Tumko Dekha Toh.. PG 71 note - Page 35

Hey Neha... U did an awesome job... 👏 Am glad that u wrote this in a very romantic, pure and subtle way.. 😊 this was beautiful to show how they consummate their marriage as husband and wife as they r truly in love and become One.. 😊 ❤️

I love how both granted each other the permission as along the fact they love each other, they respect and trust each other. 😊 I don't know why but i expected u to keep the limit and to put it in a subtle way as i said, and you did it right the way i wanted. Thank you! 😉

No offense to others, but this is what i like when 'the loving making' about a couple is written and having 'Ram n Priya' in mind - RaYa which is now known by us as a historical type couple, i personally expect to have this type of love making. 😊

I won't deny the fact that i did read almost all the writers' here FF's about the love making of RaYa, where i found many of them vulgar, and whereby i could not relate to the characters of Ram n Priya in the show. 😔


Sorry, i ddnt want to hurt anyone.. 😳 We have awesome and best writers over here but about the 'love making' thing... I have really loved this one Neha!!


Great job... Thank you again 👏

Hey Neha, as I told you this was best frm ur end on this scenario.
I can understand ur discomfort but still to be frank this was awesome - decent yet romantic.
Hey dnt say sorrys ... aramse raho this was really a decent one.
RaYa checking each other comfort levels was amazing!
There were few FFs which missed the DECENCY part at this stage but u kept it right 👏

Very beautifully described union of two soul mates...you penned it very aesthetically 👏. Loved your honest and very mesmerizing attempt😉

PS. Special thanks to sarass di! For correcting me.. Without her guidance this wouldnt have come out the way it has.. Thankyou!

Here is a different version.. :-)

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They both smile.. Close their eyes.. Their heart overflowing with pure love for eachother the sleep safe and warm in each others hold...

Well.. Atleast thats what they thought they were going to do..

Ram closing his eyes thinking.. Priya tum bohot khubsurat ho.. I want you par kya tum..

Priya thinking.. Aap apne aap ko rokh kyu rahe hai ram.. Make me yours..

They lie beside eachother feeling rest less.. Ram wants her to be comfortable.. Ram slowly moves away from her.. And goes to the edge of his bed.. He gets up and sits facing his back to Priya.. He closes his eyes and exhales.. Priya looks at him.. Thinks.. Ram why are you torturing yourself.. She slips out and looks at the mobile.. She picks it and reads Ashwins message.. She deletes it and switches her phone off.. Thinking.. Mein Ram ki hu.. Sirf Ram ki..She keeps it there and turns to look at him.. He is lost.. She smiles and walks to him

.. She stands in front of him.. His eyes still close.. He senses her presence and opens his eyes.. He smiles at her.. She looks beautiful even in the dark.. His eyes had adjusted to the dark.. He smiles to her.. She slides her fingers throgh his hair above his ears with both her hands.. He closes his eyes.. Her touch pulled all his thoughts away.. She spoke softly.. Ram.. He opened his eyes and looked at her longingly.. She smiled.. She looked at his eyes with all her love.. He moved his palms to her waist.. She smiled.. He closed his eyes and hugged her pulling her closer digging his head into her stomach.. She moved her fingers through his hair and closed her eyes.. Thinking to himself.. I cant stop touching you.. Ek sukoon milthi hai.. He slowly lets her go.. She lookes at him questioning.. He smiles.. He gets up and walks to the glass window.. She walks behind him and puts her hand hugging him placing her head on his back.. He moves his hands on her..
Priya: kya hua Ram..?
Ram: I love you Priya.. And takes her hand leading her in front of him..
Ram looks at her beautiful eyes..
Her lips.. Her skin so soft.. He walk toward her.. She steps back turning pink as her heart beats start pacing.. He stops taking his left hand to her cheek.. Mein tumhe apna banaana chahtha hu.. She loks down turning red.. He moves his hand to her chin lifting it up.. She looks at him..
Ram: I want to make love to you.. Priya blushes her cheeks turn red.. Her eyes twinkle..she bites her lips and looks down.. He hugs her.. And smiles.. She hugs him drowning herself in the hug.. She whispers.. Toh apne aap ko mat rokhiye Ram.. And hugs him tight.. She felt a sense of security which she never had before..
Ram knew that she had surrendered herself to him.. He wanted to shower all his love on her.. She meant the world to him.. He slowly broke the hug.. They looked at each other.. He stepped forward.. She stepped back smiling to him.. He grinned.. Her back touched the cold glass she closed ber eyes and arched moving away from it.. He puts his hand on her waist.. She feels his warmth and looks at him.. He pulls her closer.. And kisses her.. She tilts her head closing her eyes.. She responds to him with love.. He is ever so gentle.. He closes his eyes enjoying her response.. He breaks the kiss.. He looks at her.. She looks at him and smiles.. She turns around biting her lips.. Ram moves his left hand moving her hair to her left shoulder.. She closes hereyes and smiles..He looks at her open dori.. He smiles walking closer.. He whispers..Dori abhi bhi khula hai.. She opens her eyes.. And smiles.. Toh khule rehenedijiye.. And bites her lips..

Ram knew that was his que, a permission.. He moved closer inhaling her fragrance.. It was enchanting.. He held her shoulders.. He rest his chin on her right shoulder.. She touched her head to his.. He moved his hands down slowly feeling her skin.. She felt butterflies in her stomach flutter.. She skipped a beat closing her eyes.. He whispered as he entwirled his fingers with hers.. Priya ab mein nahi rokhpaaunga.. She held his fingers tight.. She opes her eyes.. Breathing fast.. In a soft voice.. Dont stop.. And smiles..

Ram slowly lets her hand free kissing her shoulders.. He turns her a little and lifts her in his arms.. She puts her hand around his neck and looks at his eyes.. He walks to the bed lost in her eyes.. He softly places her on the bed.. She takes her hand back.. He bends andkisses her forehead... She closes her eyes and clenches the duvet.. He kisses her eyes.. She smiles biting her lips.. She opens her eyes.. He is sitting leaning on her..He kisises her lips she releases it from her onslaught closing her eyes.. A soft warm kiss.. He moves away sliding his hands on her hands.. He sees that the bangles have bruised her wrist.. He takes her left hand and looks at her.. She opens her eyes.. He takes off her bangle.. Kissing her wrist.. She smiles..He takes her other hand.. He is lost.. Her skin so soft.. He takes her bangle off.. He feels her skin.. Says in a lost voice looking at her eyes..as she smiles... Priya yeh zewar tumhe chot.. He looks at her with concern.. She smiles to him as she slides sitting resting her back on the back rest..

Ram holds her hand looking at it worried.. Priya smiles saying.. Kuch nahi hai Ram.. He looks at her and frowns..

Ram: nahi yeh zewar utaaro.. She smiles.. As he points to her ear.. She moves her hands to her right her and unscrews looking at Ram.. She smiles bringing her legs close.. Her payal jingles.. He smiles.. He sees her feet.. Fair.. And pink.. He moves his hand to touch.. Priya pulls her feet closer.. Saying a worried.. Yeh aap kya karrahe hai.. Ram looks at her questioning..

Priya: moving her hands to her left ear.. She brings her legs closer to her..

Ram smiles.. She keeps her baali on the bed.. She moves her hand to her feet.. He holds her hand..

Ram: yaad hai jab meine teri maang bhardiya us din toh tune kya kiya tha..

Priya looking puzzled: aapki aashirwaad liya..

Ram smiles.. Haan.. Mere pair chukar.. And looks at her eyes..

Priya knowing where he is going.. Lekin mein..

He interrupts.. Ardhangini ho.. Aur tumne kaha na ki mujhe tumpar haq hai..

She bilnks.. He lets go of her hand.. He moves his hand towards her feet.. She touches his hand to stop him.. Pressing her feet into the bed.. He looks at her.. She seems disturbed and nods in negative.. He smiles to her.. And touches her feet feeling the soft skin.. She closes her eyes tight..her hands move to her knees cleching the saree tight.. Her shoulders move up.. He unlocksthe anklets.. They slip down.. He takes them and looks at her.. She look at him with guilt.. Her eyes moist.. Ram: I respect you as much as you respect me.. She closes her eyes tight as he lifts her left footin his palms and bends placing a kiss on her ankle.. She bites her lips which curl into a smile.. He feels her feet pushing his hand.. He smiles at her reaction.. He places her foot back.. She looks at him biting her lips.. He slidesher legs a little down into the duvet.. He takes the baali bangles..and the anklets and gets up.. He places it onthe side rack.. He sits close to her resting back on the back rest..looking at her hands clenching her saree at her knees and then turns his facegiving a naughty smile.. She turns red... she swings her self with her back facing him.. Saying.. aap mujhe aise mat dekhiye.. he smiles sliping in hugging her whispering in her ears.. kyu.. Priya bites her lips smiling.. Woh.. He turns her around.. His eyes fall on the mangal sutr.. He takes his hands off her waist and move to the mangal sutr.. Priya holds his hand.. Looking at his eyes.. Yeh nahi Ram.. Ise rehenedijiye..

Ram smiles as he senses her discomfort..she smiles and mimes a thankyou.. And hugs him.. He wraps his hand possesively around her.. And whispers.. Priya mein tumhaare jasbaaton ke khilaaf kabhi nahi jaaunga.. She smiles whispering.. Aap bohot acche hai.. I love you.. He smiles..in a naughty husky voice..Accha.. ?and moves his hand on her bare back feeling her soft skin.. He nuzzles her shoulders.. She moves her right hand to his hair.. Brushing her fingers into his hair.. He moves his hand to her hook and puts his thumbs behind the hook.. Her heartbeats race..She arches holding his kurtha tight with her left hand.. She feels out of breath..He whispers.. Kholdu? Breathing hard..She smiles.. He unhooks it she arches.. Closing her eyes tight hugging him.. He smiles.. He moves her away from him by her shoulders looking into her eyes.. she breathes hard.. She takes her hands back holding the blouse in place.. He looks at her eyes naughtily.. She bites her lips and smiles.. He leans making her lie on the bed.. She breathes fast.. Her heart skipping a few beats.. He grins.. He moves his right hand from her shoulder to her fleets which are neatly tucked in.. He moves her pallu a little and slowly pulls the pleats .. She closes her eyes..moving he stomach a little... He slips his hand to the side pulling the thread of her petticoat.. She moves her waist sideways away from his hand digging her head into the bed.. He moves his hand pulling her hands from behind her.. She opens her eyes slowly.. He kisses her palm holding them together..

And then looks at her.. She smiles turning pink.. She looks away.. He places her palms on either sides.. She smiles.. As he looks at her with love.. Making sure she is comfortable.. He looks at her pallu and leans forwar moving his hands to her left shoulder.. She clenches the duvet..looking at him..He pulls her pallu off.. She immeadiately moves her hand crossing them.. She breathes hard.. He looks at her and grins moving her hands nodding in negative.. She takes her palm to her face covering it.. As she bites her lips.. She feels strange.. Her insides heat up.. Her heart beat pacing.. A beautiful feeling runs through her veins..He slowly moves her hand down.. She sees his bare shoulders.. She looks at his eyes he smiles.. She bites her lips.. She felt comfortable that they were in this together.. He leaned placing a feathery kiss on her lips..She took her hands away and put her hands on his bare shoulders.. Her touch sent goose bumps on his body.. He placed a feathery kiss on her chest.. She vlosed her eyes moving her hands through his hair.. He slipped his right hand on her waist feeling her skin.. She held him tight closing her eyes.. As he moved her clothes down to her hip.. He kissed her on her shoulders.. His other hand slipping her blouse off her shoulders.. And planting wet kisses.. She arched and reacted.. His kissed deepened and None of them knew when they devested of all their clothing..A new feeling running through thierveins.. She opened her eyes and whispered.. Ram..

He looked at her eyes.. Both of them were breathing slow but hard.. Desire building up in them.. They wanted eachother.. They needed eachother... They were ready.. Ram looked at her eyes for permission his eyes intense.. She blinked in desire.. He leaned and kissed her neck.. Nuzzling it.. She felt him in her... She felt breathless.. She smiled and closed her eyes as she arched.. He went deeper slowly.. Trying not to hurt her.. He felt a resistance.. She moved her fingers grizzling his hair.. Hugging him tighter.. He plunged deeper.. She arched holding him tight.. She feels a sharp pain.. He felt a rush of blood warmly embrazing him.. He looked at her.. Her eyes tightly shut a tear escapes her eyes.. He kisses it away and whispers.. Sorry.. She bites her lips.. He kisses her lips passionately.. Driving her pain away..She holds him tight..she feels him go deeper.. She relaxes..There is warmth as they give themselves to eachother completely.. They move in unison towards a shattering climax.. Their mind body and soul become one..
The night had witnessed the most beautiful feeling in the world.. The union of two souls.. The true feeling of belonging..

To be continued..

Do let me know how this is.. :) I would love to tske your opinion.. Do comment, critize and question.. Id be more than happy.. Thankyou for reading., :-)


Namaste,

Lots of love,

Lesha.

Aesthetically written Lesha. Captured the emotions beautifully. The respect they have for each other was shown so well. You are a fantastic writer. First to comment!!!

ram is so caring...

so romantic

I liked this version too...some emotions are described in more detail making RaYa's union a union of two soul mates who desire each other in every way 👏. Thanks for writing and sharing this.