Arakshi FF: Ajeeb si daastan.. Chapter 18C - Pg.101 27/4 - Page 31

Fantastic update finally arjun makes his appearance ab toh woh trivedi kamina Gaya kaam se
So excited for next chapter
Thank you di !!

why did u had to stop there 😡 but never mind next wala must be full on action drama and bit of romance 😉

Really Sry for being late Avni...due to my work only am late...always i will love to read ur stories avni...
Trevedi how cheap he was...i hate him..
Sakshi courage was chanceless...
Arjun entry was like a super hero...
Hope he will save her and teach him a better lesson...
Wen ever ur updating ur stories do pm me will love to read always...
Thanks for PM...

So he picked her to safe himself !!! And it gonna cause his life.

This, my dearest Avantika, was a very nasty episode.

I remember telling you once that I do not like, indeed cannot stand torture scenes, which is why I do not read spy novels, even the relatively mild James Bond ones. Nor could I ever stand the leering, ugly rape scenes - God, how even the word makes my skin crawl! - in the Hindi films of up to 20 years ago.

Now this is a combination of both, and you have gone to town with the details. I know that such things do happen in isolated places, though Mussoorie, with the NAA, is not my idea of an isolated, typical small town. But normally, a woman has to be arrested by a woman officer and cannot kept in an all male police station after 6 pm. She has to be produced before a magistrate. And this sort of thing goes on right in the middle of a Police Academy? It is as well that you have a large disclaimer, my dear!

Anyhow, I am afraid that all this torture-cum-indecent advances got to be too much for me. I do not think so much of lurid detail was needed for the sake of the impact. That would have been just as strong if Trivedi had threatened her with a sure fire sentence. Her life, and her mission, which in a way are conjoined, would have both been destroyed in a instant.

I suppose you wanted to highlight the sheer horror of it, so that the dramatic impact of our hero saving his fair maiden from what used to be called a fate worse than death is suitably heightened. But it was too much, Avantika.

The trouble is that you write so well that that whole, ugly scene and Sakshi's helpless desperation, the unbearable shame and revulsion she feels, become palpable. Real. I could feel all that she felt. So it is your fault, my dear, not once but twice over. How is that for a left handed compliment?

Now to compensate for making me feel sick to the stomach, make sure you include not just a "few punches", but a full scale bashing of Trivedi till his ugly mug has been nearly reduced to a pulp. Anything less than that will not be acceptable, so take heed, young lady!

Shyamala Aunty

Hello everyone.. Me is back! 🤗

Err.. before you start glaring at the screen, I should apologise for being late.

Been caught up with a lot of stuff lately.

I won't be able to reply to each one of you, but please know that I really appreciate every tiny bit of your feedback.. Thank you! 😃

I hope the upcoming chapter answers some of your queries.. 😊

Anyhow.. Here's the next one.. Some of you might find it a little short (Yeah greedy u.. 😛) But I had to stop there.

** Your comments are my only source of inspiration (except of course, my twisted head) and hence I'd love it if you chose to acknowledge the FF in any way you can, if you follow it

I'm already losing a lot of readers, for reasons unknown to me. And hence intend to move all my works to my personal blog in the near future, if this goes on.

The next updates, either PM or blog ones will only be sent to those of you who're really interested in reading further.. Coz it is annoying to send out so many PMs and receive so little feedback..

DISCLAIMER:

The story revolves around a fictional Police force and Institutions associated with it. I do not intend to criticise or malign any individual or organisation. It's fiction and hence I guess, I can be a bit liberal with creative freedom here.. 😃

Besides, it's me.. So you should know by now, when to keep your logic aside.. 😆😉

Also, the previous warning stays.. It's going to be suuper filmy, so please take it with a pinch of salt..

I condemn any form of violence against women, but am taking a liberty here with fiction. Hope none of it offends any of you.

CHAPTER 6

Awesome update
hate the trivedi
liked that Sakshi tried to fight back
loved Arjun's entry
waiting for the next part
thanks for the pm
continue soon

I finished my syllabus before 2 weeks of my exams, I had nothing to do today so I started reading this FF.😎

Res for Thank-You's.. (Will be back to unres later)

Err...behna...Sorry is not enough for my lateness in reading and commenting on this, but please, please forgive me.