Arakshi FF:Tum Dena Saath Mera [Note-45] - Page 15

Originally posted by: Princeess07

Just checked it..
It was so well written...
Shree's thinking about Aisha...
Aisha trying to handle shania...
All was so good..
Thanks for the PM..
& do continue soon..

That's what pained him at times. He had taken the love she provided, but was not able to make her accept his love. He would enjoy the happiness she brought in his life, but was never able to make her happy. There was something that was troubling her. Always. ..

So he would be happy the time, she laughed at his antics, at least sometime he could may her laugh. At times, she would also comment back, there would be a sparkle in her eyes then. This indicated that she was not always like this, she was a bubbly girl sometime. Something happened. Something that made her the Ayesha she is. And no one knew what. Again, may be both his bosses did, and he was jealous of them. He was jealous that they knew more about her. He wished he did too.

But mostly he wished to somehow wipe the sorrow away from her life. Be a part of her life. Have that elder sister he always desired. To put his head on her lap and let her pat his head till he falls asleep.

Originally posted by: shurtiekta

nice now pls update nxt pt soon..

Originally posted by: sashashyam

My dear Akangkshya,

I see that you have come back before the 2 months of your exams were over, which should have been by end-March. But as you say the difficult ones have been tackled, I will not scold you for sneaking back here ahead of time!😉

I am afraid I have forgotten the earlier parts, but that does not really matter. I remember clearly that for me, the revelation was your delightful Shreekant Sen and his inimitable funning, and I was pleased to see that you have developed his relationship with Ayesha with great sensitivity and understanding. The parts quoted below are especially well done.

That's what pained him at times. He had taken the love she provided, but was not able to make her accept his love. He would enjoy the happiness she brought in his life, but was never able to make her happy. There was something that was troubling her. Always. ..

So he would be happy the time, she laughed at his antics, at least sometime he could may her laugh. At times, she would also comment back, there would be a sparkle in her eyes then. This indicated that she was not always like this, she was a bubbly girl sometime. Something happened. Something that made her the Ayesha she is. And no one knew what. Again, may be both his bosses did, and he was jealous of them. He was jealous that they knew more about her. He wished he did too.

But mostly he wished to somehow wipe the sorrow away from her life. Be a part of her life. Have that elder sister he always desired. To put his head on her lap and let her pat his head till he falls asleep.

The part about Ayesha letting herself go in the washroom rings true in its bitter anguish, but the language needs polishing. A good bit of polishing.

Finally, the passage between Sania and Ayesha is crisp and to the point, plus it brings out a hidden facet of Ayesha's character that you will have to develop further. The tantalising reference in the very end to a mysterious her holds out much promise for the future.

Now you go back to your study table and make sure you do the remaining papers well. This FF can wait.

Shyamala Aunty

Originally posted by: lola123

Omg! Amazing part Mithu🤗

Loved it...Really😳

Ayesha's pain was just so well described...My heart went out to her..😔

And her explaining Sania...making her realize that she is not at fault👏

Ayesha was truly the hero in this update!

Though Shree's affection for her was adorable too

Very well written⭐️

Originally posted by: despicable_me

Awesome blossom! 😉

Originally posted by: ...Mithuz...

Thank u so much Tahi Di!!!🤗