Adiya FF- Hamari Manzilen Part 3

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Hey guys!

I am here presenting Aditya and Zoya in a brand new story. The characters are bit of similar as the show. Everything will unfold slowly as the story progress. I have 10 parts in mind as for now. But I am increase or decrease based on your response. Also let me know if you guys want a happy ending or a sad ending to the story...

Enjoy!

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Part 1: Page 1
Part 2: Page 3
Part 3: Page 5




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PART 1

Noor: Appi arahi ho aap? Ammi ne nashta laga dia hai.

Ammi: Noor apne Abu ko bhi awaz de do. Unko bhi late horaha hoga.

Noor: Ammi hum nahi keh rahe thodi si awaz bhi unchi hojai gi toh daante ge.

Ammi: Acha tum apni Appi ko leke aao hum aapke Abu ke pass jaate hain. Pata nahi aaj hi yeh baap beti late horahe hain.

Noor: Jee Ammi.

Noor stood from her dining chair and went upstairs to her Appi's room. She knocked to inform her.

Noor: Appi...Ajao kitni der lagao gi. Raste mai aapko chorna bhi hai mujhe. Der horahi hai.

The room was cold due to the air conditioner which was the perfect condition for one to sleep. And obviously this made Noor's Appi sleep because why not, she had a tiring day yesterday watching all her favorite shows, eating pizza and drinking coke. The sun rays were peeping through the gap between the curtains and this disturbed her a little.

Kya khwab tha. Hum bas Ranbir Kapoor se autograph lene hi wale the lekin yeh dhoop.

Zoya said this while rubbing her eyes.

Aisa karte hain thoda sa aur so jaate hain. Hosakta hai wohi khwab wapis se shoru hojai. Chalo Zoya jee sojaiye aap.

As soon as she tucked her head under the blanket, she heard a knock. Then another and then another.

Kya hain? Kahin Ranbir toh nahi humein khud autograph dene aai ho. Per inki awaz aisi si kyun hogai.

Noor: Appi please darwaza kholo. Der horahi hai mujhe.

Noor? Waqt kya horaha hai.

It was 15 mins to 9. Then she remembered, she had to go to her work.

Zoya: Noor. Hum bas 5 minute mai arahe hain. Aap chaliye.

Noor: Shukar hai Appi aapne awaz toh di. Humein toh laga ap abhi tak so rahi hogi.

Zoya: Hum bas arahe hain. Aap car nikale.

Noor: Nashta?

Zoya: Time nahi hai na abhi. Ammi se kahe kuch pack karde hum raste mai kha lenge.

Noor: Thek hai hum wait kar rahe hain

Zoya quickly went to dress herself in an elegant dress with no jewelry as such which was her profession demand. In five minutes she was ready and went downstairs.

Zoya: Ammi. Hum jaarahe hain. Aap khana de dein.

Abu: Beta aaj late kyun hogai aap?

Ammi: Inhe bahut kaam tha na isse aur thak gai...

Abu: Humne isse pocha hai na. Bataiye Zoya.

Zoya: Abu raat ko kaam tha humein toh karte karte late hogaya aur subah aankh hi nahi khuli.

Abu: Thek hai ab aap jaldi jayein warna der hojai gi. Aur jo humein pasand nahi, mai nahi chahta hamari beti wohi kare.

Zoya: Jee abbu. Allah Hafiz

Abu: Allah Hafiz

Zoya sat at the passenger seat and adjusted herself. As soon as she felt comfortable, she saw at Noor's face who was staring at her with raised eyebrows.

Zoya: Kya?

Noor: Aap

Zoya: Iss se pehle aap shoru hojai gaari chala lein kyunke wahan tak pahonchte hue mai aapka saara gussa thanda kar du gi.

Noor carefully took the car out of parking and drove towards their manzil.

Zoya: Acha maaf kar dijiye. Aap ko pata hai na hamari ek chutti aai thi kal aur itne saare serials catch up karne the. Bepannah dekha aapne kya mast chal rahi hai uski story. Itna interesting tha na

Noor: Aur issi wajah se aap raat ko 2 baje soi

Zoya: 3 baje

Noor: Aapki wajah se mai late hojati

Zoya: Per dekhe na nahi hui late na aap na main na Abu.

Noor: Abu.

Zoya: Noor kitni baar kaha hai aapko. Abu se na chira kare aap. Aapki bhalai ke liye hi tokte hain na.

Noor: Dekha aap bhi agree kar rahi hai tokte hain who. Har choti si baat pe. Ammi hamein samjhate hain

Zoya: Dheere dheere aapko samjh ajai ga.

Noor: By the way Appi aap kyun nahi driving seekh leti roz aapko drop karna parta hai.

Zoya: Aapko takleef hoti hai aise humein chorne se toh thek hai kal se hum taxi mai chale jai ge koi baat nahi.

Noor: Aare Appi aap toh naraz hi hogai. Mera matlab tha iss tarah hum dono ko asaani hojai gi. Timing issue bhi khatam hojai ga.

Zoya: Humein shok hi nahi hai. Aur jis cheez ka hamara dil nahi karta who hum nahi karna chahte. Sirf zabardasti ka kaam hoga who jo kabhi thek nahi hue ga.

Noor: Thek hai appi. Aapki marzi. Chale aa gai aapki manzil. Waise aapko yaad hai na aaj humein Muskaan se milne jana hai.

Zoya: Jee yaad hai humein. Aapne itni baar bata dia hai keh ache se yaad hogaya hai.

Noor: Thek hai phir hum college se akar tiyar hojai ge aur Ammi ko pick karke direct yahin ajai ge.

Zoya: Hum aise jai ge?

Noor: Aise kare ge ek kameez bhi le aai ge. In case kuch kharab hojai toh.

Zoya: Itni samjhdaar toh hai aap phir bhi Abu ke liye...

Noor: Appi der horahi hai aapko

Zoya: Allah Hafiz

Noor: Allah Hafiz

Zoya went inside the building for her work while Noor went to her college. At around 3 pm, she was done with her work so she came back home and as planned picked her Ammi to take her to Zoya's place. Zoya was about to get finished with her work.

Noor: Appi ajao hum niche hain.

Zoya: Noor hum bas free hone hi wale hain 10 minute mai per hamare kapre poore kharab hogai hain aur itni smell arahi hai na keh kya bataiye aapko.

Noor: Appi aapka dress hai mere pass. Ammi se kehte hai upar le aai.

Zoya: Haan thek hai 2nd floor pe right side waale room main hain hum.

Noor gave the clothes to her mother who went to the building. Zoya met her and changed her dirty dress. They then went downstairs to the car.

Zoya: Noor aapne Muskaan se baat kar li na aur bataya keh hum arahe hain?

Noor: Appi surprise hai yeh. Usko nahi batana. Itne mahino baad aai hai toh hum usse surprise dena chahte hain.

Ammi: Zoya maine toh bahut kaha inse keh bata dein unhe kahin busy na ho.

Noor: Nahi Ammi. Pehle din who kahin nahi jaati. Ghar pe baithi hogi araam farma rahi hongi.

Ammi: Jaisi aapki marzi phir.

Noor drove them to her sisters building. It was quite far away from their house. By the time they reached it was already dark. Noor was too excited to meet her close friend who was away for few months.

Zoya: Wah kya building hai inki. Bahut bari hai yeh toh.

Noor: Appi yeh toh kuch nahi hai. Bata rahi thi iska flat bahut bara hai aur bahut khobsurat.

Ammi: Ab toh dekhna hoga. Waise aap lai toh hai na unke liye kuch?

Noor: Matlab

Ammi: Aap apni dost ke nayi ghar arahi hain pehli baar, akele haath mile gi unse kya

Noor: Hum toh kuch nahi lai

Ammi: Yeh sahi baat nahi hai Noor. Aisa karte hain pass mai humne ek bakery dekhi thi wahan se kuch cake le aai ge.

Zoya: Hum le aate hain Ammi.

Ammi: Nahi aap log chalo. Milo usse. Hum bas abhi aate hain. Floor kya hai

Noor: 24th Floor B Block

Ammi: Bas thek hai hum aate hain aap log chalo

The sisters went inside the B block and waited for the lift. Since the building had many floors, it was taking too much time for the lift to come. Meanwhile, Noor screamed.

Zoya: Kya hogaya aap aisi kyu cheekhi

Noor: Appi Prem hai who

Zoya: Prem kon

Noor: Aditya Hooda, Bepannah ka main actor

Zoya: Aap jhoot toh nahi bol rahi na

Noor: Nahi aap dekh lo. Pata nahi kon hai uske saath

Zoya: Haan yeh toh wohi hain. Unke saath unki actual ki biwi hai Pooja Hooda.

Noor: Chale na photo lete hain unke saath

They followed them until they noticed them. Then then shook hands with Pooja. Aditya forwarded his hand but both sisters didn't shook the hand. He didn't felt bad about this.

Noor: Hum aapke bahut bare fans hain. Appi ne toh Bepannah ke sab episodes dekhe hain aur sab dialogues bhi yaad hain unko.

Pooja: Oh wow. Koi ek sunao na

Zoya: Meri biwi bewafa thi

Aditya joined in.

Aditya: Lekin mere pati se bewafai nahi hui

Zoya: Sawal yeh hai keh usne aisa kiya kyu

Pooja: Wah yaar tumhe toh mujhse zyada dialogues yaad hai mere shauhar ke.

Noor: Kya hum ek photo le lein

Aditya: Sure

Noor: Appi mera phone car mai hai shaid, aap lo na apne mobile se

As soon as Zoya took her phone and opened the camera, her phone's battery died.

Noor: Iss phone ko bhi abhi band hona tha

Pooja: Kismat hai yeh aap logo gi. The superstar Aditya Hooda ke saath photo nahi le sake. Phir kabhi mauka mila toh le lein ge.

Aditya: Aisa karo na mai le leta hu aur phir...

Pooja: Adi, lift agai hai. Chale warna aunty ki party mai late pahonche ge.

She grabbed his arms and took him with her to the lift. Zoya was just watching them go. Noor saw her lost in her thoughts so she shook her.

Noor: Appi kahan kho gayi aap

Zoya: Aapne dekha

Noor: Kya

Zoya: Choriye. Chale chalte hain

They went again near the lift. Ammi also came. They went upstairs only to find out that Muskaan was not at home.

Ammi: Humne kaha tha na check karle ek baar.

Noor: Car tak chale na. Hum call karke puchte hain abhi

When Noor called her, she came to know Muskaan was out with her friends.

Noor: Muskaan kabhi bhi hamare bagair aise party nahi karti thi. Aur ab humein bina invite kiay enjoy kar rahi hai

Zoya: Hota hai Noor. Log badal jaate hain. Lekin yeh bhi hosakta hai pehle se plan bana ho aur aap ko kissi wajah se na bata pai ho.

Noor: Appi aap itni positive kaise rehti ho

Zoya: Hum positive iss liye rehti hai kyunke hum apni Ammi ki beti hai.

Ammi: Bilkul. Chale ab ghar chalte hain. Abu agai honge. Khana bhi dena hai unko

Zoya: Chale choti kohinoor. Iss mystery ko baad mai solve karte hain.

Edited by Ro-001 - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Interesting ..beautiful start..
Upset soon..
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Interesting dear
Continue soon
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Originally posted by: Binzzz

Interesting ..beautiful start..

Upset soon..


Thank you😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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amazing start but plzz happy ending
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Originally posted by: Shafoo

This is soo amazing


Glad you liked it😊
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Originally posted by: Adiyalove

amazing start but plzz happy ending


OKie... Thanks for the suggestion
I would think about that😉
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you 😃
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Thank you😃

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