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Os viditi (just for you babygirl 728, hope I do justice to your imagination)

Aditi was seating with jasmir and lovelin.

Aditi: jasmirji I am really sorry meri hote hua lovelin ke sath... She could not find words it was hard afterall she was responsible to take care of lovlin bit there she remain all wounded up.

Jasmir: ab jo hona tha woh ho gya iss haveli mein hai kuch aise cheezein ki koi kuch nahi kar sakta unke samne.

Suddenly they both heard the sound of a door closing and opening. Jasmir was about to go and check but aditi instantly stopped him.

Aditi: jasmir ji aap rukhiye main dekhti hun aur agar main 5 min se jyada loon to aap darwaza andar se band kar le we don't what it is.

And with that she went outside the room. Aditi was visibly shakenin this case. She had seen many ghost but the ones in this house were quite dangerous and angry. Once in the courtyard she noticed that the weather had become gloomy and high speed wind was flowing. Thak...thak...thak

She had something move she gulped down the saliva building in her mouth. Thak...thak...thak. The voices came from the living room. She started making her way to hall.

Here in the police station vikrant was taking to the professor. Suddenly he felt a restless in his heart. At first he ignored it but then again he felt the same. He was trying hard to concentrate on the proff s speech. Suddenly out of instincts his hand moved to his chest and next to his heart and he uttered only one name

"Aditi..

Proff: excuse me sir aap ne kuch kaha.

Vikrant: nahi ...um actually sir do you mind if a make call.

Prof: sure.

Vik started calling aditi but she did not pick his call so vikrany assumed she was busy with her work or her ghost gang' and the last part made smile on his face so he returned to the prof.

In simrit niwas. Aditi had just reached the hall. The sound of thak tak had suddenly stopped but she knew she was not alone in the room. She could sense the heaviness in the air of this room. The denseness, coldness made it hard to breathe. Out of nowhere the radio kept in the room got on and she thought of calling vikrant. Just as she was about to do so she saw 2 miss calls from vik

Aditi : my phone must be on silent. Thak...thak...thak aditi's breathe got hitched in her neck Thak...thak...thak the voice was coming from the radio and somebody started singing "luk chup jana makkai ka danna pakdegaye to phir pachtana. The voice was from somewhere behind her .she turned around instantly. There she saw a woman , handicapped child and a sikh man. All had their neck slit. Their facial expression was that of scrowlling. Aditi didn't realize that she had mistakenly dialed vik's number when her hands were twitching in fear. The woman suddenly took out a sword and advanced towards aditi. Aditi shreiked in terror covered her eyes in fear and dropped to the ground.

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hey mitras u wrote a fantastic OS on babygirl728 request & its so good that I started to expect next part of this frm u soon
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Nice one mitras.. loved the spiritual connection part.. hota hoga na aisa ViDiti ke bich..
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thanks everyone I will update soon
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final part (this is long since i didn't want to bring breaks in this part, thanks to loveinshi whose written update helped a lot)

In police station vikrant was busy listening SI talk about old files when his phone rang caller id showed aditi's name. he picked the phone

Vikrant: hello aditi... hello aditi no one answered and then he heard her scream. His heart skipped a beat. The SI kept on talking but vikrant was not listening anything now. The phone slipped from his hand this act gained SI s attention and he stopped blabbering

SI: sir kya hua?

Vikrant (came out of the trance): Aditi .

In simrit niwas

Hearing aditi's voice jasmir wanted to help but the door closed on his face whatever he tried the door remained close.

Here in the drawing room suddenly things started falling here and there. Aditi was scared beyond wits. She found no one in the room but could hear the same riddle "luk chup jana makkai ka danna pakdegaye to phir pachtana. A photo frame flew at her she dashed it away but was not fortunate enough when chair hit her at her head and she fell on the ground screaming "vikrant... The ghost woman again appeared and sarted walking towards her and aditi started dragging herself back. away from the ghost

In police station vik again picked the phone and was trying hard to hear something from other end but (background music here -Jannatein Kahan)( Wo oh oh...)

he dashed towards the door. (Lage tu khafa sa Wo oh oh...)

he started driving towards the simrit niwas and kept the phone on his ear

vikrant:hello aditi aditi kuch to bolo he could only hear thing falling down and then she screamed his name "vikrant. He could feel the pain in her voice ,he stopped his car for a min(Gila bewajah sa Wo oh oh...) he again tried contacting her

vik: aditi ... kuch to bolo plz but only heard her writthing in pain. A tear escaped his eyes( Tere hi liye tujhse hoon juda)he again began deiving his car.

In simrit niwas aditi's head was spinning but she continued moving back. The woman with sword attacked her again. Aditi moved to the other side in fraction of second ,but the sword slashed a big cut on her hand,blood ozzed out of the new cut and she shoutedVikrant...in pain.( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa Who o oh...Woh o oh...) vikrant felt a sudden pain in his heart when he heard aditi in pained voice(Zara sa zara sa Wo oh oh...) old memories flooded his mind

Flashback:

Vikrant :you should leave police force and be a philosopher.

Aditi :pehle ek student ko to sambhal loon(chaitali case)

Out of flashback:

Vik could not control himself and tears started falling from his eyes (Mujhe hai gumaan sa)

Flashback:(sattu epi)

As soon as Aditi opens her tiffin, vikrant dig into it Aditi stares at him as he is eating her tiffin, while aslo discussing the case. Once done vikrant gets off the desk licking his fingers clean and tells Aditi that he will go and get the building files. Aditi calls out to him and offers him a tissue to wipe his hands. He denies it and wipes his hands on his jeans.

Out of flashback:

A heavy downpour started outside. The outside atmoshphere matched his own.

(Zara sa zara sa Wo oh oh...)

Flashback:(rakh kateri epi)

while driving home vikrant starts teasing Aditi about Girish.

Vikrant: accha chance tha tumhare pass to unite with girish(made a face here). You know u can just go to him

Aditi: nahi main yahan hi theek hun tumhare sath... spl cases solve karne mein.

Out of flashback:( Abhi hai nasha sa Wo oh oh...)

In simrit niwas:

Aditi gained all her strength and ran for door. While running she could see vikrant's car driven to the villa. A sense of relief passed over her. She saw him coming out of car . But the door closed on her face as she reached it. She understood her last moments were here.she slumps against the door. She just wished if she had told him... (Tere hi liye tujhse hoon juda) Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa)

(this is happening simultaneously)Outside the villa vikrant reached and jumped out of his car and started running towards her, he saw aditi all wounded running towards the door, towards him. He reached the door in breathlessness but before he could enter the house the door got closed. He started beating his fist against the door (he was crying throughout this, you can imagine the vikrant in epi 22 when his soldier friend died)( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa )

He slumps against the door (imagine the last scene of devdass here when paro and devdass both are seprated by the closing door).
Flashback:(epi 15 sikha)

Vikrant hears Aditi's cry and peeks through the glass door, he tries to break it but it doesn't budge. He screams Aditi's name but is helpless as he sees her vanishing right before his eyes. The light come to normal and he pushes the door open, there was no one other than shikha in the room. She tells him that they have taken Aditi really really far away.

Out of flashback. Vikrant realized its no time for remembering old. This time her ghost gang' is not defeating him, she is not going anywhere without him. And started searching for some other door or way.( Woh o oh...Woh o oh...)

Inside the villa

Aditi again saw the sikh man standing in front of him. He grabbed her by her throat and lifted her in air started strangulating her. Aditi's vision started going blurr.( Haan ek dhuaan sa dikhta hai)

Vikrant tried breaking every window but failed(Jo bhi likhun main, mitta hai do pal me hi).
here old moemories started making their way to aditi's head her father's smiling face, her recruitment in police force, finally his face ,his smile, jokes, anger. Thinking of him a smile crept on her face.( Woh batein, woh ratein, woh yadein kisi ki)

Vikrant finally found a window open and jumped in(Chhoot.ti hi jaa rahi hai). He made his way to living hall. Once there the sight in front of him stopped him in his track, aditi was dangling in air, it appeared as if someone invisible was strangling her. (Toot.ti hi jaa rahi hai )

Vikrant shouted " aditi... and in that precise moment aditi was flung towards vikrant(woh har kadi
Inn saason ko, aahon ko)
vik ran to her took her in his arms and started weeping( aditi has lost consiouness) (Mere gunaaho ki mill rahi hai koi saza)(sameway as in last of epi 20 when he finds her in shaitan chowki). Meanwhile the door in jasmir's room opened and lovelin also gained consiouness. They both rushed outside but on their way out they found their son on the same spot from where he had disappeared. They both took him and came to living room.

Jasmir:vikrant it's no more safe here lets get out of here. See we found angad .maybe they want us to leave the house.

Vikrant could not agree any less and all of them rushed out of the villa, with aditi in vikrant's arm. While jasmir and his family left in his car. Vikrant put aditi in his car and started driving to hospital. In between sometimes rubbed her hand. Tears would not stop coming out his eyes though he knew she was fine now and fainted probably due to the trauma.

At the hospital

The doctor gave aditi a first aid ant told vikrant "every thing is normal now she fainted probably due to the trauma. Take care. She will gain consiouness in some time. Vikrant didn't leave her side even for a sec and fall asleep with his head by her side on the bed.

Next morning vikrant woke up with feeling of someone caressing his hair, he lifted his eyes only to find aditi awake and caressing his hairs. He could not contain himself and just crushed himself in her in the teddy hug he gave her., tears made way in theirs eyes. Aditi returned the hug in same intensity.

Vikrant( in between the sobs): i... love u aditi

Aditi : I luv you too (while caressing his back)( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa
Woh o oh...
Woh o oh...
Woh o oh)

i fumbled at the last part as my head felt empty of ideas but i hope guys like it
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Waw u potrayed so many emotions together in such a wonderful way that reading it made me feel that I'm actually watching it happening in front of my eyes.well done
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thanks bengali 721 glad you like it
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omg!! that bg song and the flashbacks this is sooo perfect!!!

im glad my WUs helped 😊
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Originally posted by: mitras

final part (this is long since i didn't want to bring breaks in this part, thanks to loveinshi whose written update helped a lot)

In police station vikrant was busy listening SI talk about old files when his phone rang caller id showed aditi's name. he picked the phone

Vikrant: hello aditi... hello aditi no one answered and then he heard her scream. His heart skipped a beat. The SI kept on talking but vikrant was not listening anything now. The phone slipped from his hand this act gained SI s attention and he stopped blabbering

SI: sir kya hua?

Vikrant (came out of the trance): Aditi .

In simrit niwas

Hearing aditi's voice jasmir wanted to help but the door closed on his face whatever he tried the door remained close.

Here in the drawing room suddenly things started falling here and there. Aditi was scared beyond wits. She found no one in the room but could hear the same riddle "luk chup jana makkai ka danna pakdegaye to phir pachtana. A photo frame flew at her she dashed it away but was not fortunate enough when chair hit her at her head and she fell on the ground screaming "vikrant... The ghost woman again appeared and sarted walking towards her and aditi started dragging herself back. away from the ghost

In police station vik again picked the phone and was trying hard to hear something from other end but (background music here -Jannatein Kahan)( Wo oh oh...)

he dashed towards the door. (Lage tu khafa sa Wo oh oh...)

he started driving towards the simrit niwas and kept the phone on his ear

vikrant:hello aditi aditi kuch to bolo he could only hear thing falling down and then she screamed his name "vikrant. He could feel the pain in her voice ,he stopped his car for a min(Gila bewajah sa Wo oh oh...) he again tried contacting her

vik: aditi ... kuch to bolo plz but only heard her writthing in pain. A tear escaped his eyes( Tere hi liye tujhse hoon juda)he again began deiving his car.

In simrit niwas aditi's head was spinning but she continued moving back. The woman with sword attacked her again. Aditi moved to the other side in fraction of second ,but the sword slashed a big cut on her hand,blood ozzed out of the new cut and she shoutedVikrant...in pain.( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa Who o oh...Woh o oh...) vikrant felt a sudden pain in his heart when he heard aditi in pained voice(Zara sa zara sa Wo oh oh...) old memories flooded his mind

Flashback:

Vikrant :you should leave police force and be a philosopher.

Aditi :pehle ek student ko to sambhal loon(chaitali case)

Out of flashback:

Vik could not control himself and tears started falling from his eyes (Mujhe hai gumaan sa)

Flashback:(sattu epi)

As soon as Aditi opens her tiffin, vikrant dig into it Aditi stares at him as he is eating her tiffin, while aslo discussing the case. Once done vikrant gets off the desk licking his fingers clean and tells Aditi that he will go and get the building files. Aditi calls out to him and offers him a tissue to wipe his hands. He denies it and wipes his hands on his jeans.

Out of flashback:

A heavy downpour started outside. The outside atmoshphere matched his own.

(Zara sa zara sa Wo oh oh...)

Flashback:(rakh kateri epi)

while driving home vikrant starts teasing Aditi about Girish.

Vikrant: accha chance tha tumhare pass to unite with girish(made a face here). You know u can just go to him

Aditi: nahi main yahan hi theek hun tumhare sath... spl cases solve karne mein.

Out of flashback:( Abhi hai nasha sa Wo oh oh...)

In simrit niwas:

Aditi gained all her strength and ran for door. While running she could see vikrant's car driven to the villa. A sense of relief passed over her. She saw him coming out of car . But the door closed on her face as she reached it. She understood her last moments were here.she slumps against the door. She just wished if she had told him... (Tere hi liye tujhse hoon juda) Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa)

(this is happening simultaneously)Outside the villa vikrant reached and jumped out of his car and started running towards her, he saw aditi all wounded running towards the door, towards him. He reached the door in breathlessness but before he could enter the house the door got closed. He started beating his fist against the door (he was crying throughout this, you can imagine the vikrant in epi 22 when his soldier friend died)( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa )

He slumps against the door (imagine the last scene of devdass here when paro and devdass both are seprated by the closing door).
Flashback:(epi 15 sikha)

Vikrant hears Aditi's cry and peeks through the glass door, he tries to break it but it doesn't budge. He screams Aditi's name but is helpless as he sees her vanishing right before his eyes. The light come to normal and he pushes the door open, there was no one other than shikha in the room. She tells him that they have taken Aditi really really far away.

Out of flashback. Vikrant realized its no time for remembering old. This time her ghost gang' is not defeating him, she is not going anywhere without him. And started searching for some other door or way.( Woh o oh...Woh o oh...)

Inside the villa

Aditi again saw the sikh man standing in front of him. He grabbed her by her throat and lifted her in air started strangulating her. Aditi's vision started going blurr.( Haan ek dhuaan sa dikhta hai)

Vikrant tried breaking every window but failed(Jo bhi likhun main, mitta hai do pal me hi).
here old moemories started making their way to aditi's head her father's smiling face, her recruitment in police force, finally his face ,his smile, jokes, anger. Thinking of him a smile crept on her face.( Woh batein, woh ratein, woh yadein kisi ki)

Vikrant finally found a window open and jumped in(Chhoot.ti hi jaa rahi hai). He made his way to living hall. Once there the sight in front of him stopped him in his track, aditi was dangling in air, it appeared as if someone invisible was strangling her. (Toot.ti hi jaa rahi hai )

Vikrant shouted " aditi... and in that precise moment aditi was flung towards vikrant(woh har kadi
Inn saason ko, aahon ko)
vik ran to her took her in his arms and started weeping( aditi has lost consiouness) (Mere gunaaho ki mill rahi hai koi saza)(sameway as in last of epi 20 when he finds her in shaitan chowki). Meanwhile the door in jasmir's room opened and lovelin also gained consiouness. They both rushed outside but on their way out they found their son on the same spot from where he had disappeared. They both took him and came to living room.

Jasmir:vikrant it's no more safe here lets get out of here. See we found angad .maybe they want us to leave the house.

Vikrant could not agree any less and all of them rushed out of the villa, with aditi in vikrant's arm. While jasmir and his family left in his car. Vikrant put aditi in his car and started driving to hospital. In between sometimes rubbed her hand. Tears would not stop coming out his eyes though he knew she was fine now and fainted probably due to the trauma.

At the hospital

The doctor gave aditi a first aid ant told vikrant "every thing is normal now she fainted probably due to the trauma. Take care. She will gain consiouness in some time. Vikrant didn't leave her side even for a sec and fall asleep with his head by her side on the bed.

Next morning vikrant woke up with feeling of someone caressing his hair, he lifted his eyes only to find aditi awake and caressing his hairs. He could not contain himself and just crushed himself in her in the teddy hug he gave her., tears made way in theirs eyes. Aditi returned the hug in same intensity.

Vikrant( in between the sobs): i... love u aditi

Aditi : I luv you too (while caressing his back)( Jannatein Kahan bin huey fanaa
Woh o oh...
Woh o oh...
Woh o oh)

i fumbled at the last part as my head felt empty of ideas but i hope guys like it

I love you mitras for writing this,thank you so much & fumble? Are u nuts? It was amazing and much better than my imagination. Luv u & this story

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