Phone call after last episode

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Samaina may not be able to talk over phone after last episode last scene. But what could they talk if they could talk actually. I thought about it and have written down something. Please forgive my hindi as it's not my mother tongue.😊

Here it goes


The scene starts from the last episode where Sameer remembers Naina after waking up from truama sleep----

Sameer ran and ran until he found the phone booth. He didn't know how did he pass the path. Once he fell down on the road on the way. His hand was bleeding. But he didn't notice it. He closed the phone booth door, put hand in his pocket. Yes, there were some coins there inside. He slipped a coin in the phone box and dialled Naina's house number.

Naina didn't know how did she reach home. She paddled her cycle all the way to home like her life depended on it. She was panting high on the door of her house. It was mid-noon. Chachi was taking a nap in her bedroom. None else was seen in the house. Right the to her shock the phone rang twice...stopped...rang again twice.

She just knew that it was Sameer.

N - Hello (she said picking the phone, trembling voice)

S - Naina... Naina ... Nanaji... (His voice breaking..)...unhone kaha tha ki woh kabhi mujhe chodkar nehi jayenge...😭

N- Sameer, I am sorry... I am sorry... (crying)... I am sorry Sameer... I am Sorry... I am sorry...😭

All this while she was only saying sorry and crying. Sameer also started crying

S- Naina... maat rou... Naina... chup ho jao...(saying while he himself is crying)

N- I am sorry Sameer... Mujhe tumhara saath hona chahiye tha.. Mei kaise tumse dur tha..Jab ki tumhe meri sabse jyada jorurat thi...

S- Naina Nanaji jaate jaate bhi tumhare hi baare mei keh gaya. Woh hamei ashirvaad deke gaya.

N- Aur mei unse akhri baar mil bhi nehi paya. Farewell tumhara intejaar karte raha

S- Mei farewell ke liye nikla tha. Nanaji ko kaha tha ki tumhari bohot saari pictures khichungi aur unhe dikhaungi.

N- Jab ki farewell mei, mei unki di hui saari pehenke intejaar karte raha.

S- Par mei wapas ghar gaya kiyuki mei camera lena bhul gaya tha. Aur tab dekha... Nanaji... aur mei unhe hospital leke gaya...aur wapas ghar nehi laa paya.😭

N- Sameer...😭...aur mei itni buri hu ki mei timse gussa thi ki tum mujhse milne nehi ayi... ek baar bhi nehi socha ki tumhe meri jorurat ho sakte hai... tum akele...kaise...😭

S- Aur mei Nanaji ke jaane ki gaam mei aise goom ho gaya ki tumharei baarei mei ek baar bhi nehi socha aur yaha Delhi kaise chala aya pata hi nehi chala. Jaise mei kahi so gaya tha. Abhi abhi jaga hu. Kaisi ho tum Naina...

N- Tumhara iss halat mei mei kaisi houngi! Meri khushiya toh tumhara saath chali gayi hai.

S- Aur mere chaaro taraf toh maano ki andhera chaa gaya hai. Kab mei tumhe dekh paungi Naina!

...

p.s. I never write os/ story so please forgive my lame attempt. Just read for the sake of it, as I just wanted to share.😳

Adding a lil more as Nia wanted me to add some goodbye ending:
Sameer could not finish his talk "Kab mei tumhe dekh paungi Naina..."

To make this worse the phone line cuts...His coin finishes...and he does not have any more coins to continue the call.

Sameer looks on at the phone and Naina continues, "Sameer...Sameer"...

Her voice went on a little high. She didn't notice taiji was on the door and was listening to her with wide eyes.

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Sameer got out of the phone booth and started walking towards home. But no, that was not his home. He doesn't have a home here. The home he had, was left in Ahmedabad and all the dear ones too there.

He just wanted to take a bus and go to Ahmedabad right now. But for now he can't. He has to go to this so-called home for now and think ways to contact Naina again. First he has to find a pharmacy to put medicine in his wound. In this condition he can't go home.

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'O bai' taiji shocked at the door thinks... toh yeh Naina Bholuraam se baat kar rahi thi... 😲 ... Kya yeh dono... nehi, nehi... aisa nehi ho sakta. Mujhe iss phonenpe najar rakhna hoga...

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So, this was it.šŸ˜›

Through me the feedback how was it.😳

Wishing all a happy Monday.šŸ¤—

We all love Monday. šŸ˜†

Laizu ā¤ļø
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Niakhush thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice one dear...if posb continue this conversation ek goodbye tak!!!!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Niakhush

Nice one dear...if posb continue this conversation ek goodbye tak!!!!

Thanks everyone.
I have the next concept in mind already.
They can't say goodbye as the phone cuts coz his coin time and coins for phone finishes.
Sameer had to go back home. And try other ways.
But I am not expert writer so stopped there šŸ˜†
Edited by smiley_lizi - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: smiley_lizi

Thanks everyone.

I have the next concept in mind already.
They can't say goodbye as the phone cuts coz his coin time and coins for phone finishes.
Sameer had to go back home. And try other ways.
But I am not expert writer so stopped therešŸ˜†


oh OK his coins get over n phone cuts...good so there conversation is left in between!!

Whd want to know what will sameer do nw!!


Write soon!!!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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It was so emotional dear😭... Just like how they would talk... I so want their phone conversation to happen.. Thanx for this Laizu.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: angelic567

It was so emotional dear😭... Just like how they would talk... I so want their phone conversation to happen.. Thanx for this Laizu.

Aww, could I really make it like just how they would talk!
I too wanted their phone convo to happen like this. 😭

Thanks to you too dear.
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Posted: 7 years ago
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aww this was soo emotional!
but I hope they show a phone call exactly like the one u wrote!
everything was perfect ā¤ļø šŸ‘ 😭
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Posted: 7 years ago
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nice imagination Laizu! 😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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good conversation Laizu šŸ‘
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thanks everyone.šŸ˜›
I added a little more in the main post as Nia wanted me to add a goodbye note. 😳

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