OS.. sinking( today’s epi)🤓

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Day 3


Suhasini- 2 din hogaye hai swarna surekha ne kuch nahi khaya..


Swarna- haan maaji.. mene jese tese thoda khana kaal raat ko khila diya tha woh bhi bohot muskil se..


Suhasini- baat hi aisi hui hai.. bechari ka halak se khana utar bhi nahi raha hoga..


All the ladies were in the hall near the kitchen discussing everything and gents were sitting in the sofa tensed having no words to say.. Lisa was there today as Manish and Suhasini wanted Akhil to appologize to her

Vedika- main ek baar phir try karti hoon..

Naira- akela chodhdo unhe abhi.. uhne time chahiye thoda.. settle hone do( she said that without even looking up.. with a blank face)

Vedika got furious.. did she just interfered in her words... her matter..Again.. she was just going to speak ...but

Suhasini agreed to what Naira said..


There was a thud sound of door opening.. it was Surekha..she looked pale.. lifeless and weak due to crying continiously for these days...

A ray of hope evolved in everyones heart and they ran towards just to see her with a suitcase..


Manish- ye kya hai Surekha.. kaha jarahi ho.. rakho niche ye bag

Swarna- ye kya bachpana hai Surekha.. hum sab hain na tumhare sath.. ek ki galti ki saja hum sab ko kyun de rahi ho..yesa mat karo please

Suhasini- surekha.. suno tum chinta mat karo.. main baat karungi akhil se achhe se daatungi.. tum chaho to usse sab riste tod dungi.. main janti hoon mera beta galat hai.. usi ki galti hai.. hum pe bharosa rakhho Surekha..

Kartik- chachi please.. mat jaiyee.. hum nahi rehsakte aapke bina.. aap hume chodke jayengi.. aapni family ko.. aapne bete ko???

Vedika- chachi please... jaldbaazi mein step mat lijiye..


Everyone was saying something or other to persuade Surekha to stay but Naira was mummm... like she was caged in her own chain of thoughts.. she could hear everything but her body was not reacting.. she was sitting in the same position as she was for last 2 hours..


Surekha tried to move but everyone was blocking her literally holding her..


Surekha- Jaane dijiye mujhe... please..


Swarna- nahi.. kahi nahi jaogi tum.. wapas chalo kamre aur baat karo mujhse.. chalo.. dard baaton apna surekha.. tabhi to halka hoga..

She said holding her hand..

Surekha instantly snapped her hand away..

Su- please dd.. maine kaha na jaane dijiye mujhe..

Suh- Akhil ki galti ki saja hame mat do Surekha.. hume iss umar ye din mat dikhao.. hamare bete ki galti ki saja jo tum bologi woh dedo.. magar iss ghar ko mat chodo.. ye tumhara bhi toh ghar hai..

Manish- Surekha.. ye ghar tumhara hai.. hum tumhare ap...surekha cut Manish sentense in middle...

Surekha- dumm ghuthta hai mera yaha bhaisab..

They family’s continious rant went silent..


A lone of tear escaped Naira’s controlled eyes.. she was going through the dreadful night again..


Surekha- main iss ghar main Akhil ki biwi ban kar aayi thi maaji.. uski ardhangini bankar.. humne saath jine marne ka.. ek dusre ka saathdena ka waada kiya tha.. maine haar kadam mein unka saath diya.. aache mein bure mein.. chahe mujhe unki baat sahi lagi ya galat.. har mod pe unke saath chali.. main unke ghar ko apna sansaar samjha.. unke pariwaar ko apna..unke jimmedari ko apna kartabya.. aur ye sab.. (she was so broken.. crying heavily)

Kaatne ko daud rahe hain iss ghar ki diwarein( she said in between her sobs).. haas rahe hain mujhpe

Main ek pal yaha nahi reh sakti.. main maar jaungi..

And she started walking again..


Right in Akhil came in..

Akhil- Surekha.. please.. mujhse galti hogayi..paap hogaya.. par please tum mat jao.. tum maaf bhi mat karna mujhe.. mujhe manzur hai.. paar yese mat jaao.. tum chaho toh main chala jata hun iss ghar se.. magar tum mat jao surekha..

Bachho k bare mein socho.. please..


Surekha could not hold it..

Aapne kyun nahi socha Akhil.. kya woh sirf mere bache hain.. kya ye sirf mera rishta hain.. aap mujhe rokne ka haaq kho chuke hain.. ghinn aati hai mujhse aappe aur aapne aap pe bhi ki kabhi hamare bich pyaar tha..kyun Akhil.. kyun kiya aapne aisa... aapne maara hai mere pyaar ko.. hamare rishte ko..


The last lines from Surekha hit kartik right on his head🙄


That pain.. that anger he has seen it before.. in Naira.. the was then calculating the situation.. he turned to search Naira around and found her in the same spot blankly looking at the floor.. his heart was sinking as the words from surekha were sinking in his head..

He was snaped out of his chain of thought by a little push by the crowd as Surekha moved forward with her bag...


Akhil was desperately pleading her not to go..he was kneeling down holding her legs snaching her bag.. but Surekha was determined..

Akhil was asking for help but noone was letting him touch them.. then he saw Naira on the corner

He ran towards Naira.. everyones focus shifted to her.. nobody had yet realised that she had not even once tried to stop Surekha

Akhil- Naira..beta.. i knowmujhse bohot badi galti hogayi.. but plz roko na apni chachi ko.. woh tumhari baat magengi.. ( he pulled Naira and forced her to walk to the crowd) Naira.. samjhao na chachi ko.. main chala jaunga.. kabhi sakal nahi dikhaunga..but bolo chachi ko ki woh ruk jaaye.. bacho k liye.. mansi k liye.. luv- kush k liye..

Naira only reacted when akhil mentioned luv-kush’s name.. she raised her tearful eyes to meet similar eyes.. she could see herself in Surekha and it was haunting her.. she was shaking a bit but still she managed to utter few words

Naira- chachii..... mat jayiye..that was all she could manage


Surekha bursted out..

Surekha- dusron ki baat alag hain Naira.. par kam se kam tum toh ye mat kaho.... she said with holding her arms.. Naira could no longer meet eyes with Surekha or may be she was scared to see herself in Surekha.. Surekha hugged her and cried more loudly..

Surekha- ye kya hogaya Naira.. ye kyun hogaya.. meri kya galti thi...

Naira- koi galti nahi thi aapki chachi.. aapne aap ko dosh mat dijiye plz.. galti unki hain..

Surekha- magar saja toh mujhe mil rahi hain na..

Naira started weeping..she cupped crying Surekhas face and tried to console her.. however she knew that nothing matters at this point but she still gave a comforting hug to her

Naira- i know chachi.. bohot takleef hoti hain.. but yese himmat mat hariye.. atleast apne bachho k liye.. isme unki kya galti.. aapko strong banna hoga.. aur kisi k liye nahi.. mansi aur luv kush k liye..i know difficult hoga.. par plzz.. himmat mat hariye..

Surekha- nahi Naira.. main haargayi hoon..hargayi main

Naira- No.. hare chachu hain.. galti unki hain.. haara unka pyaar hai. Unka rishta..aap nahi..

Surekha calmed a bit

Suhasini came in..

Suh- aab chalo.. andar..aaram karo..

Surekha- nahi maaji.. main yaha nahi reh sakti.. iss ghar main mere aur akhil k yaadein hain.. main zinda nahi reh paungi yaha.. main mar jaungi..

Kartik was continiously looking at Naira how she was emotionless at that situation like she is here and her soul is visiting her past.. her panful eyes though were scaring him.. they were showing him whats he done.. he knew his question was dreadful and so was his condition after she left.. but how was it for Naira.. his sight shifted to his chachi who looked now emotionless to and her eyes.. her eyes looked so much like.. Naira’s





So guys one more OS.. i am just wishing that current track would be somewhat similar to this rather than saas bahu drama..thappads..and nafrat and all but fingers crossed but i somehow feel CVs brain are on vacation so aajkal kuch bhi chal raha hain.. but i m happy the trp is slowly going down..👍🏻

I am sorry i am not putting part2 for my OS its because i am not getting much comments.. i want to know how u guys feel abt my writing.. so plz do comment.. i need encouragement guys🥰🥰

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jannatsara thumbnail
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Posted: 6 years ago
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As usual amazing...do u know I am waiting for ur story "sinking another part" ...plz update that...I wanna see kartik's mental state after leaving of kaira and kairav.

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Wow 👏this was so good. I hope cvs or whoever reads india forums reads this.

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Posted: 6 years ago
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U know u are so talented ur OS's are bang on as to what people want to see but cv's are not showing.

Just love reading ur stories. Keep writing and 🤗

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: jannatsara

As usual amazing...do u know I am waiting for ur story "sinking another part" ...plz update that...I wanna see kartik's mental state after leaving of kaira and kairav.

Updated part 2 just now..thanks for ur encouragement🥰

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: tikit

U know u are so talented ur OS's are bang on as to what people want to see but cv's are not showing.

Just love reading ur stories. Keep writing and 🤗

Thank you so much😍☺️🤗

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: Fireiswithinus

Wow 👏this was so good. I hope cvs or whoever reads india forums reads this.

Honestly.. i write these OS so may be someone in the CVs team could read it and know that we as a viewer are not happy with what they are showing😢

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Beautifully written... Wish they showed this in the show instead of the utter crap they are giving us these days.. your stories are a solace these days... Please do continue it...

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