MadhVini SS-'I CARE FOR YOU MORE THAN I LOVE YOU' *PART-7*up - Page 3

Created

Last reply

Replies

108

Views

13.9k

Users

13

Likes

95

Frequent Posters

ammu92 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: dreamyrose


your welcome dear🤗do continue soon😃😃😃



Yeah sure 😳 🤗
..radiance... thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#22
first of all, thats one of my favourite song..!!!!
and the surprise was great...!
Manu as a kid .. 😆
she twirled once then again two...bewildered of what was going on
🤣

ammu92 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#23

Originally posted by: ..radiance...

first of all, thats one of my favourite song..!!!!

and the surprise was great...!
Manu as a kid .. 😆
<font color="#990000" face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">she twirled once then again two...</font><font color="#990000" face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">bewildered of what was going on</font>
<font color="#990000" face="Comic Sans MS, Times, serif">🤣</font>




Thanks paridhi dear 🤗
This song is mine favourite too 😳
Yes Manu as a kid..after all they are quite young na 😆 Sweet sixteen 😆
ammu92 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#24


O-ohh.. Sweta dear.. Thanks for reminding 🤗
I'll update it most probably today 😳 Well I think so 😉
sweta2005 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 500 Thumbnail + 7
Posted: 9 years ago
#25

Originally posted by: ammu92



O-ohh.. Sweta dear.. Thanks for reminding 🤗
I'll update it most probably today 😳 Well I think so 😉


oho cool waiting,i undesrstand after tuesday-wednesday episode we forgot it
Iqraa17 thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#26
Wow wow wow u rock yaar . Perfect hai ye.. itnaa suspense create kr dya hai yaar . Agy ka b jldi se post karoo
ammu92 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#27
PART 3
Madhav was running behind manu..
MADHAV- manu ..manu.. ruk jao..hum kehte hai ruko..

MANU- (laughing) nahi..madhav aap hume nahi pakad paege.. ab hum jaa rahe hai.. sham hogyi hai hame badi amma se dant nahi khani hai..

MADHAV - (for once he catches her and grabs her in his arm)
toh.. ab kya..?? bahut keh rahi thi tum ki hum tumhe nahi pakad paege..
hum yuvraj hai hame jo chahie wo humse koi nhi cheen sakta..
Ab bolo kya kia jae tumhara?? (having a smirk on his face)

MANU- (shying) Achaa.. madhav choriye hame..(she tries to free herself,but more she tries more the hold gets tighten) Madhav..hame jane dijiye na(she made a plea)

MADHAV- Ye kya baat hui..pura din humne tumhara intezaar kiya to ab tum aayi thi..aur abi jaana bhi hai..(he sees her struggling to free herself..so he breaks his hold) Jao tum..
hame bhi bahut kaam hai..hum bhi jaa rahe..(he got angry and begins to go)
Manu runs behind him...

MANU- Madhav..aap humse ese naraj hoke nahi jaa saktey..?(she makes a baby face)

MADHAV-(keeps his jacket in jeep and turns to her) Achaa.. to ab hum naraj bhi tumhari marzi se hoge..(sarcastic)
(and he sits in jeep,but manu doesn't move from there..she was looking at him)
He looks at her staring him..

MADHAV- Ab kya hai manu? (he takes a deep breathe)
Thik hai hum kya kare hume gussa arha hai toh? TUM kuch kar sakti ho hamare gusse ko door karne ke liye? (he looks at her annoyingly and questioningly)

Manu thinks of something and then smiles a little..Madhav was annoingly waiting for her to move aside from his jeep looking either side..when manu takes a baby step to his jeep stretches herself up leans to him and plants a gentle kiss on his cheek..this took madhav all in surprise for sudden,she was so close to her that he could actually feel her running heartbeat and her fluctuating breathe,..she whispers in his ear..
"AAP jantey hai na ...ki.. hum..apse...(shies) ki hum apki baaton me nahi aaege.."
She stars laughing and steps down of jeep to run..now Madhav also had smile on his face and runs behind her..

MADHAV- Manuuu?? tumhe aaj nahi chorege hum..ruko..(manu turns and gives teasing look.."Aap buddhu hai buddhu..." ...laughs and again runs more speedly) manu ki bachi...tum humse panga logi..
Suddenly while running manu gets hitten by car...
Madhav screams loudly... MANUuu...?

MADHAV wakes up with a jerk screaming Manuuu?? He was all sweating,breathing heavily... takes a look around his room..he still was lying on floor..his hands soaked in blood... he then tries to compose himself as it was all dream... but his heart was wrenching in pain...
he stands and runs towards manu room banging the door behind...
Madhav opens manu's room door with a bang...
Manu... manu... (he searches for her) he then goes to bathroom..and bangs loudly... Manu...manu??
His heartbeat got more fast,Manu wasn't in room... thousands of thoughts were trying to enter his mind...he got more worried not seeing her in room...
Manu ...kha gayi??
He then runs along the corridor searching her..then comes downstairs...searching and shouting... Manu...Manu...??
Badi rani,choti rani,chote raja..servants all got alarmed by his voice..

BADI RANI tries to speak "Yuvraj... kya hua?
MADHAV- Maa... manu..manu kha hai maa? wo mil nahi rahi maa?
(he again shouts) Manu?? manuuu?
Badi rani sees his bleeding hand,gets worried...MADHAV..??
Before badi rani could say anything he runs to kitchen... Manu?? Manu? he sees here and there but there were only servants...his Manu was not even in kitchen...
he again comes in Hall...he started panicking now,tears started rolling down from his eyes...everyone was trying to say and control him..but he jerks everyone and was shouting madly Manu...???

CHOTI RANI- Lo ji..hogya shuru tamasha..maa aur bete ka...uff
BADI RANI-yuvraj hamari baat to suniye..dekhiye apke hath se khoon beh raha hai...shant ho jaiye... suniye..
But madhav was panicking and pleading Manu?? manu nahi mil rahi maa? Manuuu??

A voice over comes...YUVRAJ??
Listening to that...MADHAV goes silent and turns to see..

MANU was standing at the door with puja plate...she was looking at madhav shockingly and confused about what's going on?? why is everyone so disturbed? why was yuvraj screaming taking her name??
MADHAV who was shouting few seconds back goes silent and stands to look at manu in pleasure...his manu...yes..his manu...she was there infront of him... He runs to her and hugs her tightly...closes his eyes...breathing heavily.. he started crying more badly...

BG-Teri dhadkano se hai zindagi meri
Khwahishein teri ab duaaein meri
Kitna anokha bandhan hai ye...
Teri meri jaan jo ek hui
Lotunga yahaan tere paas main haan
Waada hai mera... mar bhi jaaun kahin
Jo tu mera humdard hai
Jo tu mera humdard hai

Suhaana har dard hai
Jo tu mera humdard hai

He then breaks the hug..holds her by shoulder..manu was overwhelmed by his emotions..tears flitting her eyes..
MADHAV-(being angry) kaha chali gayi thi tum? samajhti kya ho tum khud ko?
agar tumne dubara esa kuch bhi kiya na manu... toh hum...tumhari jaan le lege..(and tears fell from his eyes)
he then cups her face lovingly... "Tum janti ho hum kitna dar gaye the,aaj se pehle hame itna dar kabi nahi laga..ek pal ko laga hamari saanse hi ruk jaegi.." manu stops him keeping her hand on his lips.."YUVRAJ..." He removes her hand... "Hum khud ko kho bhi de manu... par tumhe nhi kho saktey" "Dubara humse is tarah door mat jana..warna hume pta nahi hum kya kar bethe"

BADI RANI- Yuvraj??
Madhvini gets attentive by her voice... madhav then leaves manu and turns to her..
BADI RANI-Yuvraaj??(being concerned) Manasvini garud mandir gayi thi puja ke liye...bass... aur dekhiye itne me apne apna kya haal bana liya..(she cups his face)
Aap esa kyu kartey hain yuvraaj.. hume kitni takleef hoti hai...
MADHAV- hume maaf kar dijiye...par ab hum thikh hai maa..
BADI RANI- Manasvini aap apne kamre me jaiye..(she nods..looks at madhav and leaves) badi rani turns to yuvraj... "kya thikh hai,,she holds his hands...dekhiye apke hatho se khoon..ye sab kese..(tears started rolling from her eyes)
MADHAV- maa hum thik hai...aap ye aasoo na bahaiye.. hum abi jaa kar patti kar lete hai(badi rani says "hum kar dete hai") Nahii.. maa hum kar lege..hmmm(he gives her side hug and forehead kiss and leaves) (choti rani fumes)

MANU comes to her room.. in thoughts all about what happened few minutes ago in hall..she stands in front of mirror keeps her puja plate and looks herself in mirror.. reminding madhav's word.. when she notices blood on her cheeks..she gets shocked and checks it...
MANU- Khoon.?? (she was shocked) Ye khoon hamare chehre pe kaha se aaya.. (then she gets when madhav cupped her face) Madhav..? kya unhe chot lagi hai...??
(she runs from there to his room)
[Madhav was putting on his clothes after bath,he puts his pant and was about to put his tee..when manu opens his door with a bang,hurriedly comes to him and both fall on bed...

BG-Lo shuru ab chahaton ka ..silsila ho raha hai
Mit rahi hai dooriyan..aur fasala kho raha hai..
[madhav removes her hairs from face and tugs behind her ear..]
Ho rahi hai baat kuch aisi jisme..
Ho rahi hai baat kuch aisi jisme sabd gum hai..arth matlab gum ho raha hai
[manu breakes her eyelock and tries to stand..but madhav again pulls her to him..her hand was around his bare chest..and madhav was holding her tightly around her bare waist...he was trying to behold her beauty..her eyes..her cheeks..her lips..he slowly moves his hands to her bare back..manu was drowning in emotions by his touch..her breathe was fluctuating... she again brushes her flowing emotions and pushes him and stands by a jerk..she starts to leave when madhav again pulls her and pins to wall]
Dil ye chahe toot kar chahu tumhe..
dedo ijaazat tutne ki ..tum hamein..
chun ke rakh lo chahaton ke ye lamhe..
yu sambhal kar thaam lo..pal dekho wo kho raha hai...
{both were looking into each other eyes..he moves his hands upwards to her arm...then slowly to her nude belly..he was seducing her by his touch and manu was helpless to control her emotions..she was giving up slowly to his touch..the touch of her madhav..her love..
he again removed hairs from her shoulders to back...leans to her and kisses her on neck..manu lost control over her breathe..she closes her eyes with this feel..she clinched her fist...madhav plants another kiss to either side of her nape...]
Jism to sirf ek bahana hai..
rooh tak sath sath jaana hai..
hath jabse hai tera...hatho me..
mere hatho me ye jamana hai...
[madhav lifts his face to her..leans to kiss her lips ...when he sees her closing her eye feeling his touch..he gets surprised and overwhelmed..a loving smile spreads on his face..he pulls her more closer to him holding her all around her bare waist and kisses on her cheeks...]
Lo shuru ab chahato ka silsila ho raha hai..
mit rahi hai dooriya..aur fasala kho raha hai...!!

[Madhav then thinks not to take this physical intimacy ahead and frees her slowly..slowly..lovingly looking at her innocence..her nervousness..He then steps back and stands there looking at her waiting for her to open her eyes,he was amazed how she had kept her eyes close]
(After a second manu opens her eyes slowly.. when she finds madhav looking at her..their eyes meet and both get shy..so does madhav turns to and manu too at either side...)
Madhav clears his throat and asks without looking at her...
MADHAV- Humm.. yha kyu aayi thi? kuch kaam tha??
(Manu gets nervous at his question..then she finally remembers why did she came and again rushes to him and took his hands toward her... madhav looks at her surprisingly..because all what happened few minutes before he was trying not to face her or make her more uncomfortable and she just came and pulled his hand)
MANU- Apko chot lagi hai?? (she was worries when she lifts her eyes and sees madhav looking at her surprisingly.. she realises what she was doing?? she composes herself
(then in a low tone) Woh ye chot kese lagi apko??(there were tears in her eyes)
MADHAV- (notices her tears) Manu..??
MANU-Kuch nahi bolege aap...bas.. (tears roll down her cheeks)
Aaap apna dhyaan nahi rakh saktey hain na madhav...kyu karte hai aap esa..(she snobs) agar apko kuch hogya to hum...
MADHAV-(cutting her) Manu hum thik hain...tum ro kyu rahi ho?(he lifts her face )
MANU- kuki...kuki hum buddhu hai...(she hits him)
(she goes all silent ...and starts dressing it) after a second..
"Kuki hame apke chot se bahut dard hota hai" (She looks at her with teary eye)
Madhav wipes her tears lovingly... "Hum thik hai..." (in a low tone) "Jab tak tum thik ho hume kuch nahi hoga manu.."
Manu looks at him lovingly...then she composes herself...
MANU-Hume chalna chahie.. apna dhyaan rakhiyega ...aur dubara agar ese chot lagai na..to thappaddd...(she stops in mid) Woh.. hum ...hum fir apki shikayat bade raja se kar dege...(she makes a pout face)
MADHAV-(smiling) Achaaa? (manu nods in yess)
[she begins to go..when madhav calls her..manu stops at gate without turning to him..]

MADHAV- "Tum janti ho na manu.. Hum tumse bahut pyar karte hai...khud ki jindagi se bhi jada..
aur tumhe apni PATNI maan chuke hai...
Aaj kuch lakeerein reh gayi thi hamare bich..(he takes a deep breathe and rest his head on his bed corner)
Mujhe intezaar rahega us din ka jab tum bhi hamre rishtey ko apnaogi... Us din shayad mai hamare bich ki har lakeer ko mita duga...TUMSE HI PYAR KIA HAI..AUR HAMESHA TUMSE HI KAROOGA..."
[MANU turns to look at him... being guilty not to accept their relationship.. not to love him back..to break his heart everytime..to choose pain in both of our lives..tears flow from her eyes... and she leaves]

[TO BE CONTINUED...]


[NOTE- HELLO FRIENDS🤗 I AM BACK WITH THE THIRD PART...
SO PLZZ PLZZ READ IT AND GIVE UR MOST SPECIAL TOMATO-EGG WALA FEEDBACK..😆 THOUGH I TRIED TO MAKE IT LITTLE ROMANTIC... DUNNO HOW SUCCESSFUL I WAS...😕 OKAY WELL YOU HAVE TO READ IT TO FIND THAT..AND LET ME KNOW😳]

PS- Thanks to sweta for asking and reminding me to update🤗
I haven't reviewed it..so if there's any mistake plzz forgive me.
Edited by ammu92 - 9 years ago
vyoman thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Visit Streak 90 Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 9 years ago
#28
Awesome...👏👏perfect for the present mood...👍🏼
Edited by vyoman - 9 years ago
dreamyrose thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#29
wow ammu that was so amazing plus the way you have described madhav's pain was heart breaking 💔
loved it do continue soon 😊
ammu92 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 9 years ago
#30

Originally posted by: Iqraa17

Wow wow wow u rock yaar . Perfect hai ye.. itnaa suspense create kr dya hai yaar . Agy ka b jldi se post karoo



Awww..thankeww dear 🤗
I have updated.. Plzz read and let me know 😳

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".