MishBir OS + Snippets (Surprises - pg13) - Page 2

Originally posted by: coolove

Oh woah

That was intense, I particularly loved the build up of tension and the conclusion

You really wrote so well, I also love the way you add different variations to the characters

It really makes it so enjoyable to read

Thank you and please keep writing 😊

Thank you. I just wanted to add a different flavour to their characters and spice up the whole scene. It works at times. I am glad you enjoyed. 😊

Originally posted by: srilotus

Unres

Amazing 👍

Something very different from the show.

I liked the way you described the physical tension between Abir and Mishti.

"Pinning him with her furious eyes" my fav sentence.

Thank you. Well the outlines are very much similar to that of the show. I just added an element or two in each on of their characters. And it helped to create this scene.

I am glad that came out well.

@bold: thank you.

Originally posted by: socioboss9797

Loved this! The way the tension built up with the air of mystery was perfect! Please continue this one. I'd love to see Mishti and Abir interact on the business deal.

Thank you so much. Glad the whole thing played out well enough to be enjoyable. I take that as a complement. Though I am not sure if I can continue this or not. But you wanting to read a continuation for this means a lot. Thanks. :)

Originally posted by: Aanchal15

It’s a pulcritude 👏.. loved the gradual build up of the intrigue quotient and then the unraveling was beyond words .. also liked how you have altered Nanu- Abir equation (I adore it btw ) from the show and presented it as Nanu- Kunal.. liked A and M ‘s ripostes .you are an adept raconteur .. would love to read a sequel to this part

Thank you. I am glad you liked it.

@bold: Nanu and Abir's equation is unbeatable. And I personally adore it. One reason, why I had the trio at Maheshwaris and not Meenu along with the rest. 😂

Who said it's just Kunal and Nanu. The trio can take turns. This time unfortunately, it's Abir's turn to face the shorter end of the stick. 🙈

I like it when two people are quick with counter attacks. 😁 It depicts a lot about the characters.

Woah! That's a huge complement. I am honoured. But I believe, You have really praised me more than what I deserve. Thank you though.

I am not sure if I can pull of a sequel to this. Don't really have an outline I can come up for this right now. Might have to rake my brains to do that. But still not sure if a sequel or continuation would work for this.

You all willing to read a sequel to this makes me really happy. Thank you so much. :)

I want a sequel to this... please 😃

Originally posted by: Onyourface

I want a sequel to this... please 😃

You too? 🙈 Why?

Alright. Let me try and think of something. But it might end up as a snippet. If that works. Then I will go ahead and attempt it.

Originally posted by: ShenzK

You too? 🙈 Why?

Alright. Let me try and think of something. But it might end up as a snippet. If that works. Then I will go ahead and attempt it.

Originally posted by: meen123

I think we'll be happy as long as you give us anything

That's sweet. I guess, then I will have to work out something.

Originally posted by: ShenzK

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Wow.... finally finished it. Intense one haan...

Beautifully written. I loved it. It's so different from our show.

Keep writing dear.

Do continue, interesting concept