeing these qualities soon. ๐Ÿ˜‰

3. The way he interrogated. Simply loved it. Kings are not supposed to raise voices. Their presence should demand respect and not their Oonchi voice. He had clarity, purpose and sense of timing during the entire investigation process. Helena was caught off-guard. And she is impulsive. Will her hatred and insecurity of Nandini rise going forward ?!!! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

4. And cleverly you made the mistress of Dhananand overstepping her limits at times. This is not uncommon. Seductive mistresses who are closer to Power Centers take themselves too seriously at times and that is where they will trip or fall. This time this lady is going to go with a THUD, a Classic Chandra THUD that is. I already got clues on whether C has seen something amiss. ๐Ÿ˜† You purposely let out some clues there. Looks like C and CK will follow the mistress closely now.

5. CN interactions are going at a good speed. If Nandini does not want to be part of Adharmic ways of attacking Chandra or causing grave troubles, I hope you make Chandra realize it in this round only rather than creating a poison in his mind. The way Nandini is getting confused, I think She wlll let it be known unknowingly she was used as a pawn.

Rest is all very well written. Cannot wait for next chapter. What will be next hunar of Nandini that will be revealed ?

May I request for some good scenes between Nandini and Mura in next chapters ? All Alone moments for them and then Chandra will barge in.

And Please do not make her a Mahaan soon or anytime in the story. ๐Ÿ˜‰
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Posted: 8 years ago

Thank you so much for your comment Sri-di... ๐Ÿ˜ณ My response in red. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: jayaks02

Devil - Let me record something straight.

1 week back the serial Chandra and Nandini were charming and were competing with your creation in some sense even though characterization is vastly different. But this week has been a let down with the serial pair and the MOST INTERESTING Chandra-Nandini is IN YOUR STORY NOW.

Thanks!โ˜บ๏ธ Giving myself a break from watching CN now. ๐Ÿ˜† Maybe will start again when it become better. ๐Ÿ˜›

I have always loved your Chandra who is a Matlab Ka Aadmi and KING. ๐Ÿ˜† ๐Ÿ‘

๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

Coming to what I liked most,

1. Your Interesting setting of how Chandra unravels N's love for books. It is set much better than serial itself where I felt at one point it was oversold. It is much more believable in your story that she has been in touch with Librarian and had started some initiatives as well there. Kudos to your setting and this premise. Loved it.

Glad to see that u liked it. ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

2. Chandra getting really interested in Books and wanting to borrow some for reading during bed time. You are cleverly setting future scenes where they can get to discuss or fight over books. ๐Ÿ˜† Clever Kiddo. ๐Ÿ˜† You give different shades to Chandu than the serial one and that makes a good difference. I see yours as a far sighted, much more applying kind than a follower of CK. Clever premise as Nandini will start seeing these qualities soon. ๐Ÿ˜‰

Yeah๐Ÿ˜‰ ๐Ÿ˜†


3. The way he interrogated. Simply loved it. Kings are not supposed to raise voices. Their presence should demand respect and not their Oonchi voice. He had clarity, purpose and sense of timing during the entire investigation process. Helena was caught off-guard. And she is impulsive. Will her hatred and insecurity of Nandini rise going forward ?!!! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

I too believe that kings need not to raise their voice; their one cold look should be enough to compel the next man to faint. ๐Ÿ˜† . Yes, Helena's mind will fill with more poison against Nandini now, she is the so-called vamp na? ๐Ÿ˜‰ Though I have no idea to convert Helena in a full-fledged vamp anytime soon. ๐Ÿ˜†

4. And cleverly you made the mistress of Dhananand overstepping her limits at times. This is not uncommon. Seductive mistresses who are closer to Power Centers take themselves too seriously at times and that is where they will trip or fall. This time this lady is going to go with a THUD, a Classic Chandra THUD that is. I already got clues on whether C has seen something amiss. ๐Ÿ˜† You purposely let out some clues there. Looks like C and CK will follow the mistress closely now.

Yes. Wait and watch. ๐Ÿ˜‰

5. CN interactions are going at a good speed. If Nandini does not want to be part of Adharmic ways of attacking Chandra or causing grave troubles, I hope you make Chandra realize it in this round only rather than creating a poison in his mind. The way Nandini is getting confused, I think She wlll let it be known unknowingly she was used as a pawn.

Yes Chandra will realize Nandini's part as a pawn soon.

Rest is all very well written. Cannot wait for next chapter. What will be next hunar of Nandini that will be revealed ?

I have not thought about it. ๐Ÿ˜†

May I request for some good scenes between Nandini and Mura in next chapters ? All Alone moments for them and then Chandra will barge in.

I will think about it. ๐Ÿ˜ณ

And Please do not make her a Mahaan soon or anytime in the story. ๐Ÿ˜‰

no way! ๐Ÿ˜†

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