Arakshi os new: A Day In The Raute Household. - Page 2

Originally posted by: sisodia_shefali

awww it was so cute arjun sakshi and there little family 😊😊
u should write more 😊

Originally posted by: AadhyaAashutosh

Hi

it was such a cute & lovely os 👏

loved the kids...they were too sweet ❤️

do write more 🤗

Originally posted by: chulbuliannu

nice os

Originally posted by: Nethravathi

This was a very sweet os

A Day in the Rawte household

Sakshi, Arjun, Roshni, Chandni - A cute little family

Sakshi & Arjun's love for each other & for their cutie pies was too beautiful

Sakshi is afraid of cockroaches😆😆😆 So Am I. Arjun smiled. OMG😳😳😳 thts a news.

I loved the family bonding

Thanks for this beautiful OS

Originally posted by: EashaYousufzai

Awesome update..

Loved it very much..

Superbly written..

But there was lack of dialogue..

Next time u write try to add more dialogues..

And moreover along with other emotions we all need a little bit of romance which was lacking a bit..

Your story is perfect in itself but every story need a final touch..

The touch of romance and undying love..

Try to put little things..

Like Arjun taking care of Sakshi's likeness and other stuff.

Small things makes a story perfect..

Sorry comment kam school teacher wali lecture jyada ho gya..

But I tried to do justice...

I told u what I felt...

Please do write more and try to keep the things in mind I said above..

Dear Dinazz,

Beautiful story dear, I absolutely loved it. Since it's your first story, am taking time to write :)

If you don't mind I would write an honest review because I feel you have the capability to be a really good writer.

This is your maiden work and I guess special to your heart right? That's what I too felt. Now I really liked your concept of putting forth a simple day filled with happiness and sweet memories.

I liked the simplicity of your work. Below I have little advise, I hope you don't mind :)

There was a slight trouble in sync of events, it seemed as if the day went by really fast... slight connecting links to make the reader aware of the time of events going by... even if your story is more of descriptive than like a script (which often has dialogues); then make sure you have added the little details to make the readers connect with what you have thought about the day.

But one thing, do keep the simplicity of writing with you, do not loose that and make the words too decorative; then the work looks weird-ish, and moreover, your essence would be lost :(

Perhaps you are one of the writers who write less of romance, and it's not much of a bad thing. Actually it is really a thing to write a sweet story without much of romance, and I liked it a lot :D

Now the only thing that you can add is a little more description regarding the time of the day, their relations and soft sweet moments,

And yes, suppose from afternoon to evening... you can separate the paragraphs more to make readers understand a change of time.

Also, when you write; keep in mind that what you have imagined, replicate that exactly on your piece of work

Don't miss out on your simplicity :) And the genre of your story is up to you, write what you exactly feel like, you just need to weave your story more...

Otherwise I really liked this cute story 😳 It's really nice for a first attempt! Continue soon dear! With another one 😃

Lots of Love,

Shree

P.S: Sorry if this sounded more like a lecture box!

Originally posted by: Armagadon

Dear Dinazz,

Beautiful story dear, I absolutely loved it. Since it's your first story, am taking time to write :)

If you don't mind I would write an honest review because I feel you have the capability to be a really good writer.

This is your maiden work and I guess special to your heart right? That's what I too felt. Now I really liked your concept of putting forth a simple day filled with happiness and sweet memories.

I liked the simplicity of your work. Below I have little advise, I hope you don't mind :)

There was a slight trouble in sync of events, it seemed as if the day went by really fast... slight connecting links to make the reader aware of the time of events going by... even if your story is more of descriptive than like a script (which often has dialogues); then make sure you have added the little details to make the readers connect with what you have thought about the day.

But one thing, do keep the simplicity of writing with you, do not loose that and make the words too decorative; then the work looks weird-ish, and moreover, your essence would be lost :(

Perhaps you are one of the writers who write less of romance, and it's not much of a bad thing. Actually it is really a thing to write a sweet story without much of romance, and I liked it a lot :D

Now the only thing that you can add is a little more description regarding the time of the day, their relations and soft sweet moments,

And yes, suppose from afternoon to evening... you can separate the paragraphs more to make readers understand a change of time.

Also, when you write; keep in mind that what you have imagined, replicate that exactly on your piece of work

Don't miss out on your simplicity :) And the genre of your story is up to you, write what you exactly feel like, you just need to weave your story more...

Otherwise I really liked this cute story 😳 It's really nice for a first attempt! Continue soon dear! With another one 😃

Lots of Love,

Shree

P.S: Sorry if this sounded more like a lecture box!