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Wooowww! Loved it once again! I actually have many many things to say this time, and sorry for the rambling in advance.Firstly, I wanted to tell you that I think your writing is truly versatile. I really like how you used an omniscient POV to summarize everything that happened over the year in a concise, yet effective manner.I can definitely say that all your effort paid off. Are you sure you have never taken a Creative Writing class before, or are you just a natural? You seem to always know when to shift POVs, include conversation, description, change tone, etc. to create the desired impact. I've read many fanfictions before, but I don't think I've ever paid as much attention to every word written as I have with yours. I usually tend to focus more on the combined scenes of the main protagonists, but that is not the case with your story.Though different from the others, this part is superior in its own way. There aren't as many emotions on the surface, as you mention, but you still feel the underlying currents anyway, and that is your success as a writer!You know what, if you find the idea appealing, I think you should send this to the CVs. Your writing is far superior in my opinion and it may even give them some ideas for future tracks and a gist of what the fans expect. Who knows, they may even use parts of it. I've indeed seen it happen on other shows where ideas from india forums have been directly used, but I believe those CVs regularly visit india forums, which I don't think is the case for the CVs of YTG. I don't know if anyone on this forum has tried contacting the CVs or the production house Cinevistas, but you could surely give it a shot if you like the idea. I think you could also publish this story on Wattpad to gain more visibility.And finally, if there is any improvement at all that you can make to your writing, if you choose to send it (though I love it the way it is), it would probably be to include more Hindi dialogues. Yet, your writing is already so descriptive that I'm translating the lines to Hindi in my head as I read, so I never feel the lack of it, and I am sure all the other readers of this story feel the same. In fact, an interesting thing is that I was convinced that you had written Hindi dialogues until I went back and reread some parts, and was actually surprised that you had not. Lol!Great job once again, and don't forget to update soon! I'm sure your next part will be even better. :)
Thank you so much for giving your review in such a detail. It is wonderful for writer to receive such a comment😊. I am a techie who finds solace in writing.. I write with characters that connect me.. This show led me that connection with these characters thus started writing for them.. Actually writing this part was tough because as you said that emotions were underlying not forefront.. and thats reason I chose to keep third viewpoint especially for both Shan and Asmita.. It was deliberate choice to move story forward more.. 😊 , I am really touched with your comments on my story, it encourages me further to write 😊. I will try to publish this in wattapad with slight modification , not sure about sending to Cinevistaas , I am writing it for show fans and myself .. I am glad that people are enjoying it here .. As a writer I get my due there..😊
About dialogues in Hindi , I can that feedback for upcoming chapters , thank you so much.. will keep it in mind..
You can call me Riti😊
Anupamaa
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