Arakshi Fic: Entwined with you.. Ch 6/ Note - pg. 27 9/4

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Aadhya

@AadhyaAashutosh

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Awesome prologue 👏

seems all are connected in some way 😕

i luved the banner...especially daljeet with her bright smile 😃

waiting for more 🤗

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Anu

@anu91

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#32

the back drop of every one was so awesome di...

waiting for further parts...

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MystiqueDew

@MystiqueDew

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#33

The revamp version is really good.

Start is really Interesting. I always adored Arjun-Radhika relation in the previous one. looking forward for more of it.

They were living all alone, and now its time to cross paths.

Nice start

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sania

@Krazzy4u786

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Amazing prologue...loved it!!

Interesting start...can't wait 2 read more!!

Thnx 4 the pm!!

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Safina

@miss_choxz

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#35

So does this mean that u have ended Shayad yahi to pyar hai... I loved that... I know this us a re vamp but that story was getting to places so y re start all over again

I loved sia and arjun

I like the re vamp too but please continue with Shayad that is my most favourite """

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Avantika

@AeDilHaiMushkil

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: miss_precious
So does this mean that u have ended Shayad yahi to pyar hai... I loved that... I know this us a re vamp but that story was getting to places so y re start all over again

I loved sia and arjun

I like the re vamp too but please continue with Shayad that is my most favourite """

Hey.. yes, I know.. but there were some unnecessary tracks that I didn't want.. And not many people were following it either..

I wanted to make some changes to the female lead's character, which wasn't possible with Sia..

In case you're following this one, you'll know what I mean when you read the further parts..

Oh and I'm discontinuing Shayad obviously..

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IArmageddonI

@IArmageddonI

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Arrey Deva...

I am beautifully late na!

Wah wah... kya baat hai Shree! Late hona koi mujhse seekhe *grinning*

Acha btw... let me give my beautiful statutory warning!

STATUTORY WARNING : Khabardaar agar iss comment main logic dhundne ki koshish ki toh... yeh ladki paagal hai aur usse khud pata nahi hai ki issne kya likha hai... isko yeh kahani achi lagi toh badbadane lagi... agar phir bhi logic dhundna chaho toh phir may the most handsome lord..😉 Lord Krishna bachaye appko 😆

Haila... kya rapchik story hai *patting my back* wah re Shree... US se seedha tapori... aisa kamaal sirf mere main hi hai... hehe...

Yeah.. alright... to serious commenting now... rofl... as if that's ever possible... me and serious commenting... 🤣

You may end up with a total Vegan US but I won't give serious comment ever 😆

By the way I loved the little piece of Mirza Asadullah Beg Khan... (can't find the accent on e 😆 )

And you know what... his relative is my best friend... 😳

So I often get to read Mirza Ghalib's works...

Now... for Sameer...

I have simply loved the way you have penned down his feelings... absolutely amazing... now coming to his fiancee/wife... ah... so he was a happy man once...

Now tied to the shackles of guilt thanks to a past which would be seen in the chapters to come... obviously for the fact that now he would be coming face to face with an integral member of his past... Arjun...

Arjun

So our dear hot cop is held hostage... guess the captor didn't know our ACP too well 😆Jokes apart... I liked his situation which was a stark contrast to the above mentioned one... aah.. survived but not lived... my most favorite line out here... it's true... there is a thin but definite contrast amidst the two words...

I loved that part... the best weapon in his arsenal, himself. It's actually true... the best weapon, friend, and mentor is often the person we know the most... that is... ourselves...

And you so do know how to make a 2 day starved injured exhausted fatigued man look hot... 😉 ouch... a gash above the hip line... it's painful indeed...

The other woman... I feel an almost motherly attachment that she would be having towards Arjun... she could most probably be a sister... but then with very strong maternal instincts... it's beautiful...

Radhika

A welcome entry in the story I must say... A very different character... matured yet slightly vulnerable... (unres the other half later)

P.S : I think I have figured out the relations... good work dear!

Edited by Armagadon - 11 years ago

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_shadesnature_

@_shadesnature_

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

May be its a first story of yours which i am reading with a pleasent xperrience no need to say you are a brilliant writer
now coming to the story or prologue
everyone is dealing with thier ownblack shades of past ,sarrow n pains sad but loookibg frward for a postive note later on the story progress
continue soon

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Avantika

@AeDilHaiMushkil

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Hello!

No no.. The update isn't ready yet.. 🤔

Fortunately, I had some time off, and decided to put it to good use.. 😛

Nahi samjhe?

Here to thank you guys for showering my chottu-est baby with your reviews.. Ab shuru karing!

@ Seasonofleaves : Rituuu... 🤗 Matt poocho! I think I was probably going through some emotional phase when I decided to revamp this one.. Else, in my right frame of mind, and considering the race against time that I'm into as of now, I wouldn't have dared to do it.. 😆😆

But anyhow!

Sheesh! You and KKHH.. What am I going to do with you.. ❤️ 😆

So, I see lots and lots of questions and speculations.. Wait and watch, baalike.. All in due time.. 😉

Yep.. I love the name too.. and for similar reasons.. Hi-5!

Haha.. Bet u did.. SRK ka naam, aur tum miss karo.. Impossible.. 😛

Awwie.. It's okay.. That guy is really depressing, but soo good..*sniffs*

I soo envy you, you know.. You read soo much, despite your hectic schedule, and I'm struggling to even read FF's posted here..

Thaanku.. Hope you shall enjoy this one, just as much.. 😃

@ life93 : 🤗 Hey Nee... Aww.. I miss her too.. But fikar not, we have Radhika na.. 😛

Yep! That was the surprise..

And yes, hopefully soon.. Abhi toh mile bhi nahi hain..

LIR! *sigh* time hai.. I gotto update 2 before I move to that one..

Anyhow.. Thank you..

@ Devangana : Yes! I know.. The story is the same but I'm going to fast forward it a lot.. Coz most of you have already read it.. Thanks.. 😃

@ drunkiibabe : Thanks.. 😃

@ My_loveis_gone : Thank you.. 😊

@ NainaSM : Errm.. Radhika, u mean? 😛 Thanks.. Made some changes to the original one..

@ kunchu : *Angel?* Accha.. Just kidding.. 😆

Thaaankuu.. yes, that's what it was, sort of a character sketch..

Ahem! Yes, I do.. 😆

Thanks so much K.. 🤗

@ Arakshiya_58 : Thanks dear.. Glad you're liking it.. 😃

@ EashaYousufzai : Easha!! Thank you soo much.. Oh yes.. It may take a while, but what's an ending, if it's not a happy one, na?

@_Nikita_ : Thank you.. So glad to see that you're looking fwd to it.. Will try n post soonish.. 😃

@ shreya09 : Aww.. Yep! One major reason to revamp Shayad was Radhika.. ❤️ Thank you for making her real..

Thanks, glad you like it.. 😃

@ sisodia_shefali : Lol.. Yeah, it was more of a character sketch/introduction.. Hope to answer some with the next update.. And it's Radhika btw..

Thank you.. 😃

@ Snehajain : Haww.. Itni confusion kyun? Lool.. This one's a mystery as well.. 😆😆😛

Thank you.. 😃

@ Areesha566 : Lol.. Yeah, I would love to.. But with the kind of unpredictable work schedules I have, it's really not possible.. I try to write and read, as and when I can..

Thank you.. 😃

@ laila1994 : I think I've answered your doubts already, right.. Looking forward to your take on the revamped version.. Thank you.. 😃

@ Swara85 : Aww.. Yep.. Hi-5! I am soo overwhelmed.. Thank you soo much.. 🤗

Yes.. It was more of a character introduction, actually..

To answer your questions..

1. Yes, this is Shayad in it's new avataar.. But with plenty of changes. The essence of all characters will be the same, and Sakshi will be the female lead opposite hotwa.. I needed to get rid of some loose ends and unfinished tracks, hence the move..

But yes, I'm going to fastforward the story a lot, so you won't have to worry about the fic being repetitive..

Thank you, once again.. As for Zaara, that's a mystery.. 😛

@...Maha-Srk... : Thank you.. 😃

@ anitasharma : Lol.. Good.. I'd be shocked, if you weren't.. 😆 Thanks..

@ umamah70 : Thanks.. 😃

@ misakiscarlet : Yes.. And hence the name, entwined with you.. 😛 Thank you..

@ skrafty : Yes, I do.. And I really didn't want to abandon it half-way.. Hence, the changes.. Thank you so much.. Will try n post soon.. 😃

@ yams.s : Thanks.. Glad you're liking it.. 😃

@ AadhyaAashutosh : 😃 Thank you.. Glad you like it.. Yep.. Daljeet.. ❤️ I love her!

@ anu91 : Thank you.. 😃

@ _Blackpearl_ : Thanks so much.. Yep, me too.. And hence continuing it.. 😃

@ Krazzy4u786 : Thank you.. 😃

@ miss_precious : Hey.. yes, I know.. but there were some unnecessary tracks that I didn't want.. And not many people were following it either..

I wanted to make some changes to the female lead's character, which wasn't possible with Sia..

In case you're following this one, you'll know what I mean when you read the further parts..

Oh and I'm discontinuing Shayad obviously..

Is that why you stopped following my other works? Naah, just asking..

Thank you.. Hopefully, I'll see more of you here.. 😃

@ Armagadon : Eeesh! It's okay.. 😆

Oh btw.. I love your warnings.. 😛 And hi-5! I don't know what I write half the time, either.. 😛

Naah! It happens only in India-ns.. 😆😆

Oh my! Lucky you.. His beautiful poetries often go over my head, but with a little bit of brain usage, I think I can get them to make sense to me.. 😆

Errm yup.. These characters are sooo close to my heart. Glad you appreciate Sameer's characterisation.. I've always wanted to see him portraying some intense emotions, but anyhow.. Main hoon na.. 😎

Arjunwa.. Indeed.. He's the Hotwa na.. Din ho ya raat, injured or not, the hotness quotient remains unaffected.. 😉

Exactly.. He's his strength, and yet his own downfall..

Aww yes.. Lots more on the other woman in his life.. To be honest, she's my most favorite character in the fic, even more than Arjunwa, perhaps.. 😛

Yep.. She's that and much more.. Glad you're starting to like her..

Thank you so much, Shree.. Really appreciate it.. 😃

@ NATURESHIVANI : Errm.. Sorry, but I didn't get you.. Is this my first fic that you're reading?

Yes, they've been living in grief, away from their loved ones but now it's time to bring them together and entwine their lifes with each other..

Thank you.. 😃

Edited by Fantasia_junkie - 11 years ago

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Ritu

@SeasonOfLeaves

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#40

How do you do it? 😲 You get up at IST timings and sleep at GMT timings.. if you know what I mean!

Anyway..

Ress!😳

Unress!

Avniii main aa gayiii🤗

Tumhe kya laga? Ki main bhool gayi? Ki tum bach gayi? 🤣

Nahiii!

Tum meri lambe lambe comments se bach nahi sakti!

You start with the Marine drive.. sniff.. you know how much I want to go to that place! Sighh. Huge sigh! The description makes me even greedier now. Some day I shall just take off! And meet you there of course.. in front of Mannat!

Hold on, I am getting carried away. Back to the Marine drive.

Sheeshh the image of Arjun on Marine drive.. *heart eyes* just him standing there, outlined against the setting sun.. *thud*

Smokey white shirt *thud*

I want bhelpuri now

Sameer and Arjun's confrontation was well penned down.. I wonder what made him leave her?

Hahahaa the auto rickshaw bit was hilarious. Loved Liza and little Ayush's entry. (and I just remembered the conversation from a few hours ago. 😆😆😆)

Btw these auto walas are probably the same all over India... this soo typical of them in Delhi. Ajkal toh even London transport seems cheaper. Really!🤔

Shree chuckled and patted the scared driver's shoulder, "Haan Bhaiya.. Inke grandfather angrezon ke zammane ke jailor the. Bhaiya, dhyan rakhna aage se.."

ROFLLL.. KKHH!!! I know Sholay mein bhi yeh dialogue tha but mujhe toh KKHH hi yaad aayega na 😛

It's little moments like these that make me fall in love with your writing (besides the way you write):

He had witnessed the small affectionate moment when Liza bent down to fix Ayush's ruffled hair, and the little one pulled back with an annoyed glare.

Hmmm I am guessing senior forensic expert will be Radhika, right?

Ouch... those hurtful comments by Sameer's father and aunt.. I dunno why I was imagining Amitabh Bachchan like in K3G as Damsingh Rathore. Aaj toh main SRK mood mein hoon and I don't even know why 😛

The flashback!! OMG OMG OMG. That was just beautiful!

The plate of carrots! Pata hai kya yaad aaya? Baharon phool barsao.. mera mehboob aaya haiii.. Anupam kher in DDLJ.. 😛 When he was picking up the roses lol.. he was chewing on a carrot na.. I know I know mera kuch nahi ho sakta 😛

Ok I found a new favourite!! Radhika and Arjun 😳 I love love love love loveee their relationship and to be honest I wasn't expecting this... or was I? That was a very clever twist Miss Avantika Gupta! I did not see that coming. I first thought she was his real sister probably and then read that she was like a sister to Arjun (am I right?).. like an elder sister? And Sameer misunderstood?

Ouch.. that must have hurt so bad. I don't know why I feel so sad after the end of the flashback.. they had such a beautiful rishta and yet... Oh well! I am interested to know how they actually met... I am hoping you would be revealing that later?

Yep I did miss Sakshi... but it didn't really matter so much coz the flashback just stole the show. It was just beautiful, and so heart-warming.

I think I asked too many questions! And I think I mentioned SRK too many times.. so I shall stop here now before you put a tape over my mouth he he he he he

Oh oh and I am waiting for more Ayush and Arjun scenes tooo 😳 Ayush is such a cutie.. I love him already. OH one more thing.. are Liza and Shree related?

Ok I should close my questions ki dukaan... 😛

I am loving this storyyy :) Update sooonish .. no no wait! Update the SS first (greedy me speaking) and then my dil ka tukda, the apple of my eye: ASD ❤️ No I won't get started on that 😛 Or my love for that fic

Achaa me going finally 😛

Edited by SeasonOfLeaves - 11 years ago