'KILLING ME.. '--A poem.(plz chck pg 5).

maris

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: Nancy_NUTS
ah again Maris Di, those words again depicted Ram's state perfectly! 👏 👏

As Amby di said, i wish Priya could somehow read this and understand how much she is hurting Ram😒

Thanks Nancy.. Whether Priya sees this poem or not, if atleast one of the Cvs sees this , i will be happy..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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completely awesome... good job... love it...tfs.. :-)

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Originally posted by: salsaly
completely awesome... good job... love it...tfs.. :-)

Thanks Saly..😃

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: maris08
A slight modification of this poem from Ram's point of view..

Killing me brutally

Killing me brutally with your words

Hurting me beyond words compare.

Deeper I try to unravel your secret

Harder your resolve to open up.

Mouthing those nonsense casually

Failing to understand me seriously.

Killing me brutally by your actions

Scaring and singeing me deep within.

Shattering me each and every day

Seperating from me further away.

Contrasting was your heart and mind

Aghast and anguished yet so blind.

Killing me brutually with your love

Bury and burn me in hell, so true..

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PS: The last scene saw Ram,shattered and in disbelief. This is my way of describing his feelings at that juncture..

Asusual please leave your comments..

Maris, yaar this is not killing brutally... when one is a brute there is no expectation of love, logic and sense.. this is killing unconscionably -- without any conscience!!! While sakshi migh tget points for her acting, as Priya she can never be trusted anymore... man there were so many opportunities for her to hint at what was transpiring, she needn't have told him the truth at all... there is a separation to think of, we know that, but to maul her character like this!!! totally done without any conscience what does money mean if Ram is not going to believe her anymore man... he loves her, will always do but he can never trust her if a problem really does arise... and why is Niharika's past of any value here... Beats my small little brain man.. really really does!!!!

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Maris, yaar this is not killing brutally... when one is a brute there is no expectation of love, logic and sense.. this is killing unconscionably -- without any conscience!!! While sakshi migh tget points for her acting, as Priya she can never be trusted anymore... man there were so many opportunities for her to hint at what was transpiring, she needn't have told him the truth at all... there is a separation to think of, we know that, but to maul her character like this!!! totally done without any conscience what does money mean if Ram is not going to believe her anymore man... he loves her, will always do but he can never trust her if a problem really does arise... and why is Niharika's past of any value here... Beats my small little brain man.. really really does!!!!

Nandhini

Agreed that a brute will have no love, logic or sense..Priya may be killing Ram without any conscience..

But for poetical liberty, I had to go with the words' Killing brutally' just to depict that kind of act Priya is doing to Ram..

In a sense, whatever crap she said about her love for Ram and the so called idea to protect him financially, are all without meaning ..

There is an old proverb" If only you have a wall the painting can be drawn"..In short only if Ram(even if hehas become a pauper) is there for Priya she can protect him and love him and they can be together...

Priya and Ram are mutually inclusive not exclusive..

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: veena23
WOW---SUPRB🤗

Thanks Veena 😳

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Punya has posted this in Angie's "My take" I take the liberty of reposting it here.. Let Ram kill Priya softly and Priya kill Ram brutally..

Lets all kill the CVs mercilessly.. What say everyone?????

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: maris08
Maris, yaar this is not killing brutally... when one is a brute there is no expectation of love, logic and sense.. this is killing unconscionably -- without any conscience!!! While sakshi migh tget points for her acting, as Priya she can never be trusted anymore... man there were so many opportunities for her to hint at what was transpiring, she needn't have told him the truth at all... there is a separation to think of, we know that, but to maul her character like this!!! totally done without any conscience what does money mean if Ram is not going to believe her anymore man... he loves her, will always do but he can never trust her if a problem really does arise... and why is Niharika's past of any value here... Beats my small little brain man.. really really does!!!!

Nandhini

Agreed that a brute will have no love, logic or sense..Priya may be killing Ram without any conscience..

But for poetical liberty, I had to go with the words' Killing brutally' just to depict that kind of act Priya is doing to Ram..

In a sense, whatever crap she said about her love for Ram and the so called idea to protect him financially, are all without meaning ..

There is an old proverb" If only you have a wall the painting can be drawn"..In short only if Ram(even if hehas become a pauper) is there for Priya she can protect him and love him and they can be together...

Priya and Ram are mutually inclusive not exclusive..

Hey maris,

i understand poetic licence and fully agree that brutally is the perfect word to use... it is just that i am so filled with anguish and despair that I can't seem to stop myself from lashing out at that woman

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