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Posted: 16 years ago
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guys this is the first time im writing anything.i was really inspired by nasco ff and one shot!!!so im writing this and all of you r welcome to comment or criticize.
so here it is:
akshara was cooking in the kitchen at naitiks house as they are married.bhabhimaa,gayatri,rashmi and nandini have gone to some temple.rajshekhar and daddaji have gone to work.but naitik is still asleep as he has taken off from his office.but then he wakes up because of some noise.then after waking up he looks for akshara everywhere but couldnt find heršŸ˜›but then he sees her in the kitchen cooking.šŸ˜‰šŸ˜‰naitik suddenly holds her from behind by the waist and pulls her to him.akshara is shocked because she wasnt expecting it.then he drops her paloo 😳 and puts her hair back which comes on her neck while turning.then he starts kissing her on the neck passionately!!!😃😃.akshara can feel his hot breath on her bare neck and is enjoying itšŸ˜³šŸ˜‰.then he looks at her and kisses her on the lips.she also kisses him back and after that naitik lifts her up and takes her to the bed.after some time akshara realises that she had kept the food on the gas for cooking.when she goes to the kitchen and sees that the food is all burnt!!😭😭.she tells naitik about it and he says after kissing her that 'dont worry we both will make it together'😊😊.naitik helps her in the kitchen.both enjoy making food together.naitik keeps on kissing her while she is chopping the vegetables and then again when she is stirring the food.šŸ˜³šŸ˜†.when the food was ready they go to the bedroom and enjoy each others company.after sometime bhabhimaa and everybody comes back and really like the food made by naksh!!😃
hope you all like it!!
sorry for the mistakes!!

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pls press the like button if u like it...😳 šŸ˜› 😃..thankyou
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Very nice...liked it dear..cont soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Dream on guys, Naitik won't dare even look at Aksh let alone touch her at home, plus Aksh too would be too timid to go anywhere with him in the middle of the day...
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Posted: 16 years ago
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guys was it so bad?!?!!? only 3 comments?
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Posted: 16 years ago
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it is really a great oneshot!!šŸ‘šŸ¼
thnx for writing one because i love readinf ff's and oneshots.
im floored that u got inspired by me!! ā¤ļøbut i don't think im a good writer.
but anyway i just liked ur oneshot.šŸ‘

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: nasco

it is really a great oneshot!!šŸ‘šŸ¼
thnx for writing one because i love readinf ff's and oneshots.
im floored that u got inspired by me!! ā¤ļøbut i don't think im a good writer.
but anyway i just liked ur oneshot.šŸ‘

ya im rlly inspired by u!!!i love ur ffs and one shot!!just waiting to see more and more and more!!and u r a very good writer!!who said dat ure a bad writer!!!u r simply great!! partlybecause of ur ff i fell in love wid naksh!!!srsly😳😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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It is really very nice šŸ‘šŸ¼
NakshšŸ˜
Keep on writing more it will improve ur writing skills😊

@ Nasco: U r a very gud writer yaar I m not getting time to read ur ff but I really miss it nd I will take out time soon😊😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey drishti.......it was awesome dear.....it was lil short......bt it was stilll nice...naitikz eyes r alwayz lukin 4 aks.....n he keeps on kissin her wen she choppin d veggies...how sweet!!!!!!!!!!!........n they make food together...WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!.....keep writin more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sanayaa

It is really very nice šŸ‘šŸ¼
NakshšŸ˜
Keep on writing more it will improve ur writing skills😊

@ Nasco: U r a very gud writer yaar I m not getting time to read ur ff but I really miss it nd I will take out time soon😊😊


its ok yar!!
but please do read when u have time coz ur a good critic!!

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Posted: 16 years ago
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it was really gr8 drishti..keep writing more

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