once upon a time in rawte family.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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guyz its my first OS. I hope u'll like it
em not really good at writing so forgive me 4 mistakes.

CHARACTERS.
http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=3473780
n ETF team is same. (Sameer, Arjun, Ayesha, Liza, Shree, & Chuto)


rathod: team we have a case.2 kids r missing from an orphanage from 24 hrs. warden told the police that she thinks that kids are kidnapped..so we have to go to kolapur to solve the case.
after hearing kolapur's name everyone's eyes went on Arjun as he was born and raised up there.but arjun's face remained expressionless, no happiness was visible on his face...he left the room without saying anything.
shree:abe chuto hum kolapur jarai hain phir bhi ye khados khush ni hai. i mean isse apni family k pass jane ki koi khushi ni.
rathod was listening there conversation from behind.

Five years ago, Maharashtra Police Academy, Nashiik

arjun:sam! em so happy kal mai apni family se milonga.dad se kitni bate karni hai.mom k hath ka bana hua chocolate cake khana hai.UV or nick ke sath mastian karni hain or mini, uski to complain ki puri list tayyar hogi; mujhe ye chahie, us larki ne mere jesse kapre pehne the, mera makeup acha ni lagraha tha, mje nia dress chahie...or pata ni kitna dimagh khayegi. but you know sam jab woh mera dimagh khati hai to mje bohot acha lagta hai.

Arjun dropped the file on the table little too loudly to break the sudden silence, making rathod snap out of his thoughts.
rathod knew that arjun would make excuse of staying at mumbai as after roshni's brutal murder he has managed to stay far away from his family 4 their safety.

Arjun: Rathod mje mumbai mai bohot kaam hai tum team ko sath leke chale jao mai yahin rokonga.
Rathod: lekin hume tumhari zarorat padegi rawte tumhe hamare sath chalna hi hoga.
Arjun was about to say something but Rathod interrupted him...
Rathod: request ni kar raha order hai mera.
arjun knew that there is noway he can make rathod change his mind..deep in heart arjun knew that SAM still cares for him n he would do anything to reunite rawte family so arjun reluctantly nodded in positive.

After 2 days the case had finally been solved (but Arjun not even once tried to meet his family) so ETF team were on the way to mumbai but suddenly something went wrong with the car so Rathod parked the car on the road side then stepped out of the driving seat, shree followed him while other stayed in car. then he open the bonnet and tried to find what went wrong.when suddenly a girl's soft voice made him turn his face.
A beautifull girl was standing in front of him she was wearing casual sweatshirt n long fitted pants. she was smiling at Rathod while adjusting her weight on her red sports car.
Rathod gave her a nothing-held-back smile. she was no one else but Arjun's dearest sister MINI..

guyz how was it should i continue or leave it here??
plz comment tomato n eggs are welcomed.
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Payal_156 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Gud start dear
do cont soon...
waiting!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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good start...
continue soon...😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Update # 2

she was no one else but Arjun's dearest sister MINI.
Arjun saw her from the passenger seat n rushed out of the car. his eyes moistened n hugged mini tightly and let his arm around her for a brief moment as if he was hugging the most precious thing in the world..
Rathod was watching his best friend being happy after a long time n he was enjoying the moment when ayesha's question broke the silence.
Ayesha (confused):who is she?
Rathod: Arjun's sis'
Liza (amused): she is beautifull.😲
arjun now let mini go...then he introduced ETF team to her.
Arjun(teasing mini): she is miani.isse thora bach k rehna dekhne mai theek thak hai magar harkaten bht khatar naak.
Mini: bhai! ap bhi kch kam ni hain. mjhse baghair mile jane wale the?
Arjun in broken voice: ni-haan-ni...i mean...
Shree to chuto: is dunia mai koi to hai jo is khadoos ki bolti band karsakta hai...
mini heard shrees conversion n winked at him😉
Mini(teasing arjun): q bolti band hogai na?? wo to bhala ho sam bhaiya ka jinhone mje apse milne k liye yahn bolaya...thankyou sam bhaiya.
arjun gave an angry gaze to sameer but soon his anger vanished when mini kissed his cheek.
Mini: Arjun bhaiya ghar chalen?

then they headed towards the rawte mansion...

they reached the house in about half an hr. it was a big beautiful house...there was a big lawn on the front...
then they entered the Main Door which was made of fine wooden and aesthetically made. there was a enormous hall which has many hand-made painting n sculpture which was adding more beauty to the hall. furniture was also wooden and one could easily tell that the carving was ancient...so overall, the hall was so beautiful and heart-catching.
Mini(noticing the amusement in team's eyes): my mom decorated this hall. it's her hobby to decorate rooms.😊
Chotu to shree: Aiga! hall aesa hai to baki ka ghar kesa hoga???

Suddenly a hard voice came from the behind..."mini; ye log kon hai?" everyone turned their head to see who it was n they saw a above average looking man with tall height & tough looking face. his well build muscles were clearly visible in his sleeveless chest-hugging T-shirt.
arjun:UV bhaiya.
he didn't notice arjun before so his voice came as a shocked to UV.
UV(shocked) :RJ.
Arjun with tears of happiness: bhai mene apko bht miss kia...kese hain app?
UV(sarcastically): Yaad agai hamari?? baat mat karo mjhse 1 saal baad milne aye ho?
mini jumped into there fight n tried to change the topic
Mini: UV bhaiya churiena, ek to itni mushkilon se ghar aye hn apki dant son kat wapas bhag jayenge. (she made a puppy face and that was enough to pursue him)
UV: ab kia bare bhai se gale bhi ni mile ga?
then he hugged Arjun tightly...

plz guyz leave a comment😊
Edited by live - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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sry guyz i can't cont from here. my exams r cmg soon so em buzy...anyone who would like to cont can do it from here...

SORRY.😭😭😭
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: live

sry guyz i can't cont from here. my exams r cmg soon so em buzy...anyone who would like to cont can do it from here...

SORRY.😭😭😭



Oh no! I just started reading... Never mind, exams are more important. You can just put this away for a while and write during your holidays. 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Isse please continue karo.
Loved it.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Dat was reallliii nyc
Loved all da emtion
Updaate wen ever u can exams r reallii important
Good luck
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome start..
Update when ever u can..

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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice concept

pls continue soon and pm me i love it

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