Ariya FF:'Deception,Intrigue..'#3:New thread link:P 47 - Page 30

Originally posted by: -Amri-

Originally posted by: ll_megha_ll

sorry for short comment actually i am busy.

for dedicating me.

this is a best surprize

a big hugs to you

for you..

kya shocking update hain

riya is roshni sister and arjun sali.

and riya suspects that arjun killed her sister.

yaar tumne to aisa shock deke mujhe maar diya.

me faint

as usual you write beautifull povs

love the way you showed riya tigerness..

arjun expression was expected and you write very beautifully

first reason was understood maybe all are melted even arjun but second reason kya bolon

i am speechless

i never expected in my dream...

the update is super hit

continue soon...

or next time aisa shock dena ho to warning dedena.

continue soon.

and thanx for the pm..

and thanx for once again my behena.

and love you

Originally posted by: -Amri-

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">My dear Warda! Hope you are not too angry with your Api for her late update. I have become increasingly lazy nowadays. It's comments like yours which urges me to write and post soon😊Love you, dear sister.</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And how was the twist? Tell me honestly, it made me very nervous? I didn't know whether you guys would like it or not!</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">And you are always welcome for the PM's. I just look forward to reading your comments, they mean a lot to me!</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Take care, behen, and see you soon😊</font>

Heyya,

How are you doing ? :D

First of all, I am not sure if you remember me..and I wont be surprised if you did'nt...I have been gayab for quite a time and was unable to read your updates!

SO VERY VERY SORRY FOR THAT!

So without much ado, I will start off by commenting on chapter 5,

All of them were thinking just about her, this tells about the kind of impact she had on them as after such a long time too.

*sigh* Shree remembering his Ri, I can so understand his inner turmoil. She was his friend afterall.

Here I loved the way you expressed Shree and Arjun's silent understanding. Well that's something that makes them more than just a team.

Love the way you expressed Arjun's expressions through Shree, that guy is going through such a LOT , all alone..by himself.

Secret compartment in the drawer now that's super cool!

Shit shit shit shit! Arjun is in danger!

Not so surprisingly this shook Riya to the core, but like the way Tim and M.K supported her J

Aahaan Mr Rawte, well he cant take his mid off the incidents..

Poor thing, had craved for love scince a child, but never got it..and when he got it in form of Roshni it was mercilessly taken away from him.

And Sam had deserted him too, and now he had no one to por his heart too *sigh*

But everything takes him back to Riya...and her lie.

I am so happy that you put the part in Lisa's Pov.

Okay so I guess lisa had feeling for him during the collage days, but he felt otherwise.

Lol she already knows about Ayesha's crush, but then girls do understand these stuff pretty well :P

Love the part where shree comes and tell sorry! Super sweet!

Haha Shree Liza, my tom and jerry :P

The girls POV at the end was lovely!

And yes the girl Ayesha met, it was Riya I guess...

Btw YAAAY I was right about the Hamlet thing :P Thank you <3

Finally the case is progressing in here, and Siddharth Gupta toh gaya gaam se! Rathore is not going to leave you :P

Arjun's nightmares really did tug my heart, I do hope that guy gets the peace of mind and soul he deserves.

So he is right on to the commissioner to get answers, well I should have expected this. Mr Rawte is not the one to let go.

This part was awesome, the way Rathore dealt with the criminal as well as Chotu and Shree trying to calm him down.

Well ofcorse Riya would'nt have any damm harm come to Arjun whatever may happen!

Thus she had Tim and M.K tail Arjun. Btw I love this Riya and he attitude! That's my girl man!

THEN THE MOMENT! Shree sees the camera footage and Arjun gets saved from the bullent..and there is Riya... Riya who was supposed to be dead! EEEP what a cliffhanger!

Okay I will be back supersoon to read and comment on the other chapters, mostly cause of my own sanity cause suspense kills me :P

But first let me tell you how amazing do you write girl!

I am seriously in awe. The progress of the case as well all the insights of all the different characters are shown flawlessly. Kudos to you girl!

Keep up this awesome work, I will be back soon to comment on the latter chapters. And yes, sorry for being so late again.

- Priya

Chapter 6A

1 WHOLE CHAPTER ON JUST ARJUN RIYA MEET! EEEP <3

GOD ITS H.E.R

AND YES HERE HE REALIZES THAT HE LOVES HER DAMMIT!

All those over flow of emotions is so beautifully expressed.

The face which made him feel was not in front of him, again - THIS LINE is a genius.

The heart wants what the heart wants.' You know that this is one of my many favourite quotes :P

Finally she had her, her...

Then how he reads all the emotion on her face, is so beautifully expressed.

And hell Arjun's reaction to it is very interesting' seriously :P Okay this was a surprise and a nice element in the grave chapter.

And then, she went...went away without even exchanging a word.

With Riya she did what she was not supposed to do, but then she cant let the man she loved die in front of her.

The way you have expressed her inner turmoil, well I cant express in to words..except say that it was beautiful again and again.

6B

First of all for the note in this chapter, I would have to say that I really very sorry for not being more regular. Trust me I am too addicted to this FF's to actually not read a part, but I cant help but be awfully late most of the time. So sorry again L

"Truth is stranger than fiction, but it is because Fiction is obliged to stick to possibilities; Truth isn't."

- Mark Twain.

^^ AGAIN a beautiful quote!

Okay you know what, Shree's part actually made me tear up.

About him and arjun having the common bond, that is caring for her.

But then the part about him breaking down, finally giving up and just venting out his feelings..feelings with a strong sense of betrayal, betrayal of a friend.

The happiness of getting to know that she is actually alive, with the sense of betrayal..the way you put it in words is just WOW! The anger..and the loss of a friend, in a sense very different...

OMG Rathore..crying...in front of them. And chotu,...

I just cant tell how well written this chapter is. I mean I could actually try and feel all the emotions and turmoil they were going through.

Even though I love Riya here, their anger is more than justified here. You cant do this to the people you love, you just cant..

6C

Okay firstly, starting with Ceaolo's POV, I quite like it. Different and innovative. Kudos to that

Also how he describes the life of an officer, and how frustrating it can be.

And also on the extent of crime. It was a really good addition!

AAAHH love the way he thinks about Arjun, a young bright officer, made into a man driven by revenge. And how it was Riya who came like a cure in his life. How she put everything at risk, for him.

Riya...ok this tells me Riya has a past too,.

Thus he takes matters in his handa and calls up Shukla.

Arjun, God seriously you have a thing with putting feeling into words so beautifully.

Arjun drives back to ETF, some how.

Yahan se koodhna bhi hain' How much I loved that scene <3

The memories of the two women he loves, flashing in front of his eyes was heart warming <3

But then came the facade with was momentarily broken, and the mask of indifference was put up.

Determined to find Riya, and knowing her secret he went. *sigh*

ARJUN IN RATHORES CABIN!

And then he sees RIYA there.

Okay I hardly know how am I able to wait to read the next chapter. Seriously girl you give me panic attacks and goosebumps!

I love your writing SO much!

Will try and comment for the next part as soon as I can.

Priya