Ok Zarin (@kaamchorni) ..let me begin wid my comments for u.
Firstly i love d fact dat d OS starts wid Ruhi and Shravu 😃🤗 den i feel a bit saddened for realising wats happening on d show currently..wid ruhi staying away from the family and shravan..
Then as i move further.. omg so eloquently written! my fav lines:
Ruhi put her hands on her hips, her eyebrows furrowed into an angry frown. omg how cute is dat, i can totally imagine d scene! 😊
Confused, Shravan looked up from his jigsaw but when he saw the wrapper on the floor, he quickly drew himself up to his full height, all three feet and seven inches of him... when it came to chocolate, battle lines are always and immediately drawn. - oh god! 😆😉 choo cute!
n den oh god i can totally imagine Shravan(Bhavesh) speaking "chudaya" instead of "churaya" 😆😆
Her eyes zeroed in on a large piece of the jigsaw but Shravan, well acquainted with Ruhi's fighting techniques, was already running out of the door and into Patti's house. 😆😆
So it was Ishita who ate d chocolate (n later d cake too!) 🤣 🤣
And then as i move further..omg how beautifully hv u sketched d story n fit d things together..wat an imagination girl 👏 And how sweet is d story! I havnt read something like dis on d forum ever! 😃
and dis part: as Raman found out upon his return to the table, there is something quite simple yet infinitely more important to be said about women: they get whatever the hell they want. 😆 too good!
n den her nightmare 🤣 🤣 tht even reminded me of Ishita's Kolavari Di scene on d show 😆 😆
Wat a brilliant, unimaginable take on d scene. Overall, really well done! 👏 👏👏
n d last lines:
The silence lulled her into a dream-like state and just when she thought he'd fallen asleep, she felt him shake with... laughter?!... For a few seconds, he tried very hard to contain his laughter but after a while, all she could see were flashes of his teeth. 🤣 🤣
I am so glad u took part here..we are discovering some brilliant writers on d forum here day by day! 😃
Edited by peace.. - 10 years ago
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