*~Fall In Love --- All Over Again~* sv-FF - Page 4

woopsies i 4got about this one! ok ill cont very soooooonnnn!

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Part 2: Dinner Time!

(whole family at dinner table....except SV)

Sagar: (upstairs in his room)...(fixing his hair and looking into the mirror)

VIdya; (in her room)....(brushing her hair)

----doing the same thng😳-----thnking about eachother

sagar: (thnks to himself) ye kya? main...why? why? why? why am i thnking of her? woh mere liye kuch nehi hai! par phir bhi! mujhe uskka itna yaad kyun ata hai? why! kicks the dressing table...and it shakes...

vidya walks in

vidya: aap theek hai naa? (softly and scared)

sagar: han ha (angrily) tumhe mera itna fikr kyun hai?

vidya: (shoked and surprised)

Sagar: (ashamed at wht he just said) woh im sorry..pata nehi mujhe...kya hogay thaa..srry

*walks past her to the dinner table*

vidya follows

(at the table)

only two seats left...next to eachother😉...will sagar sit next to vidya? tune in after a while to find out😳

I love your fan fic! 😳 Keep up the great work. 😊

suspence is killing me please post soon i love your fanfic and i am thinking of posting one as well

i have read your fanfiction and i was wondering if i should make some comments on your error. and please respond if u feel that i can

OFCOURSE YOU CAN! please dont hesitate... 😳

Thanks for responding and the thing I want to say is that your fanfiction is really well writen but it does not showing any types of time order with emotions

eg: first in the first day of in counter Sagar slaps Vidya on the face in front of every body and he placed her in the servant quarter, and he insults her, and next day Vidya is again back to normal and she being really good wife again which I believe does not go with the stating points . what I mean is that the vidya u made does not go with the real one and after the crying night your fan fiction falls apart. and by the wy when a wife is slaped she feels betrayed, broken, hopless and incradbly sad. most of the time she would hate the site of the person but in vidya's case she would forgive her husband but after lot of thinking.

Further more when some gets flash backs and get hints from what has accoured in there life so far they don't act happy on the contrary Sagar should be feeling restless angry and should be questioning about what has happened so far with his life.

he should be angry with surilli for leaving, angry at her sister or tring to kill him angry at this sisters for using him angry at him mom and dad for getting him married to uneduated woman and worse he should be angr at him self for being the biggest fool.

On top of that next day Surilli a real man would ask his wife or any woman for forgiveness after he had slapped her but instead he tried to make her jealous by acting cool in front of Surilli.

By the wy If u feel offended by my opinion than I apologize and u can please make a comment

Oh no ... i can never feel offended..and i totally agree with you..as i said before i am not a gud explainer or a story writer...i just wrote this fanfic to get out my ideas to everyone and what i want the story line to be like.. 😳 and next time i write ill try to keep your comments in mind 😃 thnx!

Hey Nabihah!!!!!! U write well!!!!! I liked ur story a lot. I guess all great writers are uniting at BMTD. Now a days, these fan fics are becoming much more fantasy to me than real BMTD show (thanks to Surili!!!!!! 😡 )

Btw I can catch on and follow with your logic that even after Sagar behaved so badly with Vidya, she is going ahead and doing all nice things for him. This goes on well with her character shown on BMTD, she is not a normal typical girl hence she wouldn't be expected to behave as any other girl would have reacted.

I agree with sweet samie that this logic wouldn't have made any sense but i would add that this isn't any normal couple, this is SV. and ur story is of SV not any typical couple............... 😳she is illiterate and from a small village, and when she can forgive chachi, surili, sindura, etc. then sagar is after all her husband. She understands that Sagar behaved badly as he was hurt with the fact that he had to get married to some girl who wasn't at all of his caliber.

Now, to explain Sagar's behavior (btw even i m bit doubtful if sagar making vidya jealous would be appropriate). Well any normal man would be frustated seeing himself married to some woman who is totally different from his imagination (esp when he is in sort of love with some other woman (i mean surili here)) He is also quite likely to believe that any brainy woman wouldn't marry a guy who was mentally ill for any other reason apart from property. In this case he would surely behave in the worst manner even if he is very good person. But later after seeing all his family members taking vidya's side and seeing her, he starts questioning his own behavior. He is confused whether its right to treat vidya the way he was. Yes again any normal man would be really angry and he is, but he is also hero of a show and kind hearted guy (after all person who is so good in his childhood, wud also be expected to have good qualities in manhoood) I guess all this sinks well in your story.

I adore your story too, and plz continue soon. I am sorry if I was bit long, but I felt that I should support your story as I really liked it and think you are a good writer. 😳

AMAZING WORK NABIHAH!! 👏 Keep it up... 😃