Roshni Rawte case SS: dangerous to know..Chap 6, pg 26

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Delusional Minx

@Delusional_Minx

Stunner

+ 32

Posted: 10 years ago

#151

Fantastic Update dear

loved it

So now Arjun set to came back to Mumbai!

The fbs were beautiful

the first 4 were really hilarious!

Roshni was perfect Jungli billi.. ACP sahab ko sambhalne ke liye aisi hi chahiye..a tit for tat! hehe

That nurse giving him tough time.. he complaining like a 4 yrs old kid..haha!!

the last FB was so romantic!

Aise proposal ko koi kaise mana kar sakta he.. aur aisa proposal ACP Arjun ke dimag me hi aa sakta he..

ACP ko laga ladki patana aasan he.. par wo to criminal pakadne se bhi jyada mushkil he!

so beautiful!

Now what will happen in Mumbai??

eagerly waiting to know it

do continu soon

thankx for pm

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Shravani / Arohi

@skrafty

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#152

Awesome update
loved it
Finally Arjun has started recollecting his memories
he knows where to find Answers
FB 1 was amazing
Roshni ne to Arjun ki bolti hi band kar di😆😆😆
FB 2 was superb
FB 3 was emotional
and FB 4
poor Arjun har gaya😆😆
Arjun ko jungli billi se pyaar ho gaya
LOL Rosh didn't like his proposal because it was simple😆😆😆
And finally the proposal
just amazing
waiting for the next part
continue soon

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Vishal sharma

@My_loveis_gone

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Posted: 10 years ago

#153

Like button is nt working. Pls do pm me. Bdw awesme part.

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Atisha Khan

@Shamsad1607

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#154

good going Laila...
thus story keeps me shcked each time I read the updates.
first,sam knows where is Arjun but for the world he was searching for Arjun...his ignorance to clues also makes me suspect him...what is he upto?
sam's past is very painful...he lost everything the moment he gathered courage to stand for his wife. it clears why he was so attached to arjun's girl... but still 'kuch toh chooot raha hain '...
he wants arjun to fet back his memory...but as far I remember he did every possible stuff to prevent arjun to know about his past. now he wants him. baxk into mumbai...is it only to make himself clear to the law??

arjun...getting back him memory...and his little dips into the memory pool...mysterious Roshni...and her weired behaviour...his falling for her...it was a treat to read.
now eagerly waiting for arjun's arrival at mumbai.

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savali

@savali

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#155

Res/unres
awsome update
acp arjun is back,
his trtment is complted n
he is cmg back to mumbai to search arzoo.
Loved arni movements their meetings to till cnfession
but roshni is still mysterious.
Thnks fr pm.

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rimi

@rimi_invisible

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Posted: 10 years ago

#156

An update completely filled with fbs...not bad..but frankly it wasnt anywhere near to your last two updates..thats what i felt..😛

ill take your word.."the intensity was missing,"🤢

Arjun is on his way back to mumbai..the reason and the sequence of fbs were lovely..😃

then comes the first and second fb..again it am not happy with them...i understand it was to picturise rosh's character...but couldnt it be a bit smoother...or may be i wasnt quite comfortable reading it..🥱

Moreover being in the police department for so many years..he must have met such womens right..specially hard core lady criminals..who always dare to challenge him..😉

but again the initial start to rosh's character was nice..leaving behind the lovey dovey looks is difficult and you have done it well..👏

the next two fbs consisted mainly of their initial days in a relationship...the insight to their love story...it surely wasnt any normal one..but definately love had smitten Arjun deep..i am still not sure of rosh though..😛😃

then the proposal...filmy one..but nice...i love to read proposals..they are always beautiful...

the small descriptions you had given which depicted arjun's mind state was well written...

all over a nice update..but definately not ur best update..
i am still waiting for case progress..

continue soon..

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Shivani Priyam Kumar

@Meself

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

#157

Finally unreserved my spot at 19!! Next up is chapter 5!! (Yes you can do it Shivani!!)

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The update left me all confused. There are two condraticting shades of Sameer drawn that just doesn't sit together. In the beginning you had Sameer going all out to make sure Arjun remains in the oblivion away from all the muck that was lying in Mumbai. Infact he had restricted his search engine to let out anything dubious in front of him. But then a few updates later we have the same Sameer trying every door and handle to make sure Arjun gets back all the broken pieces and stands as firm as his footing was some years ago!! This doesn't sit down very well. Also apart from that dark past Sameer really doesn't have anything in his gear that would brand him as the protagnist. He is seemingly making his shell like those whom we brand as flat characters. He still is the man he was in chapter one with no progression made. And there is no revelation of the fact that past he keeps in hiding away from the scrutinising eyes of the world. So that is coming across as a spilt; a widened spilt in the chapter.

Next up is Roshini's character. It has a lot of things rushed and gushed into it. Granted she is all snobbish and selfish, but them again that cannot be enough a mean to overpower a hardcore police officer like Arjun. He is an ACP so that means he must have had his brush with so many criminals ranging from notorious to down right disgusting. So with such a graph already laid out don't you think him not being able to handle a girl is a bit far fetched?? Also their meetings and the proposal seemed too rushed. It could have taken it sown sweet time. That would have evolved the equation the three leads had!!

Overall it was a nice update but had certain things clashing with each other. I liked the way you allowed the falshbacks to unravel itself without forcing it on your readers; but again it'll take a bit of clearing. Also don't end the story so soon. There are many loopholes waiting for a closure. Let the story run its due course!

Edited by Meself - 10 years ago

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Tabassum Nitol

@_Tabassum_

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#158

Awwwsssmmm Update
Loved it very much
Supperbbb...
Amazing...
Beautifully Written...
Arjun is going to Mumbai...
Flashbacks were Supper Awwssmmm...
Loved the way Arjun proposed Roshni... Sooo Beautiful...
Cont Sooon
Waiting for next part
Thanks for the PM

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Bhavna Antriwale-Gargate

@bgargate

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#159

For Chapter 4

Sameer is keeping a tab on Arjun's treatment ... hmmm

😲😲😲

Sameer's wife and daughter both dead? 😭😭😭

The entire part was very emotional. A 17 year old boy going through the biggest tragedy of his life and left to regret for rest of his life. Sameer has been living in trauma of all this for years.

Sad 😭😭😭😭

And now he is taking care of little Arzoo 🤗 ... She will be his angel 😊

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For Chapter 5

Quite interesting 😊

All the parts were written beautifully 😊

Does Sameer know that Arjun is out of hospital? I guess if Sameer had blocked Arjun's access to the data on internet, then he must be keeping an eye on him. The internet access was restricted from hospital. But what if Arjun tries to search about himself from an open internet connection?

But I m really confused with this story and ur comment 😕

You said that the lead character of story is Sameer Rathod. But all we know about him is he was married at a very young age on insistence of his family and his wife and child died during child birth. Nothing more about them. Where is his family now? How did they react to the death of Sameer's wife?

And we know more details about Arjun ... so many flashbacks 😉 (I'm not complaining 😊)

Now the reason for me being confused is you are going to finish the story in just 2 or 3 chapters.

Another thing, I would tell u very honestly about this story (I don't mean to hurt you ... believe me) I liked you writing style. You have 2 plots in the story. Sameer's child marriage and traumatic past and Arjun - Roshni's off beat path where Roshni was a negative character (Brilliant idea 😊)

And the only link between the two seem to be baby Aarzoo.

So if I read them separately as two different stories, they are lovely. Specially this ArNi part in chapter 5. As an OS its a treat for all ArNi fans. And at the same time Sameer's part is equally touching but still needs some more detailing just like u did for ArNi.

And even after 5 parts, given that u plan to finish it soon, I'm still waiting for the missing links.

I hope you wont hurry through the parts 😊

Its a beautiful merger of 2 very different concepts and one of the stories that I really found interesting 😊

Edited by bgargate - 10 years ago

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ishita

@IshitaRocks015

Rocker

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Posted: 10 years ago

#160

sorry m late...
ohkay..so arjun has finally decided to know his past...
his own brain stopped him from recalling the past...or rather the "bad past"
he had nightmares of roshni..n knew that she was dead..
He remembers about arzoo...*PS- Laila maine arzoo ko manga tha na..abtk ni dia...mere guju ka kya hoga? hehehe*
FB 1--- hillarious...arjun damn angry..and above that Roshni's reply was.. 😆
Roshni baat baat pe Arjun ki band bajati thi... hehe..
Fb 2--
hehe ...nurse interested in looking under his shirt...lol this line was...
complaints about dustbin n management...
ranting like 16 year old and complaining like 4 yr old.. 🤣
Fb 3--
emotional one ...
roshni was sad... arjun wanted to support her morally...
but as soon as arjun sat beside her, she went away..
Lol...alwz that hospital... d 2nd reason was awesome... only roshni could handle him...
FB 4---
hein?? did she really do that???
like...really? she snatched the chips like a child n ran away???
hey bhagwan..u tube ke lye vid...rofl...
well ..roshni was smart..no doubt...she used her weapon...Nails..
mannersim ka coaching ..?? arjun man lo na...u lost...
Roshni got angry at d PLAIN proposal.. 😆
Roshni ke itne sare conditions...bapree..
The proposal was beautiful... really nice...
Laila...tumne kise dekha 4th FB me? ab bta v do...

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