Something Wonderful - Ishra TS [Part 2 - Page 6]

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ankitasen

@ankitasen

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#51

awww... simple, cute and brilliant.
Loved the way you paced and orchestrated your story. Very well written.
Is it the end? If so, it's perfect ending.
If not, I'm eagerly waiting for the next.

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N.R.Rona

@N.R.Rona

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Posted: 10 years ago

#52

Wowww... 👏 👏 Beautiful..mind blowing...

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-Srishty-

@-Srishty-

Sparkler

Posted: 10 years ago

#53

Ah this was bliss! Seriously this just made my day, I feel like my heart is going to explode with happiness.

I don't know from where to start, I LOVED everything: the way you penned their characters, their insecurities, fears, understanding with each other and especially their LOVE.

Raman's talk to Toshi I felt like a huge burden was lifted from my shoulders, I was that engrossed in the story.

This is trully something wonderful and perfect👏

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Pooja

@Divan.Pooja

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#54

Such a lovely update! You are a wonderful writer

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rutu83

@rutu83

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#55

this was absolutely lovely- and the end was such a delight!

loved it

pls pm me next time you write :)

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Nivriti

@agreatperhaps

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+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#56

I loved the ending a lot. Very subtle.

I am sort of glad there was no showdown or any drama of any sorts, just plain sorting out and confession.

Well, the confession came in as a spur in the moment, and I am delighted to read it. You spelled it out wonderfully. Kudos to you!

Thanks a ton for sending me the PM, and whenever you write anything new, let me know. ;)

Love,

Niv

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Ms.Bholi_Bhaali

@Ms.Bholi_Bhaali

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Posted: 10 years ago

#57

beautiful... 😳

very well written

i luvd every bit, especially i luvd raman-thoshi convo, not wht thosji said but puttar's 😳

can i assume tht this was not the end, i'm expectng one more part

kyunki dil maange more...

i hope u can understand

thanku for this piece...😛😳

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Anuhyaa

@Anuhyaa

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Posted: 10 years ago

#58

You guys are really very encouraging...
Your feedback means so much to me...
A Big Thank You to each & every one...😊🤗

This is only a two-part story...If I extend it , the next part would be the Big C ...which I know I cannot pull it off...So Iam leaving that for your wonderful imaginations...😳

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Rohit kumar

@rnarayan

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Posted: 10 years ago

#59

Lovely update and very heart touching

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khushi

@khushi_shankar

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+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#60

Nice update!

I really appreciate your effort and I like story.

Please note that I am not trying to be rude or hurt your sentiments in any way shape or form. When my feedback is asked, I really wish to give my honest answer.

I used to be very shy to voice my true opinion on this forum but since I have more than 250 post on this forum, I think I should be more of myself now.

So, my honest opinion is that his short seems to have a very abrupt ending. I really wish you would have shown the feelings of both Raman and Ishita. (I appreciate the concept, so I wish that it was executed in a better way.)

Ishita in part 1 seems to be so affected and in part 2 this mostly vanishes. She must be going through some turmoil or something within her.