A story of sorts - Resumption #yrkkh #kaira #singhanyasiblings

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Carol Mathew

@MonsterCookie

Beginner

Posted: 8 years ago

Hullo , I'm Carol 😊 and I'm new here in IF.

I'm not great at introductory speeches, so without further ado, I present to you my writing.

I welcome all constructive criticism and hope this is an enjoyable read.

I apologise for any unintended offence against anyone, and thank you for bearing with my writing, which cannot hold anything next to some other amazing works I've seen here.

I hope to find friends here, and look forward to the response to my first official post.

The possible ships I would like to portray are Naira-Gayu, Karthik-Naira, Singhanya siblings ... and if it develops into a possible storyline, crossed fingers.

😳 I welcome all tips to improve.

RESUMPTION - (n) the act of resuming or beginning again.

~Naira~

A girl sat inside the Pooja room, arranging flowers, lighting incense... but her mind was far too cluttered to have been focused only on prayer. There were too many problems in her life. Too many unanswered questions revolving around in her head. She loved him with all her heart, he loved her more than his life, but was that enough?

~Gayu~

She stared at her parents photo. Would they be proud of her? She looked at her mami's photo, her second maa. She thought about her sisters and her brother, everything that has happened. Through the moments of happiness they were celebrating, why were these members of their family missing? Were they more precious to heaven than to us?

Edited by MonsterCookie - 8 years ago

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@...Penknife...

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Posted: 8 years ago

Hello and welcome to IF.

I'm nandini and I'm absolutely intrigued by the prologue.

You've managed to build up a why and how feel and I think that's amazing

Looking forward to reading the rest.

Cheers

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beatsdongandy

@beatsdongandy

Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

welcome carol..liked the prolouge but since u welcomed criticism i m doing one.this girl seems to b gayu n i m not fond of starting a story with a supporting character than the character who ll lead the story.u could hv created a suspense abt the eye of the story n introduce her later but the introduction suspense was needed.hope u wont mind 😊 i explained what i felt.

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Carol Mathew

@MonsterCookie

Beginner

Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ...Penknife...
Hello and welcome to IF.
I'm nandini and I'm absolutely intrigued by the prologue.
You've managed to build up a why and how feel and I think that's amazing
Looking forward to reading the rest.
Cheers

Hello Nandini , thank you for the welcome 😊

To be honest, I have been a silent reader for a short while now, so I'm not completely new I guess.

Thank you for your beautiful review. My heart literally soared at my first review.❤️

I hope I won't disappoint .

Edited by MonsterCookie - 8 years ago

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Carol Mathew

@MonsterCookie

Beginner

Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: beatsdongandy
welcome carol..liked the prolouge but since u welcomed criticism i m doing one.this girl seems to b gayu n i m not fond of starting a story with a supporting character than the character who ll lead the story.u could hv created a suspense abt the eye of the story n introduce her later but the introduction suspense was needed.hope u wont mind 😊 i explained what i felt.

Thank you, for the welcome and your honesty. I appreciate it. 😊

And I get what you mean.

I had meant to present two point of views, Naira's and Gayu's , but I might have not been clear with it, after reading through it again I understand that.

Edited by MonsterCookie - 8 years ago